Denkt ihr das ist gut? Könnte ich dafür 1 kriegen??
A considerable number of individuals are engaged in discussions regarding the statement from Tim:"That smoking should be completely vanished from earth." I feel compelled to express my perspective and agree with his point of view.
Conversely, it is equaly imperative to acknoweldge the opposing point of view. Firstly, smoking cigarretes is reducing stress, therefore many people feel better after smoking. For example you had a really bad fight, you just go to smoke and then you will be feeling better. Secondly, you can have a pause of work, just ask for a smoker pause and you will feel much better.
On the other hand, commencing with my first connection, smoking costs tons of money. Sixteen cigarrates can cost around 10 Dollar, some people spend their whole money for them. Its draining rabidly their money, which can cause many problems. So if smoking would get banned, those people would have much more money, for a better life.
Furthermore, you are hurting you family too. Technical term is passive smokers, those are you family. They breath the toxins and chemical too, they can get worse symptoms than you because they are not often in contact with those. So remember to not to smoke near your family.
Thirdly, your lungs are overstrained. The nicotin is destroying you Lungs and can cause lung cancer. Smoking will kill you and you will leave behind your family. Additionaly, the chance of destryoing other organs with the toxiness is times two.
However in seeking resolution, its important to find a compromise. A solution for this dilemma could be a better education system, to teach the people more about the dangerous part of ciggaretes. Secondly, a law against bying more than 10 cigarretes in a week. I still agree with Tims statement. Ultimately, it will could be benefical for a mutual outcome.
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Die linking words wurden meiner Meinung nach manchmal etwas ungünstig gesetzt und du solltest die Rechtschreibung, Grammatik sowie Satzbau definitiv nochmal überprüfen, das klingt, als wäre es von einer KI generiert.. nicht böse gemeint🥲
Mein Bauchgefühl sagt mir, dass das eine 2 oder 3 geben wird, solange du nicht gerade im Englisch-Leistungskurs sitzt
Habs selber geschrieben keine Ki,
bin jetzt nicjt der beste Englisch typ, bin 10 klasse
Kommt drauf an welches Niveau angesetzt wird. Sprachlich überzeugt es mich nicht, inhaltlich auch nicht, argumentativ stringent ist in meinen Augen auch problematisch. Ich würde keine 1 drauf geben.
Kommt drauf an in welcher Klassenstufe das abgegeben wird.
In meinem Jahrgang wäre das eine eins oder zwei. Gute Gliederung mit Einleitung, Hauptteil und Schluss. Gute Überleitungswörter wie „One the one hand“, „Furthermore“ oder „thirdly“