Ist diese Analyse grammatikalisch richtigund habt ihr Tipps (Ich habe leider in Englisch schwierigkeiten)?

The text “This is not a good place to live” by Afua Hirsch written in December 2013 consists of a heading and seven parts. The introduction part consists of one part.There you are informed about the generically situation in Agbogbloshie.The electric waste comes in Agbogloshie from all over the world and Karim a 29 years old boy buying and selling at the dump,for 10 years.The author wants the regard of the readers in line 1”but especially from Europe”.This hyporble serves for our wariness because the most e-waste come from ourselves,also the author means we must watch. In the second paragraph you learn the UNs want to solve the e-waste problem.They warn the global volume of such refuse is set to grow by 33% over the next years.The author repeat the importance the e-waste on the world. In the next passage is shown the working methods of the workers.They work at a pile of e-waste with chisels and pliers and by hand.The author writes in line 16”they store the fruits of their labour”.The author obtains here on the labouryty at this job,so the readers feels himselfs boring. Next you can see the persons must work because they need the money for their families,but they know the job is not good four yourselfs. In passage seven ,you can learn the persons have a simple life in A. but they life in electrical waste. The author describes with many metaphors (l…)”filth and fumes”,so we have a sensation about a dirty life. Finally the author writes the nickname of A. with two condemned biblical cities “Sodom and Gomorrah”,but A. is not hostile,but it is not a good place to live. The inbitants have not a chance ,because they need the money.

3 Antworten

Vom Fragesteller als hilfreich ausgezeichnet

Bswss

Von gutefrage auf Grund seines Wissens auf einem Fachgebiet ausgezeichneter Nutzer

Englisch, Grammatik

20.02.2016, 14:55

SO viele Fehler kann und möchte ich hier nicht korrigieren.

Hier einige Hinweise als Starthilfe:

Absatz/Abschnitt heißt nicht "part", sondern paragraph. (falls Du das meinst)

The first (introductory) part /paragraph consists of ..

the general situation

Karim, a 29-year-old boy..

Wortstellung: The electronic waste in A. comes from all over the world.

"passage" heißt TEXTSTELLE, nicht "Absatz".

Meinst Du "The author emphasizes the environmental impact of e-waste on the whole world"?

Es gibt kein Wort "hyporble". Meinst Du "hyperbole" (ausgesprochen etwa wie "haipöhrbeli") . Aber Dein Beispiel ist keins für hyperbole".

...

In line 16 the author writes... (Wortstellung)

"obtain" heißt "erhalten" !

"labouryty" gibt's nicht. Was sollt das denn heißen?

Letzter Satz

The inhabitants of A.have no alternative...

Kein Komma vor "because".

(Dies war nur eine kleine Auswahl!)

denizliboy

Fragesteller

20.02.2016, 15:09

vielen dank :)

JuliaAiluja

20.02.2016, 14:32

Im ersten Satz müsste es heißen "The text xy written by xy"

marie20004

26.01.2021, 13:48

Hey ich habe das Arbeitsblatt auch in Englisch ..hast du vllt das Arbeitsblatt dazu?

         Every school should demand school uniform

In some countries all over the world school children have to wear uniforms the color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.

In my opinion school uniforms ind schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.

School uniforms are on the one side good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of theme haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case the school uniform is very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.

On the other side pupils cant find our style and have to wear clothes that they don’t wanted. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,It quickly becomes boring .However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy again and again, too.

On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.

I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style. Cause the bully is not reduced by a school uniform.

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Englischer Report - Grammatik

Sport- Report Hallo, ich wollte mal fragen ob man das als Report sehen kann oder da eher noch was ausbessern sollte...wenn ja, was? Und ob alles in der Grammatik richtig ist?!

The match from Friday... FCC-Jena beat Erfurt 3-1 in the final match of the year. The match was in Jena /Thüringen, on the 3. March. Jena plays better, because Erfurt was slow and 'sleeping'. But Jena was really good, they were fast and they plays good passes. The most players of Erfurt were bad today. That was the reason, why Erfurt lost. The final score at the end was very good for Jena, because they wan.

LG Lilliru :D

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Kann jemand über meinen Englischtext einmal rüberschauen?

Kann mal jemand über diesen En glischtext drübergucken und ein paar verbesserungsvorschläge dazuschreiben? Wäre echt nett! Achtung: Es ist eine Zusammenfassung!

Wo ich mir besonders unsicher bin - ist fett!

Text:

First of all the text presents a few facts about an average Briton. Among other things Tim Wardle occupy himself with the question, if Mr. or Mrs. Average exists in real world. And, if they exist, the author would like to know everything about him and his social environment(soziales umfeld).

First Mr. Wardle collects statistics to find out what is average and what is unaverage. A really important fact which he finds out while his data-recall facility is that the average person hast two children (statistical data: 1.8). He starts to search but for the present he does not find anyone who matches the criteria. But then Tim Wardle finds Army wife. He thinks that she is Mrs. Average but later he finds out that there are things she does which are hardly average. So the author visited the company CACI, because this company knows where which people live and if you give any information they will be able to tell you where the searched people live. Mr. Wardle gives information about an average person and so the company tells him where the average persons live - scilicet in Essex.

For this reason he drives to Essex and continue his quest right there, but again he does not find the Mr. or Mrs. Average. He now is about to give up. But suddenly there is a gleam of hope: National newspapers print Wardles(oder: Wardle´s) questions and in the following days many people contact the author and assure him that they are the average Briton. One of these is Peter Williamson who lives in the outskirts of Swindon where Tim Wardle drove(wohin T.W. (nun) fährt). When he arrives he tried to explain his aim. The married office worker and father of two children is exactly what the author had been looking for all the time.

In the end of the article he recognizes that being average is not bad and boring but a recipe for contentment.

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Englisch Vorteile und Nachteile vom berphmt sein!

Hey,

also ich habe hier Vor- und Nachteile über das berühmt sein geschrieben auf Englisch. Ich möchte nur das ihr schaut ob es mit der Grammatik und dem Satzbau so passt. Rechtschreibfehler müsst ihm mir nicht sagen :) Danke schon mal im Voraus.

On the one hand it is beautiful to be famous because you have much money and you can afford you everything. Secondly you're in the Center Point and everyone likes you except some. But on the other hand you don't have privacy, they know everything about you. You have to life in fear because there always people who are jealous on you. You don't can go out of the house and go somewhere without that someone recognize you. The magazines perhaps write something about you such as "Oh my good the plastic surgery went wrong" and you have to read it and can't say anything because they are allowed to write something like that. And finaly in most cases famous people access to drugs because they can't withstand the pressure anymore.

Andreeeea

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Wurde der Text Grammatikalisch richtig geschrieben?

Hello,

good Morning. My name ist ... ... and I would like to Tell you something about my favourite Shop today.

Real was established near Düsseldorf in Germany with 10 employees and many grocery Produce in 1992. What you think how many employees now work. Now work in the firm employees over 1500 staff in your all branch and have over 1.000.000 Produce what they sell.

Real is my favourite shop, because they have good Produce and nice employees. I buy in Real often Berliner and other produce.

The special of Real is they can find it overall.

Thank you for the listing. This is the end of my Prasentation.

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Morgen mündliche Englisch Realschulprüfung, Text Korrektur

Hallo, ich habe morgen meine mündliche Realschulprüfung. Wir haben heute die Aufgabe für die Kurzpresentation(2-3min.) bekommen und wollte eure Meinung wissen. Es geht um ,,My Dream Job,, Hier ist der Text: My dream job Now I will tell you something about my dream job. My dream is to be a police officer because the uniform gives me strength. When I was a child I always wanted to arrest criminals to secure the city. I had three weeks internship at the police station and it was very interesting. So I can imagine to work as a cop. There are many departments in this job. Once the police protection, second the criminal police and finally the district police. The police protection has many interesting activities. They are called to inserts, to traffic accidents but anyway it is very dangerous because they arrest criminals. The criminal police is also an interesting department. They consult witnesses, they consult victims of crime, write reports and they are civil. That’s very important so they are not recognized by the criminals. The district police is something for older cops because they don’t have much action. They attend schools and speak with the pupils. That is not a thing for me. I want to work more at the police protection because it is very interesting. In this job you can earn about 2000 € a month. But it also can increase. That was my presentation about my dream job.

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Würdet ihr für mein comment eine eins geben?

Ich bin mir halt nicht sicher, ob mein comment in Fach Englisch mir gelungen ist, daher wäre ein Feedback nett :)

Many people argue whether or not the British monarchy should be abolished.

In the following, I present arguments for and against a monarchy so that you can form your own pinion.

On the one hand, the British monarchy should be abolished because a monarch only rules but has no real political power or function. this means that a queen or king is unnecessary and unimportant to the state.

Also, the UK is not a democracy, as is claimed, because in a democracy people can elect the head of state, but since the royal family is still alive, they will continue to be the head of state.

This is very unfair and unequal to the rest of the population.

Also, people can never be 100% sure if the next monarch is good for the state and does not have bad intentions.

This could make people very worried.

Another important aspect is that the royal family spends a lot of money on the palace when they could use the money for more important things.

On the other hand, the British monarchy should not be abolished, because a monarch is very important even if he or she has no real political power.

His or her importance is reflected in national stability.

Since a monarch embodies the British history, values and tradition, this leads to stronger national identification, which brings people closer together so that there is national stability.

In addition, members of the royal family are very important to charities, because since the royal family has a good image and is important, charities can be heard better, so they continue with their charities.

Some people may think that a monarch spends a lot of money, but that doesn't mean a president doesn't.

there are many presidents with many

There are also many presidents with many offices, even more than the British monarch.

The fact that the royal family has always been at the head of the state means that people trust it because they know its good intentions.

This means that the monarchy is in safe hands, so to speak.

Another important point is that the royal family has shown that it can modernize and adapt to the times.

This is very important because many people claim that they are unmodern and have different thoughts than today.

But the Queen, for example, has allowed her son Charles to marry a divorced woman, whereas in the past this was a very dangerous issue.

that means she was able to “modernise”.

Weighing the pros and cons of the British monarchy, one can say that it should not be abolished because the British monarchy has been very successful, mainly because it has adapted to the times and modernized.

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Cartoonanalyse in Englisch ( Bitte hilft mir )

Hallöchen :) Also ich habe eine Hausaufgabe aufbekommen und ich bekomme darauf ne Note . Leider ist es so , dass ich in Englisch die Grammatik nicht gut beherrsche und ich müsste mich durch die Hü`s und Hausaufgaben mich verbessern, damit ich eine gute Note bekomme im Zeugnis . Ich wäree sehr sehr dankbar wenn ihr meine grammatikalischen Fehler verbessern könntet wenn ihr welche entdeckt beim Lesen.

In the cartoon, which is black-and-white drawing, you can see two men, which are standing to each other. The man on the left side is little and lean. His clothes are cracked. The other man on the right side appears strong and wealthy because of his buisness suit and bag. The cartoon includes a speech that is called Australian mateship and the use of the wordMate``. In addition there are two speechs bubbles. The little man asks to the big man: Exuse me mate. Could you spare a coupleof dollars for a cup of coffee.and the strong man answers: Sorry Mate.

The words in the cartoon underline the cartonnists message. The cartoonist wants to show to the viewer that the wordmate have not always the same meaning. You can say that there are two types of mateship. One of the type is that mates spend much time and tell their secrets etc. But in this cartoon the viewer gets the impression that the mens meet for the first time and they are notmates. The little man wants that the strong man helps him but he did not want and he excused himself in a friendly way. But you know appart of the clothes that he has enough money, so he could spend money .The cartoonist expresses thtat Australian peoples are friendly and polite to each other and for this reason they use the wordmate. But this situation does not agree thereal`mateship because real mates would always help themselves.In this cartoon is the strong man avaricious but he excuseshim politely.

I think the cartoon is easy to understand because if you know what mateship means in Australia, it is clear that in this case friendship does not have the same meaning. Therefore you find out that the word mate has several meanings for Australian peoples.

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Englisch Text kontrollieren

könnte evtl. jemand meinen Englischtext kontrollieren bitte? Ich weiß ist jetzt nicht der beste und vieles mehrmals geschrieben aber ich muss 200 Wörter haben^^ Hier der Text über Rassentrennung in Amerika:

Segregation in America

Segregation in America was till the 1960s. Till 1865 the black American had to work as slaves for the white but this ends after the Civil War. Then the Civil Rights Movement began with a leader, who was called Martin Luther King. They didn’t fought with violence, just with speeches and demonstrations. Martin Luther King was murdered in 1968. Now, in America there isn’t segregation any more, but some people are prejudiced against Blacks any more, but I think the situation of African American has improved a lot since the Civil Rights Movement. There are more blacks who have a good education and good jobs. Many blacks are famous sportlers or music and film stars. And besides the President of America is a black one – Barack Obama. So the situation of blacks is much better, but not as good as the situation of whites, because some whites are prejudiced against blacks and so often they don’t get such good jobs as whites. There are more blacks than whites, who haven’t got a good education or who haven’t got a job. And in America, there is still prejudice and discrimination against blacks, because some people think there are criminal or dirty. So the situation of blacks is better than before the Civil Rights Movement, but isn’t such good as the situation of Whites.

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Erörterung englisch überprüfen

hallo :) ich habe eine Erörterung zum Thema Schuluniformen für den englisch unterricht geschrieben, wäre cool wenn ihr mir Tipps zur Grammatik und vielleicht auch Ergänzungen sagen könntet. hier ist sie:

This comment will be about school uniforms. in the USA for example there are schools where you have to wear school uniforms and in germany you dont have to wear them. now the question is if we should introduce school uniforms in germany?

On the one hand school uniforms are very good. when everyone wears the same, nobody can say things because of their look like. so there is less bullying at school. nobody recognize if someone is poor or rich and it's easier for poorer people to find friends. In addition to this the students are a community. All of them are working together. Without school uniforms there are allways some outsider which have to work alone. the class is not divided into cool and not cool but there is a single group. also the school is represented by the students when they wear uniforms. all looks the same and the whole school hold together. everybody can see which school it is.

But on the other hand school uniforms are not very helpful. you can not wear what you want and you can not have your own style. But this is very important at this age. students have to develop their own personalities. moreover you can not stop bullying. maybe it is reduced by school uniforms but you can never stop it forever. there are students who does not look good with them or they are bullied because of their behavior. in addition, bullying takes place in the free time of students. so outsider are only in school protected. above all it is very expensive. families have to buy these uniforms and they are not cheap. when you have more than one child, it becomes more expensive. after school most of the students wear normal clothes. so you have to buy both - school uniforms and clothes for the free time. everyone changes the outfit once per day. it is very expensive for poor families. maybe their children have to wear the uniform the whole day.

danke schonmal:)

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Frage zu Englisch?

Hii, ich habe eine Frage zu Englisch. Kann pls jmd drüber lesen (ob Grammatik& Rechtschreibfehler sind). das ist eine summary

The text "America and Americans" was written by John Steinbeck. As the title suggests, the text is about the Americans, the past and the American dream.

The author introduces the text with a quote. The quote is "E pluribus Unum". This is the motto of the United States and it corresponds to the fact. America is a country where many different people live together, of all races. America is a unit and came into being in just over four hundred years.

The beginning of American history is not a good start. America was a foreign continent for the ancestors. Some people were not in America by choice. They had to work very hard to build up the country. Furthermore, there are diseases that were unexplored at the time. There are people who die because of it. So much work is needed to build America to make it the country it is today.

The author then writes about the disagreements Americans have with themselves. Americans often change their minds. For example, Americans are sometimes against the government, but sometimes for it. They don't know what exactly they want.

Furthermore, the American people have achieved a great deal in the past. They do a lot, but when they get tired of being successful they prefer to think about what makes them unhappy. Americans live paradoxically.

The author also writes that the people who live in American high society are not advanced in their thoughts. For example, a man needs electricity every day but doesn't know how to fix the problem if the fuse breaks.

In addition, it has become American culture that the child must be educated in a family. The parents assume it and want the child to be successful. It's their dream.

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Erörterung Schuluniform Englisch

Hallo ich präsentiere euch jetzt meine Erörterung, ich wollte euch fragen ob ihr es dann beurteilen könnt ob der Inhalt gut ist und ob ich viele Grammatikalische Fehler habe oder sprachliche Fehler und dann am ende mir eine Note nennt zwischen 1-6 wäre klasse von euch

Should schooluniform be introduced in every school?

In the following text I will list several arguments for and against schooluniform. The thesis to this topic is that schooluniform has lots of disadvantages.The first argument to this antithesis is that it is unhygiencally because you cant wash they not every day. An example you have not so many uniforms at home and you cant not wash them because they would not be dry for the next day. The second argument is that the free development of the pupils is limited. For example they would not be trust what they would dress because they think than it is emberrassing . The last argument to this antithesis is that schooluniform can also lead to competetion and conflicts between different schools. For example a pupil they visited a another school and went from pupils from different school past and they check it that he are from a different school because the schooluniform discern from another school uniformsand then can also lead to a competetion and conflicts.

Of the other hand they are a lot of advantages for schooluniforms. The first argument to this thesis is that they cant readable ther finacial situation. For example if there was none schooluniform than would can be readable ther financial situation because they would not be achieve bran name clothes. A antoher argument is that it would be saves time in the morning . An example the pupil didnt know what he would be dress and than can it to came that he came late to school . The last argument they are for me very strong is that nobody became bulling by clothes.. An example a poor pupil cant not achieve brand name clothes or his clothes are very old and have a lot of holes and therefore they cant be bullied for clothes.

After listing all the arguments for and against schooluniform think I not every school not to lead schooluniform in schools because for me it is important that you can deside what you will dress.The reason ist that then became th self confidence stronger.

Das ist meine Erörterung gerne Verbesserungsvorschläge z.B wenn ich was nicht gut formuliert habe mich verbessern damit ich das beim nächsten mal besser mache :)

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Passt der Englische Text?

In the poem ‚,The Schoolboy‘‘ by William Blake, you get a clear message that the schoolboy doesn’t enjoy the school and its system at all, so the question that arises is ,,What could school do, to be more enjoyable for the schoolboy and students like me?‘‘

First of all many students have to wake up early in the morning, which isn’t a perfect start into the day. Furthermore they mostly can’t enjoy the morning even if they like to stand up early, because they must get finished quickly for school. To counteract this problem, it would be a good start to begin with school less early and to approach the day more calmly. So to remove the effect of a prison it’s important to produce a more peaceful environment for everyone, to make the classrooms more comfortable and even integrate some outdoors schoollessons in spring and summer, so that the pupils have more joy in learning and are able to concentrate more because of the fresh air and the nature. Last but not least we schoolboys anf schoolgirls should be allowed to have more own thoughts and to be able to control them and not just being forced to memorize things, which won’t be even important for our adulthood.

I also think that the last point which is beinh made here, is a fact which the author want to draw attention to, because it’s a mostly international problem that should has to change as we are not robots.

(Also mit dem letzten Teil bin ich eher unzufrieden weil so oft which drankommt)

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Kann mir bitte jemand helfen, das ins Deutsche zu übersetzen?2?

My stomach is in knots, because I'm more than aware of the fact that she's been drinking earlier tonight, but I force the though to the back of my mind and raise my eyebrows instead. "Stopped talking to you for what? You pushed me to go, yes, but whatever happened it's not your fault." I trace the little circle pattern on the passenger window with my index finger, "It's not your fault the party happened to be shitty."

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