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Verse 1

At 14, I landed in Italy, feeling so lost,

School felt like a battlefield, no matter the cost.

Teachers glanced at me, judgment in their stare,

Every class a struggle, wearing a mask I couldn't bear.

My mind was scattered, always on the run,

Caught in the chaos, like I'd never won.

Clashing with the cops, trouble at every turn,

The streets were wild, my world starting to burn.

Dad drowned in drugs, no care for my pain,

Pushed me aside, lost in his own chain.

But in my dreams, I saw a different way,

A life of meaning—I knew I had to break away.

Chorus

Italy, you were tough, but I’m standing tall,

Education in my heart, I’ve been fighting through it all.

My grandparents showed me love, helped me rise and soar,

In the darkest nights, I found my light, for sure.

Verse 2

Living in a nightmare, every day was a fight,

Dad’s world of addiction kept me awake every night.

The shouting, the chaos, no love to be found,

But deep inside, I was ready to turn things around.

I tried to focus, but my mind was a haze,

Every setback hit me, sending me in a daze.

My grandparents were anchors, with wisdom in their words,

Telling stories of struggle and dreams that emerged.

"Keep your head up, kid, you're meant for more,"

With their strength behind me, I began to explore.

Education became my weapon, my path to escape,

Each lesson learned was a chance to reshape.

Chorus

Italy, you were tough, but I’m standing tall,

Education in my heart, I’ve been fighting through it all.

My grandparents showed me love, helped me rise and soar,

In the darkest nights, I found my light, for sure.

Verse 3

Days turned to months, I started to see,

With each small victory, I was breaking free.

Found a mentor at school, who opened my eyes,

Taught me the value of perseverance, the wisdom of the wise.

I stayed late studying, no longer doubting the fight,

Every page I turned brought me closer to the light.

No more running from trouble, I faced it head-on,

Life's a marathon, and I was running strong.

Friends I never had began to gather around,

We lifted each other up, breaking new ground.

The cops stopped watching me as I changed my life,

Cutting away the pain, escaping the strife.

Chorus

Italy, you were tough, but I’m standing tall,

Education in my heart, I’ve been fighting through it all.

My grandparents showed me love, helped me rise and soar,

In the darkest nights, I found my light, for sure.

Bridge

Now I’m on a mission, can’t stop, won’t quit,

Every challenge I face, I’m ready to commit.

Building up my future, brick by brick,

With my dreams in sight, I’m moving quick.

Those who doubted me now watch me thrive,

In this journey of life, I’m finally alive.

Outro

Italy, you shaped me, can’t deny the fight,

From the shadows of pain, I’m stepping into the light.

With my heart full of dreams and my mind set free,

I’m the author of my story—just wait and see.

LG

Ist doch garnicht schlecht. Schreibe ebenfalls seitdem ich 12 bin schon Texte und habe gelernt, dass du gute Texte schreiben kannst die du Monoton rappst und dann schlecht klingen und schlechte Texte schreiben kannst die gut klingen.

Ist immer schwer einen Text zu bewerten ohne den Song dazu zu hören. Wird sich aber bestimmt nicht verkehrt anhören ;)

Würde mir aber noch mehr Mühe bei den Reimen geben, ist meistens noch einsilbig gereimt und das ist eher nicht so schön

Raptexte zu lesen ist immer ein bisschen cringe. Im Rap geht es viel mehr um die mündliche Performance und die Beat-Auswahl. Wenn das stimmt, ist der Text fast schon egal.

Finde ich echt gut 👍

Vor allem für deinen ersten Text

Weiter so!