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Dear Ben Russell,

I read your article “Credit cards to ration individuals' carbon use“, which is published in (---) The Independent in July19, 2006.

First of all (Komma) I want to (besser: would like to) say that I think it's very good that there are people like you who think about the environment and of course about the problems which are exist.The suggestion is that every body has a credit-card with Carbon Dioxide points and if someone travels, use electricity, gas or petrol with carbon rations they have to pay. There is a special amount of this points and if you need more than your personal cap (Komma) you have to buy credits on the open market. On the other side (Komma) if there are people who cut (---) pollution of the carbon they produce, they could sell their surplus. Mr Miliband also suggests that banning products like light bulbs or electrical appliances which waste power while on standby, have to forbid. Everyone have to make automatic payments of offset pollution.

I think this credit cards are not a good idea (kein Komma) because there would be a discrimination (kein Komma) because (Wiederholung) on the one hand (Komma) rich people wouldn't cut their consume because they have the money to buy this credits. (---) most of them wouldn't take care about the environment. On the other hand (Komma) (---) poor people have to take care about their carbon use. They haven't got the money to buy new credits. The result would be that (---) poor people take care and (---) richer people don't take care (Wiederholung, Stil).

Now you can say that it's maybe not a completely good result but now there are a few people who take care. Better than no one. (kein vollständiger Satz) But what (---) if (---) poorer people have to use the car everyday because they have to drive to work. They have to pay that they are working. This wouldn't make work more attractive. (---) poorer people are disadvantaged. Another cause why

this credit cards are not a good idea is that you can't control it. There would be a lot of situations where are disagreements. For example (Komma) if people drive together to work. Now who have to pay with carbon for that? The driver or the other ones? (keine vollständige Frage) Another fact is that you can't handle everything with money. Everyone has to pay that the environment become better. But money doesn't help. You can't stop (---) global warming with money. My idea is that there have to be recompenses for those people who do something against (---) environment problems. There have to be individual things, which make environment protection very attractive and also necessary. It's very important that everybody knows about the problems and the results if we go on like this. All in all (Komma) I think it's very good that there are people who think about a solution and things that can be do to stop (---) global warming. Nevertheless (Komma) I think the credit-cards and money wouldn't be a good solution (Punkt)

Soweit ich verstehen konnte, was du ausdrücken wolltest, muss das Fettgedruckte korrigiert bzw. geändert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

AstridDerPu

Hallo, schonmal danke dafür. Ich hab mich nun lange damit auseinandergesetzt und viel kontrolliert und korrigiert, dennoch weiß ich bei folgenden Sätzen nicht, was falsch ist:

On the other side (Komma) if there are people who cut pollution of (was muss ich da verwenden?) the carbon they produce, they could sell their surplus. Mr Miliband also suggests that banning products like light bulbs or electrical appliances which waste power while on standby, have to** forbid.** da komm ich gar nicht weiter, wie ich das umschreiben soll. Wenn ich das banning oben streiche und stattdessen dann hinten schreibe "have to ban" geht das dann?

what (---) if (---) poorer people have to use the car everyday because they have to drive to work. Weiß ich auch nicht was falsch ist

Another cause why this credit cards are not a good idea is that you can't control it. Habe jetzt anstat this these geschrieben und snstatt control check geht das dann=

There would be a lot of situations where are disagreements. --> where disagreements will be. Richtig?

For example (Komma) if people drive together to work. Da weiß ich gar nicht was falsch ist

Now who have to pay with carbon for that? The driver or the other ones? (keine vollständige Frage) --> das soll ja extra so sein mit der offenen frage aber was genau ist bei der 1. Frage falsch?

Everyone has to pay that the environment** become better.** Kann man doch so sagen?

My idea is that there have to be recompenses for those people who do something against (---) environment problems. recompense= Belohn ung/entschädigung, das will ich dch damit ausdrücken

There have to be individual things, which make environment protection very attractive and also necessary. da versteh ich nicht, was genau falsch ist

All in all (Komma) I think it's very good that there are people who think about a solution and things that can be do to stop (---) global warming. Wieso kann man nicht things verwenden? habe do in done verändert richtig? Dankeschön!!!

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Ich empfinde "Arbeitsaufträge" dieser Länge als Zumutung.

Englisch Text kontrollieren

Hi

könnte evtl. jemand meinen Englischtext kontrollieren bitte? Ich weiß ist jetzt nicht der beste und vieles mehrmals geschrieben aber ich muss 200 Wörter haben^^ Hier der Text über Rassentrennung in Amerika:

Segregation in America

Segregation in America was till the 1960s. Till 1865 the black American had to work as slaves for the white but this ends after the Civil War. Then the Civil Rights Movement began with a leader, who was called Martin Luther King. They didn’t fought with violence, just with speeches and demonstrations. Martin Luther King was murdered in 1968. Now, in America there isn’t segregation any more, but some people are prejudiced against Blacks any more, but I think the situation of African American has improved a lot since the Civil Rights Movement. There are more blacks who have a good education and good jobs. Many blacks are famous sportlers or music and film stars. And besides the President of America is a black one – Barack Obama. So the situation of blacks is much better, but not as good as the situation of whites, because some whites are prejudiced against blacks and so often they don’t get such good jobs as whites. There are more blacks than whites, who haven’t got a good education or who haven’t got a job. And in America, there is still prejudice and discrimination against blacks, because some people think there are criminal or dirty. So the situation of blacks is better than before the Civil Rights Movement, but isn’t such good as the situation of Whites.

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Englisch Written Discussion Verbesserungsvorschläge

Boot Camps in Germany !!!

Some people mean that the boot camps in the USA a good idea , but should be boot camps introduced in germany ?

Many people and parents says that boot camps are very good , because boot camps helps troublemakers to learn discipline. And when they learn discipline the crime rate will be go down. Second, the lessons in the school will be more quiet and than the students can better learn and have than better marks. As well the children will be trained they physical fitness and they learn to live healthy. When they used to the circumstances in boot camps, they will live in that way , when leaving the camp.

However, other people and parents are against boot camps, because they think that the children soon forget about boot camp and get in trouble again. Another argument against is the cost ! If boot camps are built in germany, the state would have many costs. The last argument is that many people say that children didnt learn discipline but should have been broken. People say that the boot camps are to hard for children and that the teachers in the camps are too strict.

After looking at both sides I think that boot camps shouldnt be built in germany. The advantages are very good, but the disadvantages are predominant.

Verbesserungsvorschläge für diesen Text wären hilfreich :)

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Brauche eure Hilfe in English? Es ist wichtig?

Könnt ihr mir meinen Text durchlesen und wenn ihr Fehler findet es ausbessern, da ich versuche mich zu verbessern. Ich würde mich für eure Hilfe sehr bedanken und bedanke mich im voraus . Vielen Dank für eure Hilfe

Today I will speak about young People. The important thing for the Teenagers is Clothes. For many Teenagers, it does not matter what the clothes look like, the price and the brand always important. Many teenagers say that they are too overpriced brands but still are almost all of their clothes from well-known brands.

The teenagers try to style themselves to either show-off or impress girls. They want to belong to a group to hang out with or they also make fun of the others who cannot afford expensive clothes or use their money sparingly.

Especially sports brands are very popular with boys and girls are more classic clothes. There are also some Youtubers who make videos about it and then they look at the kids and then they try to dress like their idols.

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Was ist das für ein Texttyp?

Argumentativ text?

Narrative text?

Descriptive text?

Expository text?

Instructive text?

literaly / ficitonal text?

non-literaly / non ficitional-text?

7Ps of the marketing mix: Background info

Product vs service

The marketing mix which is mainly used in the service industry is made up of seven rather than four marketing tools. The reasons for this are that services are not tangible in the way that products are and that, being in close contact with the customers, friendly customer service is very important. The tools ‘people’, ‘process’ and ‘physical facilities’ are therefore added to the four Ps of ‘product’, ‘price’, ‘place’ and ‘promotion’.

Products and services are, at first glance, two very similar concepts because customers pay for them.

However, products and services are also different from each other. For example, if a customer asks what you can make for them, they are referring to a product (you can also think of this as goods) – something that can typically be touched or held. This product is only produced once and the customer can then use it many times. If a customer asks what you can do for them, they are referring to a service. A service can be used more than once (e.g. making phone calls) and the customer cannot own it like a product. That is why intangible services need to be marketed differently than tangible products.

Once a business owner in the service industry, e.g. a hairdresser, has decided on a service and on a target market, the owner will then apply the 7 Ps to influence his potential customers to buy the service like, for example, haircuts.

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Könnte jemand bitte meine Englisch Argumentation korrektur lesen?

Asbos

In Britain, children and teenagers can be given an ASBO if they do anything that is an antisocial behavior. It’s a way of punishing them for their actions instead of going to prison or similar punishments. An ASBO consists of several punishments like being forbidden to go to different areas of a town or to meet specific people.

The problem with ASBO’s is that they can give the person depression because they are socially isolated. Consequently, this can lead to self harm or depression in the worst cases. Secondly, their actions aren’t primarily punished they are prevented so that the child/teen won’t do it anymore. Furthermore, the things that are reported aren’t necessarily illegal sometimes it’s just something that might be annoying to others, like tattoos. Having said that, this might just be a way of showing personality. Reportedly, it has happened that someone was just given an ASBO because he looked scary and was always wearing a hood. Another thing to add is that the pictures that are hung up around town can be really embarrassing and can lead to harassment by others. On the other hand, ASBOS also have advantages. Many teenagers have their problems with school, friends etc. This might lead to some illegal actions like drinking or smoking. In addition to that, there often is some kind of group pressure. ASBO’s are a way of showing them that their actions are wrong and that there is a solution to their problems. For instance, it’s a way of identifying that their actions have been wrong. Another key thing to remember is that ASBO’s can keep the children/teenagers from going to prison and that would be way worse.

All things considered, I think that ASBO’s can be good for the young people to change their antisocial behavior. That way, they can understand that their actions have been wrong and change them for good.

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Outsourcing - Globalisation

Hallo meine Lieben,

habe einen Text im Bezug auf Outsourcing geschrieben. Fällt euch im Bezug auf Globalised Outsourcing noch etwas ein ? Und bitte seid so lieb und korrigiert den Text falls möglich :) Danke schonmal :)

Outsourcing is the act of one company contracting with another company to provide services that might otherwise be performed by in-house employees. Often the tasks that are outsourced could be performed by the company itself, but in many cases there are financial advantages that come from outsourcing. Many large companies now outsource jobs such as call center services, e-mail services, and payroll.

There are many reasons that companies outsource various jobs, but the most prominent advantage seems to be the fact that it often saves money. Many of the companies that provide outsourcing services are able to do the work for considerably less money, as they don't have to provide benefits to their workers and have fewer overhead expenses to worry about. Depending on location, it may also be more affordable to outsource to companies located in different countries.

Positive Aspects

• Some people can move easily from country to country. • Many people who dont have a good education get the opportunity to get better jobs. • Companies can produce their products much cheaper and outsource their production into other countries.

Negativ Aspects

• Many people who have a good education lose their jobs because they are more expensive than guest workers from developing countries. • Traditions as well as culture get lost. • There is no high living standard anymore.

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