Könnte jmd. sich meine Statistik analysiere bitte angucken?
Hallo, ich bin in der 9.klasse und schreibe bald eine Englisch Klausur, wo ich eine Statistik analysierieren muss, daher habe ich zu dieser Stastik auf dem Bild, eine analyse geschrieben und wollte fragen, ob sich jmd. diese angucken kann und schreiben könnte, was ich hätte besser machen können...? Wäre wirklich sehr nett und hilfreich!! Dankeschön schonmal im voraus:)
Meine Analyse zu der Statistik:
"This table gives us information about the amount of pocket money per week in diffrent states like Germany, Turkey and the UK. It is divided in diffrent categories: kids under 5 age, kids from 5 to 10, 10 to 15 and 15-plus. If you compare the UK with germany you can see that kids under 5, 5 to 10, 10 to 15 or 15-plus get always more money than kids in germany, which isnt really suprising because I heard from many people that things in the UK are way more expencive than things in Germany. The table also shows that in the UK kids from the age 10 to 15 get the same pocket money as kids from the age 5 to 10, which is if you compare this with kids, the same ages in Germany and Turkey really intresting, because in this states kids who are older get more money. The table you can see gives us the information that the older kids become, the more money they get and I think its because of the rising costs the older you get, I mean if you compare the costs of a T-shirt or something else for kids under 5 years and kids from 5 to 10 you notice that it costs more for the kids from 5 to 10."
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Hallo,
This table gives us information about the amount of pocket money per week in diffrent (RS = Rechtschreibung) states like Germany, Turkey and the UK. It is divided in (Präposition) diffrent (RS) categories: kids under 5 age (Formulierung), kids from 5 to 10, 10 to 15 and 15-plus. If you compare the UK with germany (RS) (Komma) you can see that kids under 5, 5 to 10, 10 to 15 or 15-plus (Wiederholung; besser zu „in allen Altersgruppen“ oder so ähnlich) get always (Word Order) more money than kids in germany (RS), which isnt (RS) really suprising because I heard from many people that things (ungenau) in the UK are way more (Stil) expencive (RS) than things (ungenau, Wiederholung) in Germany. The table also shows that in the UK kids from the age 10 to 15 get the same (Hier fehlt etwas.) pocket money as kids from the age 5 to 10, which is if you compare this with kids (Formulierung) (kein Komma) the same ages in Germany and Turkey really intresting (RS) (Formulierung), because in this (Grammatik) states kids who are older get more money.
As you can see, the table gives us the information that (Komma) the older kids become (meine Wahl: grow), the more money they get (Komma) and I think its (RS) because of the rising costs (Ich würde das verbal ausdrücken „because the costs rise …“) the older you get,
(neuer Satz) I mean (Stil) if you compare the costs of a T-shirt or something else for kids under 5 years and kids from 5 to 10 (Komma) you notice that it (Grammatik) costs more for the kids from 5 to 10." – besser: … e. g. the costs of T-shirts for … they cost more …
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert, das Kursivgedruckte überdacht werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com, für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de
Unter folgenden Links findest du Wendungen zum Beschreiben und zum Vergleich englischer Diagramme, Tabellen usw.:
https://www.ielts-exam.net/IELTS-Writing-Samples/Bar-Chart.html
http://resources.jjay.cuny.edu/erc/tutoring/pdfs/18.pdf
http://www.bbc.co.uk/skillswise/factsheet/ma37grap-e3-f-comparing-data-using-bar-charts
englisch-hilfen.de/en/words/charts.htm
eslflow.com/describinggraphstables.html
AstridDerPu
Dankeschön :) hat wirklich geholfen!!!