Ist der Songtext so ok?
Hallo Leute. Habe einen Songtext auf Englisch geschrieben und suche jemanden der mir diesen korrekturliest und gerne auch Verbesserungsvorschläge bezüglich des Ausdruckes macht (am liebsten natürlich ein Native Speaker :D) Dies ist er:
I'm waiting for the last day in earth
Screaming out loudly
How can this be -
Possible
I dont know how to fix it again
When the last day on earth has come
Ill pack my things and remember all I've done
Done to prevent this
To make the people believe
In each other
In their brothers
In our world itself
I'm walking down
This lonely road
On my back
There is a heavy load
Im walking through the ruins of our nation
Observing the ashes
Of our civilisation
Breathing in fire
Breathing it out
Trying to let it
Out of my mouth
Searching for someone
But i won't find anyone
To ever stop my pain
And to gain
Some more happyness
In this world
Full of loneliness
Moving towards its bitter end
Im walking down
This lonely road
On my back
There is a heavy load
Im walking through the ruins of our nation
Observing the ashes
Of our civilisation
How could this happen
How couldn't I stop this
I wanna grab my weapon
And just shoot it all down
Shoot down the unfairness
Shoot down these demons and regress
To better times
When the men seemed to be wise
Once ago
When our world seemed to grow
Im walking down
This lonely road
On my back
There is a heavy load
Im walking through the ruins of our nation
Observing the ashes
Of our civilisation
Danke schonmal :)