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hey, kann jemand gut Englisch und würde mir den Teil meines Comments bitte korrigieren und gerne auch verbessern. Ich schreibe in zwei Tagen meine Klasur in Englisch, deswegen wäre es toll, wenn es jemand, der gut englisch kann, für mich korrigieren würde.

Many people think that the globalization destroys the world. In my opinion, i would disagree with this, because I think that the globalization has positive and negatives aspects / influences, which I would like to include in my Arguments. In the following i'm going to talk/ write about my cons and pros Arguments.

Firstly the globalization is bad for there environment, because it is affects the climate change in a negative way. Another contra argument of globalization are defined by the economic despondencies. For this reason, many countries can not longer supply themselves. German, for example, can only produce a very small proportion of consumers goods independently. Moreover Germany depends on the production of consumer goods for basic needs. However should there come war, strikes, or even environment disasters in these important countries, it can happen that the basic needs of Germany are no longer covered. Should the necessary supplies in the export industry accutually fail to materialize, the economy could also collapse. From this point of view, it can be doubted that this pronounced dependence on imports will have any peacemaking effects. Furthermore the Globalization, also has negative impact of the environment. With so- called environment dumping, the global wooing for investors and capital is emerging, with environmental protection being clearly neglected. Factory relocation is not always due to lower wages in other countries. The strict environmental regulations also mean that many factory locations have to be relocated to China. For this reason, globalization is not only considered a factor in worldwide wage dumping, because environmental protection is also considered a disruptive cost factor i global location competition. The worldwide dumping competition is also reflected in the energy supply. So it's happens that the demand for cheap nuclear power id constantly increasing, which is why the production of nuclear power is being expanded, despited the risks. Moreover my     next contra argument of globalization is the loss of identities. This is contributed by the globally operating companies, which ensure a uniform appearance with the branches, stored and subsidiaries that always look the same, people are not only presented with a desirable lifestyle, but also a kind of compulsion to brand awareness is promoted. However, since tge aspired consumption can nie be exercised in a personalized way, it inevitably leads to a loss of identity.

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Ist mein essay über die Globalisierung gut?

Hey, könnte jemand eventuell mir Verbesserungsvorschläge oder Tipps zu mein essay geben? Ich will halt nicht, dass es zu „denglish“ klingt. Danke im Voraus!

Ich sollte schreiben, wie Globalisierung mein Leben betrifft/beeinflusst.

Hier mein Text:

Globalisation affects my life in many different ways. First, through the globalisation i got the chance to connect virtually with people everywhere through social networks. The modern technology allows me to call people, chat and even facetime with them. That’s how i made friends in the few past years. the best thing about it is that i actually can contact people all over the world so that means i have to speak in a world language , wish is the english language. this may also help me to advance my english skills. 

However in a globalised world news is spread instantaneously and simultaneously so whatever happen all over the world i have the chance to be informed about all of it in a very short period of time. 

But the globalisation also has a negative affect to my life. Because the world is facing a lot of problems that has a deep impact on the planet. A few problems are for example the global warming, deforestation, water pollution and deletion of the ozone layer. Since the world is facing these problems i have to live in sustainable way so i can save the environment. for example i try to reduce buying paper or plastic products or eat more fruits and vegetables and less meat and fish. 

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