Kann jemand der gut Englisch kann meinen Text nach Fehlern prüfen?

 When you see the photo you probably think that he is a criminal, and you wouldn't be that wrong, because he actually has a very criminal past.In 1996 he and his family fled to Germany to escape the war in the Caucasus, a city in the centre of Chechnya.In Germany he was sent to an asylum home where he grew up with his family until he was 7.Then the asylum home was bought up and he and his family had to leave the asylum home.After they found a new home, Isas life went to ruin.

Already with 12 the first Joint, with 14 the first burglaries. When he was 16, he was charged with robbery, trespassing with bodily injury and narcotics.

Answer 1

[ioroio]

and you wouldn't be that wrong

Ich bin mir nicht ganz sicher ob das that dort hingehört. Aber sonst ist er sehr gut.

Comments

[Anonym6732777]

Ja. "that" ist hier "so, allzu"

Answer 2

[AstridDerPu]

When you see the photo (Komma) you probably think that he is a criminal, and you wouldn't be that wrong (kein Komma) because he actually has a very criminal past. In 1996 (Komma) he and his family fled to Germany to escape the war in the Caucasus, a city (the Caucasus ist keine Stadt.) in the centre of Chechnya. In Germany (Komma) he was sent to an asylum home (home for asylum seekers) where he grew up with his family until he was 7. Then the asylum home (s.o.) was bought up and he and his family had to leave (it, noch besser die beiden Sätze verbinden oder umformulieren). After they found (Grammatik) a new home, Isas (Grammatik) life went to ruin.

Already with 12 (besser: at the age of) the first Joint (RS), with 14 (s.o.) the first burglaries. (Das ist kein Satz. Das Prädikat / die Prädikate fehlen.) When he was 16, he was charged with robbery, trespassing with bodily injury and narcotics (Hier fehlt etwas.).

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

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:-) AstridDerPu