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Ein Comment auf Englisch schreiben

Hallo, ich soll in Englisch mein erstes Comment schreiben. Es wäre supernett, wenn ihr euch es mal durchlesen könntet. Über Verbesserungsvorschläge( also Formulierung oder Rechtschreibung oder auch noch einen Pro/contra Punkt den ihr wichtig findet oder etwas anderes) würde ich mich sehr freuen ;) Das Thema das wir vorgeschrieben bekommen haben war: Rules in our everyday life

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Rules are a very important thing in our life. I believe it´s very important to discuss this topic. For everything in our life we have rules, for example speed limits or curfews. But, are we too obsessed with safety in our everyday life? Or have we got too few rules?

Rules for speed limits for instance are very important. If there are not rules for that, life will change. Everything will be very dangerous. Everybody would drive as fast as they want and there would be more accidents.
Another pro is, that without rules you will early be dead, there will be too much risk in our everyday life.
But there does not only exists pros, on the other hand there are also cons. Without the rules we will have more freedom. We would have much more fun with fever rules.
Secondly there are too much rules for teenager. It is tempting to break them and the teenager can not have so much fun as without rules, because they are not allowed to stay all the night long at partys or to go late in the cinema.

To my mind, most of the rules are very important in our everyday life and we have not got too few rules and are not obsessed with safety.

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Kann jemand meinen Englisch Text verbessern?

Hi, also im Folgenden seht ihr einen Text in Englisch. Ich wäre euch sehr dankbar, wenn ihr ihn korrigieren würdet. Es kann sein, dass ihr viel korrigieren müsst, das tut mir dann sehr leid.

Every day many students drive to school by bus. One ticket almost costs two euros. And when you have to take the bus both rides that are almost four euros. Every day! That's why I would like to comment on if school busses should be free? In my opinion they should be free but let me show you my point of view so that you understand my opinion.

On the one hand busses are already overcrowded and when bus rides become free, probably more kids drive with them instead of getting brought by their parents. And then maybe not everyone fits in the bus. That's another point which should be changed. There should be more busses for students. But that is to big to also talk about now. Possibly when school busses become free more kids drive with them instead of driving bike and then they get un- athletic. But it's very important that children be athletic for stay healthy. On the other hand when no one is brought specially it's ecofriendly and that's a big point why school busses should be free. A disadvantage of driving with the bus is that the school busses often are too late so students come too late to school and that's why some students get brought because they don't want to come too late. This argument speaks against that more children drive with bus, but it is possible to change that. Also it should be considered that students have to come to school independent of money. Some families don't have the money to pay the bus, but their children have to come to school anyway. And when they are dependent to the busses because they can't come to school otherwise, but there isn't enough money for the bus, they have a problem and that's another reason why I have the view that school busses should be free. Also for families who can pay the bus tickets, it's inadmissible to pay because there is compulsory schooling.

To sum it all up I think that school busses should be free because of all the arguments that have been counted. Of course the busses, the bus drivers and the gas have to been payed but the government could pay that. When the cost is too high, the tickets could be cheaper at least. But the existing prizes are too high to pay every day.

Danke für eure Hilfe!

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