Englisch, Summary schreiben! Hilfe!
Hallo (: In ein paar Tagen schriebe ich eine Arbeit in Englisch übers "summary schreiben" ich habe jetzt eine geschrieben nur kann die mir keiner korrigieren, da dacte ich, ihr könntet mir helfen. Danke im vorraus. Lieben Gruß! :) (Namen der autorin hab ich mir ausgedacht ;)) SORRY DAS ES SEHR LANG IST!
The story 'Only a game' written by Elizabeth Smith, is about Robert and Tom, who are on a trip to Funland, Trocadero. As Robert and Tom arrive in Trocadero, they decide to go to Funland. The two boys are really excited and Tom proposes to try out a virtual reality game. Robert joins him and they are putting on the helmets to start the game. Robert and Tom chose to play in year 1888, the time when 'Jack the Ripper' killed very much people. Robert gets scared. It is getting to realistic to him because they can smell dead fishes, feel cold bricks and suddely a shadow comes near them. Robert is afraid. He assumes that 'Jack the Ripper' comes after them. But they are lucky: the shadow is just the shadow of a flower girl, whose mother was the last victim of 'Jack the Ripper'. Tom throws his arms around the girl and suddenly they hear a man shouting. He says that Tom should get off the girl and the rest of the people who arrive, are thinking that the two boys are the murders, who killed all the people. Tom and Robert are afraid and they are taking off their helmets to leave the game. But nothing changes. They are still in the game... or has it become reality?
hier meine Korrekturen nach einem ersten, flüchtigen Durchlesen:
The story 'Only a game' written by Elizabeth Smith kein Komma is about Robert and Tom, who are on a trip to Funland, Trocadero. As Robert and Tom arrive in Trocadero, they decide to go to Funland. The two boys are really excited and Tom proposes to try out a virtual reality game. Robert joins him and they put on --- helmets to start the game. Robert and Tom choose to play in the year 1888, the time when 'Jack the Ripper' killed very many people. Robert gets scared. The game is getting too realistic for him because they can smell dead fish, feel cold bricks and suddenly a shadow comes near them. Robert is afraid. He assumes that 'Jack the Ripper' comes after them. But they are lucky**, it** is just the shadow of a flower girl, whose mother was the last victim of 'Jack the Ripper'. Tom throws his arms around the girl and suddenly they hear a man shouting. He wants Tom to get off the girl and the other people arriving think that the two boys are the murderers, who killed all the people (welche Leute???). Tom and Robert are afraid and take off their helmets to leave the game**, but** nothing changes. They are still in the game... or has it become reality?
Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Tipps und Wendungen zu englischen Summaries findest du unter folgendem Link:
Das hast Du sehr schön geschrieben!
Hier auf die Schnelle einige Verbesserungsvorschläge:
-they put on their helmets (finde ich nicht "dramatisch" genug fürs Progressive)
-too realistic for him
-fish (fishes wären verschiedene Arten von Fischen)
-... Ripper is coming after them ("dramatisch")
-the people who have arrived at the scene think (hier kein Progr. bei "think")
-take off their helmets (siehe oben: put on ...)
Vielleicht habe ich noch etwas übersehen. Die Korrekturen ändern aber nichts daran: Das hast Du gut gemacht.
The story 'Only a game' written by Elizabeth Smith, is about two boys, Robert and Tom, who get caught in a virtual computer game in Funland, Trocadero.They arrive in Trocadero and decide to go to Funland. The two boys are[---] excited and Tom proposes to try out a virtual reality game. Robert joins him and they put on [---] helmets to start the game. Robert and Tom choose to play in the year 1888, the time when 'Jack the Ripper' killed a lot of people. Robert gets scared. The game becomes too realistic for him because they can smell dead fish and feel cold bricks. A shadow comes near them. Robert is afraid. He assumes that 'Jack the Ripper' comes after them. But [---]: the shadow is just the shadow of a flower girl whose mother has been Jack the Ripper's last victim . Tom throws his arms around the girl and [---] they hear a man shouting. He says that Tom should get off the girl and the rest of the people who arrive think that the two boys are the murders, who have killed all the people. Tom and Robert are afraid and they take off their helmets to leave the game. But nothing changes. They are still in the game... The reader doesn't know if the game has become reality?
1) dein Einleitungssatz enthielt nicht das "Problem"; eigentlich muss du auch noch scheiben, wann die Geschichte veröffentlich wurde
2) verwende niemals present progressive tense
3) für Vergangenes nimmst du present perfect; past war hier o.k. weil eine Zeitangabe (1888) gegeben war
4) vermeide alle "erzählerischen" Elemente wie : "suddenly" oder die offene Frage am Schluss
Englisch Comment Fachabitur Meinung
Hallo zusammen ,
Das Thema ist: Internet usage must be cut down to prevent addiction and misbehavior!
Ich würde mich über eine Kritik freuen :)
introduction soll ca 200 Wörter betragen Haupteil ca 300 Wörter
Nowdays it is hard to imagine that we could live without the internet.People all over the world use the world wide web.Internet makes life easier.In many jobs you cant miss it .But the world wide web does have drawbacks.A lot of joung people spend much time at working .They are surfing in social networks or play games for example World of Warcraft. The danger of the internet is that young people get might addicted fast. Studies prove that adolescend teenager are spending avernge 12 hours per day, They neglect their friend and hobbys. For these people there exist clinics. But these happening apply not just teenager. Alot of adults are addicted too.They cant stop work.They are called Workaholics. They need to check their emails all the time.They cant make the difference between work an finishing time. The target groupe of persons are teenager between 14 and 24. The internet advance is steady, The question is where esodic it us. Must be the internet usage cut down, that we dont get addicted?
On the one hand people get addicted by playing PC. It change their life. They prefere the Pc and neglect their friends and hobbies,Second the teenager are addicted from the smartphones. Without them they would been stuck.The communication is a lot of easier with them.You can write messages in a second and dont need to write letters, Its much more confortable.Another aspect is,that people who are addicted show the same syndrom like alcohol- and dependent drug users.Teenager who focus on the gaming are main targets.They are faster addicted.On the other hand a lot of jobs would not exist without the internet.They are dependent on it,For example journalists could not research that easy, Another reason is that a lot of people looking for satisfaction in the internet. They dont have a real life. In the www you can relieve stress or bad mood. In conclusion you can say that i dont think the internet usage needs to cut down. The people need to learn to handle their consumption. Some people are addicted of the internet.They need to visit clinics or try to find new hobbies for example gym or football. They teenager should be controlled by their parents. They need to have an eye on them. Teenager arent find an end,if the start play online games.So parents can install timers on their PC.If adults are addicted , they better search a professional clinic . They can help them.Its inportant to say, that the Pc dont make generally addicted. Its all depending on the user. The targets are often people who are alone and dont have friend or any hobbies.
Locker 160 Summary
Eine weitere Summary: Fehler, Verbesserungsvorschläge?
The short story 'Locker 160', written by Lee Busselman deals with two girls called Karen and Julie who bully their classmate Miriam by playing tricks on her. Karen gets the idea of putting a hate note in someones locker. The other gir, Julie agrees. They coose the locker of their classmate Miriam. Both of them do not like her, because in their opinion she is just different. When they want to put the note into the locker, none of the girls want to do it themselves. Karen takes the paper anyway, put it in the locker nervously and walkes away with a pleasant feeling of relief. Then they watch Miriam's reaction, her face turns red, and both of the girls have to laugh. The next days they play other tricks on her. Karen and Julie put a plastic bag of marbles in Miriam's locker, which were clattering down the hallway, they make a voodoo doll of Miriam with a hug pin it's head and they also write a petition, which declaires that Meriam is weird and hated by all of her classmates. Below this note they copy the signatures of their classmates from a real petition. For Julie and Karen all this tricks are just funny. Later while they are waiting for Miriam's raction to their last trick, in biology class, they ask themselves, why she would not come to school. At the end of the lesson they find out that Miriam tried to commit suicide, but for them this is just funny and they do not even feel guilty.
Klassenarbeit The über The Giver ( englisch)?
Hey, ich schreibe bald eine Englischarbeit über das Buch The Giver. Wir sollten wissen wie man ein Summary schreibt, Connectives und wie man normal einen Text schriebt. Wie kann ich mich am besten noch vorbeireiten? Vokabeln für die Arbeit habe ich gelernt. Oder weiß vlt. jemand was vlt. drankommen könnte?
Bin 9. Klassenstufe
Hallo könnte wer mein englisch Referat kontrollieren?
What is factory farming ?. Factory Farming is a way of producing meat and other animal products quickly and cheaply. The animals are kept in small cages. They get special food, so they are growing faster. The main products of this industry are meat, milk and eggs for human consumption. Advantages: Cheaper prices With the use of factory farms, the prices of food became very cheap. The main reason for this is that the food can be processed very fast. Also, the food for the animals is very cheap, because they buy it in mass orders. Enough animal products for the market Factory farms use vitamins, minerals, and other substances that make animals grow faster and so they can produce much more food. Big farms also have modern tools which helps to produce meat, milk, eggs and other products very quickly and in an efficient way.
Disadvantages: Very bad living conditions In many factory farms the animals are kept in small cages, where they don’t have any space to walk around and do what they naturally do. The animals are usually kept indoor, so they don’t get any fresh air or sun. The cages are not cleaned as often as it is necessary, so the living conditions for the animals are very bad.
Bad for people’s health Factory farms are bad for people’s health in two ways. One of these is the pollution what they produce, which harm the health of the people who are living next to them. The other way is through the antibiotics that they give their animals to make them immune against illnesses. These can be transmitted to people from the meat and other animal products.
Small farming businesses haven’t a chance against factory farms Many factory farms are owned by corporations, who have the possibility to buy modern tools, equipment and larger spaces for the animals. They’re able to sell their products at a lower price. Smaller farms usually don’t have the resources to buy faster and bigger machines and therefore they can’t compete with their larger rivals.
Hilfe englische Facharbeit!
Hallo Leute also ich muss meine Facharbeit nächste Woche abgeben und habe meine Einleitung gemacht, aber ich weiß nicht ob die oke ist und ob ich Fehler habe.. Fände es echt seeehr nett wenn ich korrigieren würdet :D
This Facharbeit is about the book Brick Lane by Monica Ali The main topic is the role of Fate in Nazneen´s struggle for self-determination. I chose this topic, because i think Fate is a serious topic for some people and i wanted to deal closer with this. Especially the view of other cultures interested me. I want to understand why other people think the way they think. In our society there are different views of everything and Fate is a topic about what you can talk so long. I am going to specialize of the role of Fate for the eastern people,Nazneen and the other characters in the book. For this first i am going to analyse what general fate means. Then I will deal with the role of fate in the book. At the end i am going to do a comparison about the view of fate with Nazneen and me. This comparison is good because you can see the difference of the view from a girl who was born in Europe and a girl who comes to Europe with eigtheen. This aspects are important and I chose them because I think they are the main aspects to understand what fate means for Nazneen and because Fate has a significant role in this book I think you must understand the role of Fate to understand Nazneen.
Referat Englisch London Trocadero Funland (7.Klasse,Noten,Englisch)
Hey, ich muss ein sehr kurzes Referat auf Englisch halten über das Funland Trocadero und brauche eure Meinung dazu weil dieses Referat sehr wichtig für meine Zeugnis Note ist. Ich freue mich über jede Meinung :) Hier mein Referat:
I want to talk about the Funland Trocadero.The Funland is a part of the London Trocadero.It's in the near of the Piccadilly Circus.November 2007 the Funland was opened.You can play games like Funland Lazerbowl,Starcommand,Segaworld and other games.It is a popular touristattraction.July 2011 it was closed.That's the end of my presentation.