Denkt ihr diese short story ist mir gelungen?

Hallo ich schreibe am Donnerstag eine Englisch Klausur und habe deshalb diese short story über das Bild oben geschrieben zur Übung. Hätte jemand Lust sie durchzulesen und mir zu sagen was ich besser machen könnte? ( ich habe jetzt nicht auf Rechtschreibfehler geachtet aber wenn sie jemandem auffallen wäre das nett sie mir zu sagen)

I knew it was a dumb idea to play spin the bottle with them, but how could i know i would end up alone in the forest. In tears, i walked through the shadowy forest. I could`nt get the voices of my schoolmates out of my head. The forest was such noiceless that all i could hear was the laugh of my schoolmates in my head. „Oh poor baby, you wanted to kiss him,am i right?“ the voice in my head said. „Shut up!“ I screamed and run disoriented through the liveless forest. „I regretted going to this halloween party. I got such an ugly little red hood costum and my hair is such a mess, meanwhile every other girl at the party looked perfect. Why am i so dumb that i thought he would even notice me.“ i yelled at myself. I was`nt paying attention were i was going and all of sudden i fell over a rock and rolled down a hill. My head started hurting and my knee started bleeding. I was sitting shocked on the bottom of the hill and feeling dizzy. I couldnt hold it any longer, i started to cry and yelled things at myself with a trembling voice:

„I didnt expected to get lost alone in a forest after i run away from the party just because Jeremy had to kiss a girl while playing spin the bottle. Now im sitting in the middle of nowhere and got injured. Nobody is going to search for me. Im so pathetic.“

After a while i heard somebody calling my name: „Jade! Jade! Where are you?.“ I answered: „Here!“ The person was coming closer and even in the dark forest i could see it was Jeremy. He run towards to me and hugged me closely. While he was huggin me he said with a trembling voice: „I was searching you for hours. I saw you were running in the forest alone and i was worried about you.“ My heart started beating very fast. I asked him: „Why didnt you stay there with all the other girls?“

He answered in an angry voice: „Did you thought i would stay there because of them? They are talking badly about me behind my back. I wanted to go there because my friend said you would be there.“ He leaned over me and kissed me. „I know i should have asked you this before, but do you want to go on a date with me?“ he said. I was too stunned to speak. With wide open eyes i stuttered: „Y-yes“ As i wanted to stand up, he noticed my bleeding knee and said: „You are injured very bad! Why have`nt you told me? We need to stop the bleeding immidiatly! Lean on my shoulder we should walk back.“ After we reached the house Jeremy shouted: „Jade is bleeding badly we need help!“ Jeremy laid me on the sofa and all of sudden i fell asleep.

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Arbeit, Englisch lernen, Text, school, Aufsatz, Englisch-Deutsch, englische Grammatik, Englischunterricht, Grammatik, Rechtschreibung, 10. Klasse
Ist das eine gute persuasive essay (Englisch Ersatzleistung Klasse 7 )?

Why you should play tennis 🎾

 

Tennis is a wonderful sport and I think more people should  play it. There are many reasons why people should play tennis. The first reason is that tennis is a great way to make new friends. You can easily go to the park or a tennis court and just ask someone if she or he would like to play some tennis with you and become friends with her or him. Another important thing is that tennis is a lifetime sport. I’ve seen 65 year old people still playing pretty well. Think about it this way, when you are old would you rather spend your hole life in front of a small window in a retirement home ? Or would you rather enjoy your life, by playing tennis and having fun? You’re probably still thinking that tennis is like any other sport and and that it’s nothing special. But do you know that tennis reduces stress. People who play tennis can deal with physical, mental and emotional challenges, which also helps to deal with stress. Soccer players can also deal with physical problems but they can’t deal with mental and emotional challenges. Because as a soccer player you are in a team and sharing the pain with the others. Tennis players are on their own and if they lose it's their fault.  Not the fault of the others, only their own fault.  It's like when a soccer player gets the blame from the hole team for losing the match. I also play tennis. I love this sport because after you have lost you work even harder than before and whether your next match is a loss or a victory you will feel the hard work you put into it. Tennis not only strengthens your mentality, it also makes your body stronger and you can live longer, get fitter and improve your hand eye coordination through this sport.  An hour of singles play can burn 580-870 calories and if you have 3 hours of training every week, you will even live longer! The fifth reason to play tennis is that tennis improves your brain power. it has been proven that the more you repeat an activity, the  stronger the neural connections in your brain will become. So when you play tennis, for which you need critical thinking and quick movements, you are improving your planning, tactical, agility, and coordination skills. Finally, the most important reason is that tennis teaches you a lot of lessons. Every tennis match is a small life lesson. It teaches you about hard work and how to believe in yourself. Through independence , endurance, confidence and determination, tennis teaches you how to be successful. I hope my text persuaded you! And hopefully I’ll see you on the tennis court one day!

Sport, Arbeit, Englisch, Schule, Tennis, Text, school, English-Grammar, Hausaufgaben, Essay, Ersatzleistung
Speech in English?

Kann mir jemand bei dieser Rede von Obama weiterhelfen? Also was ist eure Meinung zu dieser Rede?

Das wäre sehr nett, danke :)

For as much as government can do and must do it is ultimately the faith and determination of the american people upon which this nation relies. It is the kindness to take in a stranger when the levees break, the selflessness of workers who would rather cut their hours than see a friend lose their job which sees us trough our darkest hours. It is the firefighter courge to storm a stairway filled with smoke, but also a parents willingness to nature a child that finally decides our fate.

Our challenges may be new. But those values upon which our success depends-hard work and honesty, courage and fair play, tolerance and curiosity, loyalty and patriotism-these things are old. These things are true. They have been the quiet force of progress throughout our history.

What is demanded then is a return to these truths.

What is required of us now is a new era of responsibility - a recognition, on the part of every American, that we have duties to ourselves, our nation and the world: duties that we do not grudgingly accept but rather seize gladly, firm in the knowledge that there is nothing so satisfying of the spirit, so defining of our character, than giving our all to a difficult task.

This is the price and the promise of citizenship.

This is the source of our confidence - the knowledge that God calls on us to shape an uncertain destiny.

This is the meaning of our liberty and our creed - why men and women and children of every race and every faith can join in celebration across this magnificent mall, and why a man whose father less than 60 years ago might not have been served at a local restaurant can now stand before you to take a most sacred oath.

Englisch, Freunde, school, Analyse, Oberstufe, speech

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