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Globalisation cartoon analysis
The cartoon was drawn by Matt Wuerker with unknown title was published on the 7th July 2011. The subject of the cartoon is outsourcing.
On the left side in the foreground, of the picture is a vending machine. The vending machine is silver and offers american workers. Through the window of the vending machine you can see different figures representing the american workers. Above the window a title says „AMERICAN WORKERS, hire us!“. Across from the vending machine a male figure is shown. The figure is small and a bit chubby. His skin color is slightly red. He also wears suit and glasses. He stands with a open mouth and open arms in front of the vending machine. In a caption the figure says „I'd love to give 'em jobs. I just can't afford to!“. Behind the figure is a case with the imprint „Corp. Sector“. In the background are mountains of dollar bills stored in wheelbarrows. The wheelbarrows are coded with „profits“ and „bonuses“.
The cartoon deals with the problem of outsourcing. Firstly the cartoonist symbolised the corporations and factorys as a figure in a suit. The industry are those who hire and dismiss staff. Corporation often want to pay the lowest possible wage to make more profit. Cheap wage workers are mostly found in developing countrys. To gain more profit factorys search workers in developing countrys, for that they produce their goods abroad. While global players produce their goods abroad, many people can't find jobs for example in the USA. The USA still can't recover from the rust belt, which made many people lose their job. In the cartoon we can see the lack of workspaces
in the USA because the vending machine is marked with the title „hire us!“. It clearly shows the need of work places.
The cartoonist exaggerateted with the amount of money to suggest how much money the industries gain world wide while people in developing countrys have to suffer exploitation and hunger even they are working a lot for low wage. The caption of the figure shows that industries still would take low wage workers instead of qualified workers in the US to make more money.
I partly agree with the artist's statement because i think it gives people, who are living in developing countries, the oppurtunity to earn some money and maybe to learn new abilitys which they can use in their further professional life. On the other hand the workers don't gain enough money for their work. For the customer it's better because the goods are much cheaper.
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Globalisation cartoon analysis
The cartoon was drawn by Matt Wuerker with an unknown title, which was published on the 7th July 2011. The subject of the cartoon is outsourcing.
On the left side in the foreground of the picture is a vending machine. The vending machine is silver and offers american workers. Through the window of the vending machine you can see different figures representing the american workers. Above the window a title says „AMERICAN WORKERS, hire us!“. Across? from the vending machine a male figure is shown. The figure is small and a bit chubby. His skin color is slightly red. He also wears a suit and glasses. He stands with an open mouth and open arms in front of the vending machine. In the caption the figure says „I'd love to give 'em jobs. I just can't afford to!“. Behind the figure is a case with the imprint „Corp. Sector“. In the background are mountains of dollar bills stored in wheelbarrows. The wheelbarrows are coded with „profits“ and „bonuses“.
The cartoon deals with the problem of outsourcing. Firstly, the cartoonist symbolised the corporations and factories as a figure in a suit. The industries are those who hire and dismiss the staffs. Corporation often want to pay the lowest possible wage to make more profit. Cheap wage workers are mostly found in developing countries. To gain more profit factories look for workers in developing countries, so that they produce their goods abroad. While global players produce their goods abroad, many people can't find jobs for example in the USA. The USA still can't recover from the rust belt, which made many people lose their job. In the cartoon we can see the lack of workspaces
In the USA because the vending machine is marked with the title „hire us!“. It clearly shows the need of work places. (It clearly shows the urgent need of work places)
The cartoonist exaggerated with the amount of money to suggest how much money the industries gain world wide while people in developing countries have to suffer from exploitation and hunger even tough they are working a lot for low wage. The caption of the figure shows that industries still would take low wage workers instead of qualified workers in the US to make more money.
I partly agree with the artist's statement because I think it gives people, who are living in developing countries, the opportunity to earn some money and maybe to learn new abilities which they can use in their further professional life. On the other hand the workers don't gain enough money for their work. For the customer it's better because the goods are much cheaper.
Across verstehe ich in dem Zusammenhang nicht.
Merke:
Mehrzahl von Wörtern die auf -y enden werden zu -ies
Benutze mehr Connectives, wie z.B:
Furthermore, Nevertheless, Nontheless, Additionally.
Ansonsten solider Text.
Best regards
Anton
Ergänzend zu den Vorschlägen von MMaria1206:
"offers American workers" macht keinen Sinn. Meinst du vielleicht "serves"?
A male figure can be seen "opposite " the... (nicht across)
symbolises statt symbolised
Corporations (Plural)
To increase /maximize profit companies look for (search ist falsch) workers abroad to produce /manufacture their products. While the global players are busy producing abroad, workers in wealthier countries such as the USA often have difficulties finding employment. The USA still hasn't recovered.. which resulted in many people losing their jobs.
.....shows the need for more workplaces
....suffer exploitation and hunger eventhough they work hard. (low wages can man weglassen)
..companies / industries would still prefer to hire low-wage rather than qualified workers in order to maximize profit.
...maybe to learn new skills (not abilities)
.
.the workers don't earn enough money
Erstmal würde ich sagen, dass dein Text gut strukturiert ist und die Beschreibung sehr detailliert ist. Die Autorintention und das Fazit sind ebenfalls gut. Mir sind nur ein paar sprachliche Fehler aufgefallen:
Der Einleitungssatz ergibt so formuliert keinen Sinn. Es müsste heißen: The cartoon with an unknown title was drawn by Matt Wuerker and it was published...
Mir ist nicht ganz klar, was du mit the "subject" of the cartoon meinst. Ich denke, dass "topic" hier treffender wäre.
Das gleiche mit "Across the vending machine". Ich glaube nicht, dass es diese Formulierung gibt. Da müsste etwas wie next to, above etc. hin.
He wears a suit.
He stands with an open mouth... oder with his mouth open
factories, nicht factorys
countries, nicht countrys
so that they produce their...
to suggest ergibt an der Stelle auch wenig Sinn. Es müsste to show sein.
have to suffer from...
...even when they are working a lot for a low wage.
abilities, nicht abilitys
Ja, du bist auf alles eingegangen, Bildbeschreibung war sehr genau und ausführlich.
Vielen dank. Werde ich versuchen umzusetzen