Ein Englischer Text über rassismus
Hey, Liebe GT Communitie ^^ Ich habe in der Schule die Aufgabe bekommen einen Englischen Text über Rassismus zu schreiben. Ich bin mir nicht ganz sicher ob er mir gelungen ist. Und möchte keine Fehler begehen immerhin stehe ich gerade auf einer schlechten Note. Erbarmt sich jemand diesen zu kontrollieren??? Ober er okay ist oder so.
Racism is an evil that can destroy society. The definition of racism is for example when a person, a group, not accepted because of their skin color, their religion, their sex and their origin. Austria is a nation of immigrants and, as such, it is a diverse society where racism and prejudice have no place. Racism hurts people. I myself never became actually really a discriminated. But that’s only me. The new one will be always looked with mistrust. This true lies in the nature of the Humans. In society today, people look for an easy way out of problems. Most of the time, they can just blame their problems on other people or other races. When people behave in this prejudiced way, they just make themselves seem ignorant. I think that if people could see beyond ethnic origin, racism would not be a problem.
Dein Vokabular is ausgezeichnet! Es schleichen sich nur öfters Germanismen in den Text. Keine Sorge, das kriegst schnell weg, wennst einmal ein spannendes englisches Buch durchgelesn hast ;-)
The definition of racism for example is when a person/a group is not accepted....
... it is a diverse society, where there is no place for racism and prejudice.
As a matter of fact, I myself never got discriminated. But that's just me. The new ones/ a new one will always be looked at with mistrust. This truth lies within the human nature. In today's society,...out of their problems. Most of the time, they will just blame other people or other races for their problems.
Nicht schlecht, aber auch nicht fehlerfrei.
1) Racism is not the same as xenophobia(Fremdenfeindlichkeit). Wer z.B. als Deutscher eine Abneigung gegen Menschen seines Nachbarlands(z.B. Österreich) hat(solche Typen soll es ja geben), ist damit noch kein Rassist, weil Niederländer, Tschechen, Norweger usw keine "Rassen" sind.
2) Sprachliche Fehler, korrigiert:
Racism means that a person of different skin colour...
I, personally** have never been discriminated against.** (Ohne "against" geht's nicht!!!)
This** fact** (truth?) ... nature of** humans**.
... they only* prove their ignorance.*
Könnte jemand bitte meine Englisch Argumentation korrektur lesen?
In Britain, children and teenagers can be given an ASBO if they do anything that is an antisocial behavior. It’s a way of punishing them for their actions instead of going to prison or similar punishments. An ASBO consists of several punishments like being forbidden to go to different areas of a town or to meet specific people.
The problem with ASBO’s is that they can give the person depression because they are socially isolated. Consequently, this can lead to self harm or depression in the worst cases. Secondly, their actions aren’t primarily punished they are prevented so that the child/teen won’t do it anymore. Furthermore, the things that are reported aren’t necessarily illegal sometimes it’s just something that might be annoying to others, like tattoos. Having said that, this might just be a way of showing personality. Reportedly, it has happened that someone was just given an ASBO because he looked scary and was always wearing a hood. Another thing to add is that the pictures that are hung up around town can be really embarrassing and can lead to harassment by others. On the other hand, ASBOS also have advantages. Many teenagers have their problems with school, friends etc. This might lead to some illegal actions like drinking or smoking. In addition to that, there often is some kind of group pressure. ASBO’s are a way of showing them that their actions are wrong and that there is a solution to their problems. For instance, it’s a way of identifying that their actions have been wrong. Another key thing to remember is that ASBO’s can keep the children/teenagers from going to prison and that would be way worse.
All things considered, I think that ASBO’s can be good for the young people to change their antisocial behavior. That way, they can understand that their actions have been wrong and change them for good.