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Hallo,

nur was mir beim ersten flüchtigen Lesen aufgefallen ist:

In some countries all over the world, school children have to wear uniforms the color (AE) scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries, pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. Satzbau / Word Order

In those countries, it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms kein Komma because they (wer???) are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay, I want to discuss the advantages to introduce (Präposition + Gerund) school uniforms world wide.

In my opinion, school uniforms in (Präposition( schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style (Stil) and they can't (in der Schriftsprache keine Kurzformen) decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.

School uniforms are on the one side good (Satzbau) because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of them haven’t (Verneinung mit do not) enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case, the school uniform is very practically (Adverb) and maybe a good problem-solving (Wortfehler).

On the other side, pupils cant (siehe oben) find our style and have to wear clothes that they **don’ t (siehe oben)

want to.

School uniforms can be nice but not every day.,It quickly becomes boring.

However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive (kein Komma) always to buy a school uniform.

Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an (Wortfehler) again and again. We must take into account that school uniforms might be expensive, (Komma) but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy (past participle) again and again, too.

On the other hand, if the pupils wear school uniforms, there is not a difference between rich and poor wem ???.

Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

:-) AstridDerPu

In my opinion school uniforms have positive and negative points. A positive/negative point is that

.....not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.

-> missverständlich für mich.

On one side School uniforms are good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of them haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case school uniforms are very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.

On the other side pupils can't find their style and have to wear clothes that they don’t want. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,it becomes boring quickly.

However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy it again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school are not cheaper and they have to be buied again and again, too.

On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.

I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style, because bullying is not reduced by a school uniform.

Übernehme keine Haftung :-)) Aber ein paar gröbere Fehler sind auf jeden Fall ausgebessert.

In some countries all over the world pupils have to wear uniforms. The color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils are allowed to wear the clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wear one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.

So würde ich das jetzt schreiben...

Hallo könnte wer mein englisch Referat kontrollieren?

What is factory farming ?. Factory Farming is a way of producing meat and other animal products quickly and cheaply. The animals are kept in small cages. They get special food, so they are growing faster. The main products of this industry are meat, milk and eggs for human consumption. Advantages: Cheaper prices With the use of factory farms, the prices of food became very cheap. The main reason for this is that the food can be processed very fast. Also, the food for the animals is very cheap, because they buy it in mass orders. Enough animal products for the market Factory farms use vitamins, minerals, and other substances that make animals grow faster and so they can produce much more food. Big farms also have modern tools which helps to produce meat, milk, eggs and other products very quickly and in an efficient way.

Disadvantages: Very bad living conditions In many factory farms the animals are kept in small cages, where they don’t have any space to walk around and do what they naturally do. The animals are usually kept indoor, so they don’t get any fresh air or sun. The cages are not cleaned as often as it is necessary, so the living conditions for the animals are very bad.

Bad for people’s health Factory farms are bad for people’s health in two ways. One of these is the pollution what they produce, which harm the health of the people who are living next to them. The other way is through the antibiotics that they give their animals to make them immune against illnesses. These can be transmitted to people from the meat and other animal products.

Small farming businesses haven’t a chance against factory farms Many factory farms are owned by corporations, who have the possibility to buy modern tools, equipment and larger spaces for the animals. They’re able to sell their products at a lower price. Smaller farms usually don’t have the resources to buy faster and bigger machines and therefore they can’t compete with their larger rivals.

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