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Hallo,
ich mache bald meinen Realschulabschluss und habe aus einer alten Prüfung eine Aufgabe bearbeitet. Sie hieß: d) Stay healthy - Doing sport is the only way to keep fit and healthy. Do you agree? Discuss the statement. Write a contribution for a discussion board
Könnt ihr euch bitte mal meinen Text zu dieser Aufgabe durchlesen und beurteilen auf Grammatik Rechtschreibung?
und auch die Fehler eventuell nennen und verbessern
Danke
3 Antworten
Hallo,
es sind eine Reihe verschiedener Fehler enthalten. Es geht schon damit los, dasa ein contribution kein Meinungsbeitrag ist.
Nach der Anrede gibt es damit in den ersten vier (4) Zeilen schon jeweils einen (1) Fehler.
Für eine Korrektur wirst du dir aber schon die Mühe machen müssen, den Text hier reinzuhacken. So ist eine Korrektur viel zu mühsam und aufwändig!
AstridDerPu
Hello guys.
here is dena and in this contribution share my opinion to the topic "stay heathy" with you.
Do you agree that doing sport is
the only way to keep fit and healthy? I alsolutly agree this fatement! For me is the heath the biggest important point of my life. In my free time I do sports myself. I drive for example almost every day with a like to school. The school
way is five kilometres long and since them
I ride with the bike I have notice that my endurance really better is. Furthermore I try
to do 10 000 steps per day because in myopinion keep it fit. Moreover I know that sport the support the flexibility of the body and reduces fat. On the top of that do sport avoid diseases like heart diseases or cancer. This were few reasons to do sport to keep the body fit but for me is also the nourishment so important. Then for me can we humans our body keep fit and healthy through a mix of both. Therefore I would advise you to do at least enough steps per day but the best is if you do regulary a kind of sport that makes you fun. The another important point is balance of a good nourishment. So and now I would be happy if you tell me your opinion. Do you agree me ?
Im Großen und Ganzen ist das in Ordnung, aber paar Fehler sind schon drin. Hier eine korrigierte Version deines Textes:
Hello guys,
here is Lena and in this post I share my opinion on the topic of "staying healthy" with you. Do you agree that doing sports is the only way to stay fit and healthy? I absolutely agree with this statement! For me, health is the most important point in my life. In my free time I do sports myself. For example, I ride a bike to school almost every day. The school route is five kilometers long and since I ride the bike I have noticed that my endurance has really improved. Furthermore, I try to do 10,000 steps per day because in my opinion it keeps fit. Moreover, I know that sports support the flexibility of the body and reduce fat. On top of that, sports avoid diseases like heart diseases or cancer. These were a few reasons to do sports to keep the body fit but for me nutrition is also very important. Then in my opinion we humans can keep our body fit and healthy through a mix of both. Therefore, I would advise you to do at least enough steps per day but the best is if you regularly do a kind of sport that you enjoy. Another important point is a balanced diet (less fat, sugar...). So now I would be happy to hear your opinion. Do you agree with me? Bye and let me know.
Yours Lena
Ich finde du hast ganz gut geschrieben und deine Handschrift ist echt schön!