Bewerbungsschreiben Pflegepraktikum auf Englisch- HELFT MIR BITTE!

Also, ich bewerbe mich per Internetbewerbung um einen Praktikumsplatz in der Pflege in Großbritannien. Könnt ihr bitte mein Anschreiben durchlesen und mir Fehler oder Verbesserungsvorschläge sagen? Wenn jemand Vorschläge zur Kommasetzung hat, immer her damit ;) !!! Das wäre ganz lieb und würde mir sehr weiterhelfen!! Ich habe folgendes geschrieben:

Dear …, After having studied Medicine at the XXX University of XXX for one semester, I am planning to supplement my studies and gain more experience in the nursing sector. Via Internet I found out about the XXX hospital and its patient-friendly atmosphere which seems very appealing to me. Thus, I am writing in order to apply for a 30-day nursing internship in your hospital from XXX to XXX . I have already gained practical experience in my subject, not only during several first-aid-courses I lately attended, but also during university classes: I study in a reformed degree course, which means that we work directly with patients from the first week on and therefore gain more practical experience than students who study Medicine in a classic program of study. I am a very open-minded and friendly person who likes to help and support other people. Therefore, I would like to get an insight in the daily work of nurses. Of course I am prepared to work hard and constantly give my best. I am very interested in exploring different countries. Thus, I apply for an internship abroad as I know that tolerance and openness are necessary for every prospective doctor. The English language will be no problem for me as I have learned it for more than nine years and even took the English advanced-course in high-school which I completed with constant straight As. Furthermore, I worked on my language skills during a language study travel to London in 2009. Of course I would pay for the internship in case of an acceptance. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, XXX

Medizin, Englisch, Studium, Bewerbung, England, Ausland, Großbritannien, MedizinStudium, Praktikum
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