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Hi, also im Folgenden seht ihr einen Text in Englisch. Ich wäre euch sehr dankbar, wenn ihr ihn korrigieren würdet. Es kann sein, dass ihr viel korrigieren müsst, das tut mir dann sehr leid.
Every day many students drive to school by bus. One ticket almost costs two euros. And when you have to take the bus both rides that are almost four euros. Every day! That's why I would like to comment on if school busses should be free? In my opinion they should be free but let me show you my point of view so that you understand my opinion.
On the one hand busses are already overcrowded and when bus rides become free, probably more kids drive with them instead of getting brought by their parents. And then maybe not everyone fits in the bus. That's another point which should be changed. There should be more busses for students. But that is to big to also talk about now. Possibly when school busses become free more kids drive with them instead of driving bike and then they get un- athletic. But it's very important that children be athletic for stay healthy. On the other hand when no one is brought specially it's ecofriendly and that's a big point why school busses should be free. A disadvantage of driving with the bus is that the school busses often are too late so students come too late to school and that's why some students get brought because they don't want to come too late. This argument speaks against that more children drive with bus, but it is possible to change that. Also it should be considered that students have to come to school independent of money. Some families don't have the money to pay the bus, but their children have to come to school anyway. And when they are dependent to the busses because they can't come to school otherwise, but there isn't enough money for the bus, they have a problem and that's another reason why I have the view that school busses should be free. Also for families who can pay the bus tickets, it's inadmissible to pay because there is compulsory schooling.
To sum it all up I think that school busses should be free because of all the arguments that have been counted. Of course the busses, the bus drivers and the gas have to been payed but the government could pay that. When the cost is too high, the tickets could be cheaper at least. But the existing prizes are too high to pay every day.
Danke für eure Hilfe!
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Every day, many students take the bus to school. One ticket costs almost two euros, meaning both rides add up to nearly four euros daily. That’s a significant amount over time, which is why I’d like to discuss whether school buses should be free. In my opinion, they should, but let me explain my perspective so you can understand my reasoning.
On the one hand, buses are already overcrowded, and if rides were free, even more students might choose to take the bus instead of getting a ride from their parents. This increase could lead to buses being even more overcrowded, potentially to the point where not everyone could get a seat. To address this, there should be more buses available for students, though that’s a larger issue that I won’t go into now.
Additionally, if school buses were free, more students might choose the bus instead of biking, which could lead to a decrease in physical activity. Staying active is essential for children to stay healthy, so this potential decline in exercise is a downside to consider.
On the other hand, if fewer students rely on private transportation, it would be more eco-friendly, which is a strong argument in favor of making school buses free. A major drawback to taking the bus, however, is that school buses are often late, which can cause students to arrive late to school. To avoid this, some parents prefer to drive their children to ensure punctuality. While this is a valid concern, it’s also an issue that could be addressed if school buses were given more resources.
Another important point is that access to school should not depend on a family’s financial situation. Some families may struggle to afford the daily bus fare, yet their children still need to attend school. For those who rely on the bus because they have no other way to get to school, this cost can become a burden. This concern reinforces my belief that school buses should be free. Even for families who can afford the fare, it seems unreasonable to pay for school transportation when education is compulsory.
In conclusion, I believe that school buses should be free for students for all the reasons mentioned. While the costs of buses, drivers, and fuel need to be covered, the government could take on this responsibility. If the expense is too high, then at the very least, ticket prices should be reduced. But as it stands, the current prices are too high for families to pay every day.