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Nowadays Komma many people think that smoking should be forbidden. Is that right ? There are many reasons for and against (Hier fehlt etwas.).

The first point is that it is like toxic for people when they smoke. Moreover Komma a lot of guys smoke outside where many other people are. It could be that they smoke passive and it is quite worser than smokes active. But then we can forbid it only on places where are many people.

The reason is that if we banned smoking Komma all companys become (Zeit) poor and million (Hier fehIt etwas.) their jobs.

But the mainly point is that the state earn(Gramma) fewer money kein Komma because they get less tax and they need money for different causes. That is why they must raise the land tax. At worst ih can be that the economic system crash.

After looking Hier fehlt etwas. both sides Komma I must say that it could be very dangerous to banned smoking. The only thing (---) we could do

is not to allowed it when children are near the smoker to safe them.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B.,

für die Grammatik und


Worser ist falsch ->worst 

Must->need oder have to say...

The worst thing ever is that the economic system could crash.

Million->Millions of People

There are lots of reasons why we should forbid against or for smokers. 

Sorry,dass ich die Reihenfolge nicht beachtet habe 


*(..) for and against it. *It could happen, anstatt It could be! *and it is even worse !! Es gibt kein worser *But then, we could only forbid it on places where many people are. * "The reason is that" Welcher Grund wofür? Deutlicher machen, wofür du den Grund nennst! (Oder einfach in dem Satz, ohne The reason is that schreiben, denn das ist irgendwie unlogisch.. :) *If we banned smoking, all companies would become poor and millions of people would lose their jobs. *(..) earns less money *The worst thing that could happen is that the economic system crashes. *looking at *I have to say -> anstatt I must *The only thing that we could do is to not allow them to smoke when children are nearby to protect them. Lg 😊

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