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Hallo ihr lieben ich muss einen Summary schreiben und das habe ich getan ich würde gern wissen ob er grammatisch richtig ist . Danke :)

The story „Hermann Maifest“ is about Dylan, a student from Hermann High School, who spends a day at the Maifest in Hermann with his friends and his younger brother. Before Dylan and his friends Donna and Mike leave for the Maifest, his mother tells him he should take care of his brother Bobby. When they arrive, they have a lot of fun. But an hour later, just before Dylan has his solo part on his trumpet at the concert and he has to bring Bobby home, they notice that Bobby is missing. Everybody tries to find him but no one has success. When Dylan wants to tell his mother on the cell phone, that they lost Bobby, they find him sitting in a fire truck in the parade.

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[AstridDerPu]

Hallo,

But an hour later, just before Dylan has his solo part on his trumpet at the concert and -- has to bring Bobby home, they notice that Bobby is missing. Everybody tries to find him but without any success. When Dylan wants to tell his mother on the cell phone kein Komma that they lost Bobby, they find him sitting in a fire truck in the parade.

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[AstridDerPu]

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