Englisch-Article?
Wie findet ihr diesen Article in Englisch? Die Fragestellung war:
- what does your school do against climate change
- what is hard about it
- what do you do personally against it
Is the environment important for your school?
Have you ever thought about the importance of the environment? Usually, schools don’t care enough about this topic, but it does not have to be like this. Our commercial college tries to make the world a better place.
Our school organizes several activities like collecting litter. Furthermore, we save energy by replacing light bulbs with energy-saving lamps and we turn off the heating and the lights when we don’t need them. Another important aspect is that we can visit some very interesting lectures about environmental change.
But it always sounds easier than it is in reality. We have to give up a lot if we want to succeed. We are not allowed to print out a lot of texts; we have to make sure that our computers are powered off if we don’t need them. I also have to mention that we try to make as few emissions as possible even when we go on a trip. For example, we try to avoid planes and prefer electric vehicles.
But we can never do too much for the environment. That is the reason why we should also care about it in our free time like I do. I only buy organic food, never drink from plastic bottles, and I do not wrap my food in plastic. Last but not least, our daily routine has to change too. Not every student can drive a car to school. We should use public transportation instead or found a carpool.
So, in conclusion, what are the key points to bear in mind if you want to save our planet? To sum it up, three things are important: don’t waste electricity, avoid plastic, and make use of public transportation. On the one hand, it is not always easy to live an eco-friendly life. On the other hand, it is worth it because we can all benefit from a healthy planet.
1 Antwort
Also, es gibt paar Sachen, welche ich persönlich anders schreiben würde, aber insgesamt finde ich den Text super.
Alles nur meine Meinung & meine Sichtweise!
1. "But it always sounds easier than it is in reality."
klingt irgendwie merkwürdig
"But it always sounds easier than it actually is."
2. Konkretere Beispiele angeben
"Our school organizes several activities like collecting litter"
Ist sehr kurz formuliert. Klar ich kenne die vorgegebene Länge nicht, oder was genau eure Schule da tut, aber man könnte schon ein bisschien präziser schreiben
"Our school organizes various activities such as litter clean-up campaigns on the school premises and in the surrounding area."
3. "But we can never do too much for the environment. That is the reason why we should also care about it in our free time like I do."
Mich stört das "like i do" ein bisschien xd
"But we can never do too much for the environment. Therefore, it is important that we also take care of it in our free time, as I personally do."
4. Wiederholungen
"(...) from *plastic* bottles, and I do not wrap my food in *plastic*."
vllt irgendwie verbinden & hinzufügen, dass du anstatt dieser Plastikverpackungen eine Aluminim Brotzeitbox verwendest
5. Ich würde vllt zu beginn kurz darauf eingehen, WARUM es eigentlich so wichtig ist darauf zu achten. Ja, es steht in der Fragestellung nicht drinnen, aber vllt weckt es etwas in dem Menschen sich wirklich dafür einzusetzen xd bzw. es zielt ja eher auf Schulen/Schüler/Lehrer ab
6. Den Teil finde ich iwi verwirrend:
"Not every student can drive a car to school. We should use public transportation instead or found a carpool."
Liegt u.a. daran, weil mein Vokabular nicht besonders groß ist (carpool?), aber warum erwähnst du hier, dass nicht jeder Schüler mit einem Auto zur Schule fahren kann?
Es geht ja darum, dass eben Autofahrten wegen dem rießen co2 Ausstoß gemieden werden sollten.
7. "(...)we can all benefit from a healthy planet."
Hier wieder zum 5ten Punkt, warum?
Was sollte denn schon so schlimm daran sein, wenn wir unseren Planeten zerstören..
Ich meine ja nur, nicht alle Menschen sehen was los ist und eh ja egal :')
