Kann mir bitte wer diesen Text anschauen?

Kann mir bitte wer diesen Text anschauen und sagen warum so vieles falsch ist was eigentlich nicht falsch ist? Es handelt sich dabei um ein Artikel 4 Klasse Oberstufe

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22.04.2025, 16:30

das wäre die Angabe gewesen

Fast fashion has made trendy clothes cheap and easily accessible. However, this convenience has come with significant effects.

in your article you should address the following aspects.

Environmental Consequences
Social Impact on workers
Consumer Behavior

Write about 300 words.

3 Antworten

augsburgchris

22.04.2025, 16:36

Warum du so viel falsch gemacht hast kann ich dir leider auch nicht sagen. Eventuell solltest du mehr englische Texte lesen. Was ist denn deiner Meinung nach nicht falsch? Auch schlechter Ausdruck ist ein Fehler. "but they became not so much payment for that what they do" toppt übrigens echt alles. Ausserdem bist du auf den ersten Punkt absolut nicht eingegangen. Da steht nur: "Ja, beeinflusst die Umwelt" Aber kein Wort davon wie.

Tannibi

22.04.2025, 16:39

Da kann man der Klasse mal erklären, was ein
"false friend" ist.

augsburgchris

22.04.2025, 16:40

@Tannibi

ja als schlechtes Bespiel gibt der Text echt viel her. I became a dog last week.

rqniklas

22.04.2025, 16:31

Sehr aggressive Korrektur. Klar, ein paar Rechtschreibfehler, aber manche Sachen findet der/die Lehrer/in scheinbar einfach anders besser.

Woher ich das weiß:Hobby – Bücherwurm

AstridDerPu

Von gutefrage auf Grund seines Wissens auf einem Fachgebiet ausgezeichneter Nutzer

Englisch, Englisch

23.04.2025, 08:54

warum so vieles falsch ist was eigentlich nicht falsch ist?

Alles, was der Lehrer angestrichen hat, ist falsch. Es wurden sogar noch Fehler übersehen, z. B. workes statt workers, conditinous statt conditions, exemple statt example, knownledge statt knowledge, ...

Allerdings hätte der Lehrer ein bisschen weniger aggressiv markieren können.

In der (vierten Klasse?) Oberstufe sollte man zumindest zwischen den false friends (become - get; hole - whole) unterscheiden können.

Schau dir neben den false friends auch noch mal die Grammatik, insbesondere die Verbformen, Zeiten, die Unterschiede to / too, less / little, countable und uncountable nouns und den Gruppenplural noch einmal an.

AstridDerPu

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