Englisch, Summary schreiben! Hilfe!
Hallo (: In ein paar Tagen schriebe ich eine Arbeit in Englisch übers "summary schreiben" ich habe jetzt eine geschrieben nur kann die mir keiner korrigieren, da dacte ich, ihr könntet mir helfen. Danke im vorraus. Lieben Gruß! :) (Namen der autorin hab ich mir ausgedacht ;)) SORRY DAS ES SEHR LANG IST!
The story 'Only a game' written by Elizabeth Smith, is about Robert and Tom, who are on a trip to Funland, Trocadero. As Robert and Tom arrive in Trocadero, they decide to go to Funland. The two boys are really excited and Tom proposes to try out a virtual reality game. Robert joins him and they are putting on the helmets to start the game. Robert and Tom chose to play in year 1888, the time when 'Jack the Ripper' killed very much people. Robert gets scared. It is getting to realistic to him because they can smell dead fishes, feel cold bricks and suddely a shadow comes near them. Robert is afraid. He assumes that 'Jack the Ripper' comes after them. But they are lucky: the shadow is just the shadow of a flower girl, whose mother was the last victim of 'Jack the Ripper'. Tom throws his arms around the girl and suddenly they hear a man shouting. He says that Tom should get off the girl and the rest of the people who arrive, are thinking that the two boys are the murders, who killed all the people. Tom and Robert are afraid and they are taking off their helmets to leave the game. But nothing changes. They are still in the game... or has it become reality?
hier meine Korrekturen nach einem ersten, flüchtigen Durchlesen:
The story 'Only a game' written by Elizabeth Smith kein Komma is about Robert and Tom, who are on a trip to Funland, Trocadero. As Robert and Tom arrive in Trocadero, they decide to go to Funland. The two boys are really excited and Tom proposes to try out a virtual reality game. Robert joins him and they put on --- helmets to start the game. Robert and Tom choose to play in the year 1888, the time when 'Jack the Ripper' killed very many people. Robert gets scared. The game is getting too realistic for him because they can smell dead fish, feel cold bricks and suddenly a shadow comes near them. Robert is afraid. He assumes that 'Jack the Ripper' comes after them. But they are lucky**, it** is just the shadow of a flower girl, whose mother was the last victim of 'Jack the Ripper'. Tom throws his arms around the girl and suddenly they hear a man shouting. He wants Tom to get off the girl and the other people arriving think that the two boys are the murderers, who killed all the people (welche Leute???). Tom and Robert are afraid and take off their helmets to leave the game**, but** nothing changes. They are still in the game... or has it become reality?
Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Tipps und Wendungen zu englischen Summaries findest du unter folgendem Link:
Das hast Du sehr schön geschrieben!
Hier auf die Schnelle einige Verbesserungsvorschläge:
-they put on their helmets (finde ich nicht "dramatisch" genug fürs Progressive)
-too realistic for him
-fish (fishes wären verschiedene Arten von Fischen)
-... Ripper is coming after them ("dramatisch")
-the people who have arrived at the scene think (hier kein Progr. bei "think")
-take off their helmets (siehe oben: put on ...)
Vielleicht habe ich noch etwas übersehen. Die Korrekturen ändern aber nichts daran: Das hast Du gut gemacht.
The story 'Only a game' written by Elizabeth Smith, is about two boys, Robert and Tom, who get caught in a virtual computer game in Funland, Trocadero.They arrive in Trocadero and decide to go to Funland. The two boys are[---] excited and Tom proposes to try out a virtual reality game. Robert joins him and they put on [---] helmets to start the game. Robert and Tom choose to play in the year 1888, the time when 'Jack the Ripper' killed a lot of people. Robert gets scared. The game becomes too realistic for him because they can smell dead fish and feel cold bricks. A shadow comes near them. Robert is afraid. He assumes that 'Jack the Ripper' comes after them. But [---]: the shadow is just the shadow of a flower girl whose mother has been Jack the Ripper's last victim . Tom throws his arms around the girl and [---] they hear a man shouting. He says that Tom should get off the girl and the rest of the people who arrive think that the two boys are the murders, who have killed all the people. Tom and Robert are afraid and they take off their helmets to leave the game. But nothing changes. They are still in the game... The reader doesn't know if the game has become reality?
1) dein Einleitungssatz enthielt nicht das "Problem"; eigentlich muss du auch noch scheiben, wann die Geschichte veröffentlich wurde
2) verwende niemals present progressive tense
3) für Vergangenes nimmst du present perfect; past war hier o.k. weil eine Zeitangabe (1888) gegeben war
4) vermeide alle "erzählerischen" Elemente wie : "suddenly" oder die offene Frage am Schluss
Zwei Dinge auf einmal im Englischen verneinen?
Ist der Satz richtig? "With that, Steinbeck wants to show that black people are equal to us, and that they are not lazy and not stinkig" Wie würde man es korrekt schreiben?
Eure Meinung zu meinem Essay - Happiness
Ich habe ein Essay geschrieben und würde gerne eure Meinung dazu wissen. Auf fehlerhinweise würde ich mich auch freuen. What is “happiness”? Since of the start of the human being, people were trying to reach happiness! In the different episodes of history, there were different ways for being happy. In today's world, we have many ways to achieve our happiness which depends on the personal perspective of every individual. In general, we can say that happiness is the inner state of well-being and satisfaction.
Let's start with something people like to discuss about. Do we need a high living standard, money, expensive cars and big mansions to be happy? Many people say that money does not play any role on how happy someone is. Away from this question, we have to know first, what happiness really is. If happiness is the inner state of well-being and satisfaction, then it has to come from inside. Every individual has his own emotions, his way of thinking and spiritual values. That means that no one can really say what happiness is and what happiness is not. Back to our question, if happiness does not depends on how much money you have, rich people might also be happy because they have a lot of money. For some people money is more important then humans and they love their cars and big villas more then people with who they can share their live. Satisfaction with that what they are and what they have is it what they need to be happy.
In direct comparison to the first argument and to the first definition of happiness we can take people who have a family, wife, children, or just people who means a lot to the person. Do they have to be happy? Maybe! They can be the kind of people who thinks that he do not need a lot of things around him, but a lot of humans who love him and of course he also might be not happy like the example in the first part of this essay. He might be a “things-lover”. So happiness always comes from the inner state of people and accords to the personal perspective of an individual. In psychology it is able to influence this inner state by hypnosis. If hypnosis can look into the inner state of people and change it, happiness and unhappiness must be something that we decide. We decide, whatever condition we are in, if we are happy or not.
In conclusion happiness is like we saw by examples of two different people nothing that we an define or decide, if someone is happy or not. It is not the money we have or the family and the people around us. It is what we think we need and what we think we do not need. We can change it whenever we want from an unhappy life to a happy and beautiful life or conversely.
Locker 160 Summary
Eine weitere Summary: Fehler, Verbesserungsvorschläge?
The short story 'Locker 160', written by Lee Busselman deals with two girls called Karen and Julie who bully their classmate Miriam by playing tricks on her. Karen gets the idea of putting a hate note in someones locker. The other gir, Julie agrees. They coose the locker of their classmate Miriam. Both of them do not like her, because in their opinion she is just different. When they want to put the note into the locker, none of the girls want to do it themselves. Karen takes the paper anyway, put it in the locker nervously and walkes away with a pleasant feeling of relief. Then they watch Miriam's reaction, her face turns red, and both of the girls have to laugh. The next days they play other tricks on her. Karen and Julie put a plastic bag of marbles in Miriam's locker, which were clattering down the hallway, they make a voodoo doll of Miriam with a hug pin it's head and they also write a petition, which declaires that Meriam is weird and hated by all of her classmates. Below this note they copy the signatures of their classmates from a real petition. For Julie and Karen all this tricks are just funny. Later while they are waiting for Miriam's raction to their last trick, in biology class, they ask themselves, why she would not come to school. At the end of the lesson they find out that Miriam tried to commit suicide, but for them this is just funny and they do not even feel guilty.
Hallo könnte wer mein englisch Referat kontrollieren?
What is factory farming ?. Factory Farming is a way of producing meat and other animal products quickly and cheaply. The animals are kept in small cages. They get special food, so they are growing faster. The main products of this industry are meat, milk and eggs for human consumption. Advantages: Cheaper prices With the use of factory farms, the prices of food became very cheap. The main reason for this is that the food can be processed very fast. Also, the food for the animals is very cheap, because they buy it in mass orders. Enough animal products for the market Factory farms use vitamins, minerals, and other substances that make animals grow faster and so they can produce much more food. Big farms also have modern tools which helps to produce meat, milk, eggs and other products very quickly and in an efficient way.
Disadvantages: Very bad living conditions In many factory farms the animals are kept in small cages, where they don’t have any space to walk around and do what they naturally do. The animals are usually kept indoor, so they don’t get any fresh air or sun. The cages are not cleaned as often as it is necessary, so the living conditions for the animals are very bad.
Bad for people’s health Factory farms are bad for people’s health in two ways. One of these is the pollution what they produce, which harm the health of the people who are living next to them. The other way is through the antibiotics that they give their animals to make them immune against illnesses. These can be transmitted to people from the meat and other animal products.
Small farming businesses haven’t a chance against factory farms Many factory farms are owned by corporations, who have the possibility to buy modern tools, equipment and larger spaces for the animals. They’re able to sell their products at a lower price. Smaller farms usually don’t have the resources to buy faster and bigger machines and therefore they can’t compete with their larger rivals.
Hilfe englische Facharbeit!
Hallo Leute also ich muss meine Facharbeit nächste Woche abgeben und habe meine Einleitung gemacht, aber ich weiß nicht ob die oke ist und ob ich Fehler habe.. Fände es echt seeehr nett wenn ich korrigieren würdet :D
This Facharbeit is about the book Brick Lane by Monica Ali The main topic is the role of Fate in Nazneen´s struggle for self-determination. I chose this topic, because i think Fate is a serious topic for some people and i wanted to deal closer with this. Especially the view of other cultures interested me. I want to understand why other people think the way they think. In our society there are different views of everything and Fate is a topic about what you can talk so long. I am going to specialize of the role of Fate for the eastern people,Nazneen and the other characters in the book. For this first i am going to analyse what general fate means. Then I will deal with the role of fate in the book. At the end i am going to do a comparison about the view of fate with Nazneen and me. This comparison is good because you can see the difference of the view from a girl who was born in Europe and a girl who comes to Europe with eigtheen. This aspects are important and I chose them because I think they are the main aspects to understand what fate means for Nazneen and because Fate has a significant role in this book I think you must understand the role of Fate to understand Nazneen.
Referat Englisch London Trocadero Funland (7.Klasse,Noten,Englisch)
Hey, ich muss ein sehr kurzes Referat auf Englisch halten über das Funland Trocadero und brauche eure Meinung dazu weil dieses Referat sehr wichtig für meine Zeugnis Note ist. Ich freue mich über jede Meinung :) Hier mein Referat:
I want to talk about the Funland Trocadero.The Funland is a part of the London Trocadero.It's in the near of the Piccadilly Circus.November 2007 the Funland was opened.You can play games like Funland Lazerbowl,Starcommand,Segaworld and other games.It is a popular touristattraction.July 2011 it was closed.That's the end of my presentation.