Ich habe in Englisch das Thema "Piercings" bekommen und wollte wissen ob dieser Text gut ist oder verbessert gehört.
Piercings and tattoos are a major topic at these days.
Some people want to show rebellion others want to imitate their friends, but people also have them, because of their religions.
But you must always think about the consequences there might be, when you make a tattoo or piercing.
You might get an infection because of an unsterile needle or a nerve could get damaged.
Piercings and tattoos aren’t bad, sometimes they can help you to strengthen your self-confidence.
Later it could be hart to find a job, because some bosses don’t like people who wear piercings or have tattoos.
I think that people can do whatever they want with their bodies, they can do whatever makes them happy.
Others should accept the choices people make in their life and no one should discriminate them, just because they look different.
Ich würde das ganze noch mehr ausführen. Du hast gute Argumente, die du aber zu kurz zusammenfasst. Ausserdem solltest du noch ein paar positive Sachen über piercings schreiben, zum Beispiel, wie sehr die ein Ausdruck der eigenen Selbstdarstellung sind (im positiven Sinne) und wie sehr sie das Selbstwertgefühl stärken können.
Piercings are a hot topic (---) these days. Some (Hier fehlt etwas.) want to show rebellion other (Plural) want to imitate their friend (Plural). But no one thinks about the consequences there might be (Word Order; Grammatik). They just think about how (Wort) they look like and if they are cool. It’s quite dangerous to have a piercing, you couldget an infection (kein Komma) because of an unsterile needle (Plural). Later (Komma) when you want to work, you can’t (kein Komma) because some Bosses (RS) don’t like piercings or tattoos or your new colleges will (Wort) bully you (kein Komma) because (Hier fehlt etwas.) how (Wort) you look like. I don’t like piercings either, but if some people really enjoy themselves (Wort), I will accept their choice.
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
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Piercings are a major (Klingt besser) topic at these days. Some want to show rebellion, (but) other want to imitate their friend. But no one thinks about the consequences there might be. They just think about how they look like and if they are cool. It’s quite dangerous to have a piercing, because you could get an infection (ohne Komma) because of an unsterile needle. Later when you want to work, you may/might not be able to work, because some bosses (klein) don’t like piercings or tattoos, (Komma, damit es vom andere "or" unterschieden werden kann) or your new colleges will bully you because of your appearance. I don’t like piercings either, but if some people really enjoy wearing piercings, I (ohne will) accept their choice.
BRAUCHE DRINGEND HILFE - ENGLISCH TEXT SCHREIBEN!
hey leute, morgen muss ich eine englisch haussaufgabe abgeben und zwar geht es um written a discussion ( über Boot Camps - Erziehungslager). Ich hab schon ein ganzen text geschrieben bin mir aber sicher das ich fehler hab. Könntet ihr mir da ein wenig helfen.
Boot camps are a type of military school for teenagers. Teenagers who are commit a crime sent to boot camps to learn disciplin and straighten their lives up. A boot camp look like a prison and there is nothing personal in the rooms. First ,some people say that teenagers really need to go to a boot camp, because they learn discipline. Second ,you have to learn to follow the rules if you want to do well. That´s why they hadn´t to go to prison and so they have better chances to get a job for their lives. But in my opinion Boot camps shouldn´t be introduced in Germany, because discipline doesn´t change a person. I think people have to learn how to think for themselves, not learn how to follow rules. That´s why i think boot camps doesn´t work. After looking at both sides i think if a teenager want to change their life they will do , but not when they are forced to.
Pros and cons über online communication (comment)?
Hey, ich habe einen comment verfasst über online communication with modern technology, und wollte fragen ob Verbesserungsvorschläge bezüglich der Grammatik oder des Inhalts da sind. Danke.
Modern technology makes us possible to communicate where and when we want. Modern technology like smartphones and computers make it easier to communicate with persons that are not with us. We can set up a meeting with our friends or talk about the solution from the exercises via online communication. You can send messages where you want to. Personal meetings which can not take place because of the weather or other reasons can be replaced with online communication. When you are ill and you can't go to your job, you can just call your boss with your cell phone which make it easier for the company. Another example is, when your parents go to shopping and you forgot to tell them to buy your favourite meal, you can also just call them. And there are a lot of more examples for communication via modern technology to make our life easier and faster. But still there are also cons for using modern technology for communication. Persons who restrict to online communication will easier forget the face to face communication. Another point is, that we lose our handwriting skills because of online communication. We also get a worser grammar when we communicate online with shortcuts. Especially teenagers use shortcuts for example when they want to write “are” or “you” they only type the letters “r” and “u”, which is a not good for our grammar skills. My personal opinion about this is, that modern technologies were a good invention to communicate faster and easier with people all around the world. But we shouldn't forget the real communication, even if online communication is a cool thing.
Brauche eure Hilfe in English, da ich einen Text über teenage millionaire geschrieben habe?
könntet ihr meinen Text kontrollieren denn ich geschrieben habe und mich versuche zu verbessern und würde mich über eure Hilfe sehr freuen und bedanke mich schon im Voraus.
Today I will speak about teenage millionaire?
Can a teenager takeover the full responsibility for the whole money? First, the money makes you addicted after a while and then you try to buy everything that you like, but this can lead to the fact that you get into debt and do not come out anymore and have bought the money for unnecessary things like drugs or things you again economical.
Another aspect is that one has no real friends because of any money, but fake friends who stand behind the money and are not interested in you and want to profit only from you. It is nice to be rich because one can afford the things which one wanted long. A study suggests that this makes you addicted and no more can stop.
They also help friends who cannot afford things which so desire and there are not all greedy for money. I mean, of course, you can buy everything that you can buy that doesn´t make you always happy. I don't like rich kids because they are selfish.
Was denken moderne Muslime über Exmuslime?
Es ist ja offensichtlich, dass der Koran und der Sunnah zum Mord an Exmuslimen aufruft. Ich frage mich nur: wie sehen moderne Muslime Exmuslime?
Bukhari[52:260] "...The Prophet said, 'If somebody (a Muslim) discards his religion, kill him.' "
Quran[4:89] "They wish that you should disbelieve as they disbelieve, and then you would be equal; therefore take not to yourselves friends of them, until they emigrate in the way of God; then, if they turn their backs, take them, and slay them wherever you find them; take not to yourselves any one of them as friend or helper."
Englisch Text korriegieren
Hallo kann jemand folgenden Text korrigieren? Dankeschön Dear Ben Russell, I read your article “Credit cards to ration individuals' carbon use“, which is published in newspaper The Independent in July19,2006. First of all I want to say that I think it's very good that there are people like you who think about the environment and of course about the problems which are exist. The suggestion is that every body has a credit-card with Carbon Dioxide points and if someone travels, use electricity, gas or petrol with carbon rations they have to pay. There is a special amount of this points and if you need more than your personal cap you have to buy credits on the open market. On the other side if there are people who cut the pollution of the carbon they produce, they could sell their surplus. Mr Miliband also suggests that banning products like light bulbs or electrical appliances which waste power while on standby, have to forbid. Everyone have to make automatic payments of offset pollution. I think this credit cards are not a good idea, because there would be a discrimination, because on the one hand rich people wouldn't cut their consume because they have the money to buy this credits. The most of them wouldn't take care about the environment. On the other hand the poor people have to take care about their carbon use. They haven't got the money to buy new credits. The result would be that the poor people take care and the richer people don't take care. Now you can say that it's maybe not a completely good result but now there are a few people who take care. Better than no one. But what is if the poorer people have to use the car everyday because they have to drive to work. They have to pay that they are working. This wouldn't make work more attractive. The poorer people are disadvantaged. Another cause why this credit cards are not a good idea is that you can't control it. There would be a lot of situations where are disagreements. For example if people drive together to work. Now who have to pay with carbon for that? The driver or the other ones? Another fact is that you can't handle everything with money. Everyone has to pay that the environment become better. But money doesn't help. You can't stop the global warming with money. My idea is that there have to be recompenses for those people who do something against the environment problems. There have to be individual things, which make environment protection very attractive and also necessary. It's very important that everybody knows about the problems and the results if we go on like this. All in all I think it's very good that there are people who think about a solution and things that can be do to stop the global warming. Nevertheless I think the credit-cards and money wouldn't be a good solution
Ist mein englischer Text grammatikalisch richtig :)?
Also ich schreibe bald eine Englischarbeit und da soll ich einen Text über Teenager and Adults schreiben. Da ich in Englisch nicht gerade gut bin wollte ich fragen ob mein Text grammatisch gut ist.Vielen Dank für die Hilfe :).
Teenager and adults have often arguments,because they have different views.Teenages are optimistics,they thinkthey can everything,but they dont know very much.Adults are realistics and tell teenagers often things,they dont want to hear.Teenagers think often their parents are to strict,but ther parents want only good things for they.Parents dont like that teenagers do nothing for school and only hang out with friends.They dont like their music too.A second problem is :Teenagers have no idea about money.They want for example new clothes or a new cellphone.But parents didnt buy their it,so the teenagers are angry.A third problem is that parents put presssure on their childreen and they want they be the best.They want good marks too,but often the parents dont ask the teenager what he want.The life of a Teenager is not easy.