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Every school should demand school uniform
In some countries all over the world school children have to wear uniforms the color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.
In my opinion school uniforms ind schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.
School uniforms are on the one side good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of theme haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case the school uniform is very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.
On the other side pupils cant find our style and have to wear clothes that they don’t wanted. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,It quickly becomes boring .However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy again and again, too.
On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.
I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style. Cause the bully is not reduced by a school uniform.
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In some countries all over the world, school children have to wear uniforms the color (AE) scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries, pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. Satzbau / Word Order
In those countries, it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms kein Komma because they (wer???) are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay, I want to discuss the advantages to introduce (Präposition + Gerund) school uniforms world wide.
In my opinion, school uniforms in (Präposition( schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style (Stil) and they can't (in der Schriftsprache keine Kurzformen) decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.
School uniforms are on the one side good (Satzbau) because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of them haven’t (Verneinung mit do not) enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case, the school uniform is very practically (Adverb) and maybe a good problem-solving (Wortfehler).
On the other side, pupils cant (siehe oben) find our style and have to wear clothes that they **don’ t (siehe oben)
School uniforms can be nice but not every day.,It quickly becomes boring.
However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive (kein Komma) always to buy a school uniform.
Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an (Wortfehler) again and again. We must take into account that school uniforms might be expensive, (Komma) but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy (past participle) again and again, too.
On the other hand, if the pupils wear school uniforms, there is not a difference between rich and poor wem ???.
Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
In my opinion school uniforms have positive and negative points. A positive/negative point is that
.....not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.
-> missverständlich für mich.
On one side School uniforms are good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of them haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case school uniforms are very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.
On the other side pupils can't find their style and have to wear clothes that they don’t want. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,it becomes boring quickly.
However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy it again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school are not cheaper and they have to be buied again and again, too.
On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.
I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style, because bullying is not reduced by a school uniform.
Übernehme keine Haftung :-)) Aber ein paar gröbere Fehler sind auf jeden Fall ausgebessert.
In some countries all over the world pupils have to wear uniforms. The color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils are allowed to wear the clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wear one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.
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Many people think that teenagers need rules. Some of them do not agree with it. Do teenagers really need rules? In the following comment I will discuss whether rules are necessary or not.
First of all, they get used to it when the parents have certain rules or when parents forbid the children something, because at some point they don't feel like arguing anymore or they realize themselves that it is wrong.
Moreover, they also learn where the limits are and that you just can't pass and ignore it. For example, having a boyfriend at 15 or 16 is not important, because it quickly puts them in the role of an adult. It may be too stressful, so they can't handle the consequences of their doing.
In contrast to this, children at this age become very emotional and become jealous of friends who may have a boyfriend. They may hate their parents for not being allowed to have a boyfriend.
On the one hand, teenagers must learn to take responsibility and take care of themselves. They also have to learn to know the difference between right and wrong.
In conclusion one can say that rules aren't important for the teenagers, because they have learned how to take care of themselves. But teenagers can seem disrespectful, because they don't know their own limits anymore and think that they can do it better than parents, which represent my opinion about the topic.
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What is factory farming ?. Factory Farming is a way of producing meat and other animal products quickly and cheaply. The animals are kept in small cages. They get special food, so they are growing faster. The main products of this industry are meat, milk and eggs for human consumption. Advantages: Cheaper prices With the use of factory farms, the prices of food became very cheap. The main reason for this is that the food can be processed very fast. Also, the food for the animals is very cheap, because they buy it in mass orders. Enough animal products for the market Factory farms use vitamins, minerals, and other substances that make animals grow faster and so they can produce much more food. Big farms also have modern tools which helps to produce meat, milk, eggs and other products very quickly and in an efficient way.
Disadvantages: Very bad living conditions In many factory farms the animals are kept in small cages, where they don’t have any space to walk around and do what they naturally do. The animals are usually kept indoor, so they don’t get any fresh air or sun. The cages are not cleaned as often as it is necessary, so the living conditions for the animals are very bad.
Bad for people’s health Factory farms are bad for people’s health in two ways. One of these is the pollution what they produce, which harm the health of the people who are living next to them. The other way is through the antibiotics that they give their animals to make them immune against illnesses. These can be transmitted to people from the meat and other animal products.
Small farming businesses haven’t a chance against factory farms Many factory farms are owned by corporations, who have the possibility to buy modern tools, equipment and larger spaces for the animals. They’re able to sell their products at a lower price. Smaller farms usually don’t have the resources to buy faster and bigger machines and therefore they can’t compete with their larger rivals.
Englisch Written Discussion Verbesserungsvorschläge
Boot Camps in Germany !!!
Some people mean that the boot camps in the USA a good idea , but should be boot camps introduced in germany ?
Many people and parents says that boot camps are very good , because boot camps helps troublemakers to learn discipline. And when they learn discipline the crime rate will be go down. Second, the lessons in the school will be more quiet and than the students can better learn and have than better marks. As well the children will be trained they physical fitness and they learn to live healthy. When they used to the circumstances in boot camps, they will live in that way , when leaving the camp.
However, other people and parents are against boot camps, because they think that the children soon forget about boot camp and get in trouble again. Another argument against is the cost ! If boot camps are built in germany, the state would have many costs. The last argument is that many people say that children didnt learn discipline but should have been broken. People say that the boot camps are to hard for children and that the teachers in the camps are too strict.
After looking at both sides I think that boot camps shouldnt be built in germany. The advantages are very good, but the disadvantages are predominant.
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Englischer Kurztext - "Caribbean London"
Hello English freaks :D Ich habe einen kleinen Text über "Caribbean London" vorbereitet. Über Feedback, Kritik und Korrekturen würde ich mich freuen :)
There are many British citizens who have their own countries belonging to the Commonwealth. Black people maily came from the Caribbean. Afro-Caribbeans are slaves from Africa who were transported to the Caribbean by British ships. In 1807, Britain stopped the slave trade.
London has been completely changed by the Caribbean people. They have influenced the social, economic and cultural life in London.
After the World War II, the British economy needed workers.The Caribbeans settled to London in larger numbers in the late 1940s to rebuild a post-war nation in London, they came with passion and excitement. But they had to face a different Britian and were very disappointed; Founding a home was not that easy. The rooms were often in bad condition and the rents were high. They had to do work with low wages that nobody else wanted to do. Police protection was not adequate so they had to deal with physical and verbal abuse.
Thus they developed selg-help organisations. Later, they created their own first Black newspaper "The voice".
They achieved their own buisness in London, running their own shops, restaurant or nightclubs. Others have achieved high postions in public life. The strength of the Caribbean peopel can be felt everywhere in London.
Morgen eine Englisch Arbeit!
Also ich schreibe morgen eine Englisch Arbeit und ein teil der Arbeit wird es sein, eine eigene Meinung über das Thema ''A year in a US High School'' zu schreiben, deswegen wollte ich fragen ob mein Text okay ist. Hier der Text (Eigene Meinung): I would not like to visit US - schools because they have a dress code. I think grade A - F in US - schools better than in our school system. In comparison I like the lockers in US - Schools more because the lockers are bigger and the students don't need to pay for their locker. The subjects are different as in German - Schools. Health is a subject in US - Schools. US - Schools have the same subjects everyday and they have the same timetable from Monday to Friday. I think that isn't good because I think that is boring. American and German Schools begin at different times and I think German schools start early. US - Schools don't have fall holidays and I think that isn't good. What do you think about US and German - schools?
Morgen mündliche Englisch Realschulprüfung, Text Korrektur
Hallo, ich habe morgen meine mündliche Realschulprüfung. Wir haben heute die Aufgabe für die Kurzpresentation(2-3min.) bekommen und wollte eure Meinung wissen. Es geht um ,,My Dream Job,, Hier ist der Text: My dream job Now I will tell you something about my dream job. My dream is to be a police officer because the uniform gives me strength. When I was a child I always wanted to arrest criminals to secure the city. I had three weeks internship at the police station and it was very interesting. So I can imagine to work as a cop. There are many departments in this job. Once the police protection, second the criminal police and finally the district police. The police protection has many interesting activities. They are called to inserts, to traffic accidents but anyway it is very dangerous because they arrest criminals. The criminal police is also an interesting department. They consult witnesses, they consult victims of crime, write reports and they are civil. That’s very important so they are not recognized by the criminals. The district police is something for older cops because they don’t have much action. They attend schools and speak with the pupils. That is not a thing for me. I want to work more at the police protection because it is very interesting. In this job you can earn about 2000 € a month. But it also can increase. That was my presentation about my dream job.