Englisch-Hausaufgabe richtig?
Hallo,
ich habe gestern eine Hausaufgabe bekommen, in der Ich eine Email schreiben muss....
Ihr amerikanischer Freund hat Ihnen geschrieben, dass er über den großen Erfolg des Films "Fack ju Göthe" gelesen hat und fragt Sie, was der Film mit dem "echten" Schulleben in Deutschland zu tun hat. Sie haben folgenden Artikel gelesen und fassen ihn für Ihren Freund zusammen. Sie nehmen insbesondere auf die beiden folgenden Aspekte Bezug:
- weitere deutsche Filme, die über das Schulleben berichten
- welche Auswirkungen haben diese Filme auf das Schulleben nach Ansicht der Experten, sprich Lehrer.
Schreiben sie eine Email von ca. 250 Wörter.
Meine E-Mail ist hier:
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Dear Robert,
I read your E-mail this afternoon and your question about the connection between the movie “Fack ju Göthe“ and our school life here in germany made me smile a bit because actually most of it is nonsense and should just entertain. However, like coincidence wants, I became aware of an article about exactly this topic, that´s why he´d probably interest you. First of all, other films about the school life are mentioned like the comedy “Frau Müller muss weg”, the historical “Freistatt”, the RTL series “Der Lehrer” and last but not least a documentary called “Neuland”. Subsequently, three teachers are asked what consequences these films might have and whether these are realistic in comparison to everyday life. Clara Hückelheim says, that the movies are partly realistic but also partly exaggerated. Also she is afraid, that some of them stoke prejudices like “teachers have much free time” or “teachers can´t evaluate everyone fairly”, which, in her opinion, does not reflect the truth, whereas Marco Fileccia thinks, that on the one hand no teacher could break so many rules especially Zeki Müller in “Fack ju Göthe”, because he would be fired instantly and that on the other hand these educationals support their students individual possibilities. Nicolas Schmidt sets the humor in the foreground and says he was surprised how funny some of the movies are and that they aren´t relevant for the everyday life, in which he concludes, all of them have no effect on the reality. All in all, we can say that none of the three are against this sort of films and they are mostly for it. I hope I answered your question satisfyingly, but if you have any others, don’t be to shy to write me again.
Yours sincerely
Timon Berten
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Nun wollte Ich fragen, da Ich in Zusammenfassungen in Deutsch nie gut war, ist das genug und vor allem ist die Zusammenfassung so wie sie sein soll?
Vielen Dank im Voraus
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Dear Robert,
I read your E-mail this afternoon and your question about the connection between the movie “Fack ju Göthe“ and our school life here in Germany made me smile a bit because actually most of it is nonsense and should just entertain. However, coincidentally, I became aware of an article exactly about this topic, that´s why it would probably interest you. In this article other films about the school life are mentioned such as the comedy “Frau Müller muss weg”, the historical “Freistatt”, the RTL series “Der Lehrer” and last but not least a documentary called “Neuland”. Subsequently, three teachers are asked what consequences these films might have and whether these are realistic in comparison to everyday life. Clara Hückelheim says, that the movies are partly realistic but also partly exaggerated. Also she is afraid, that some of them stoke prejudices like “teachers have too much free time” or “teachers can´t evaluate everyone fairly”, which, in her opinion, does not reflect the truth, whereas Marco Fileccia thinks, that on the one hand no teacher could break so many rules especially Zeki Müller in “Fack ju Göthe”, because he would be fired instantly and that on the other hand these educationalists support their students' potential. Nicolas Schmidt sets the humor in the foreground and says he was surprised how funny some of the movies are and that they aren´t relevant to everyday life, and he concludes, all of them have no effect on reality. All in all, we can say that none of the three are against these sort of films and they mostly support them. I hope I answered your question satisfactorily, but if you have any others, don’t be too shy to write me again.
Yours sincerely
Das hast sehr gut geschrieben. Keine großen Fehler abe ich habe kleine Veränderungen gemacht und falls du damit nicht einverstanden bist, sag mir Bescheid bitte.
I read your E-mail this afternoon and your question about the connection between the movie “Fack ju Göthe“ and our school life here in germany made me smile a bit because actually most of it is nonsense and should just entertain.
Most of what is nonsense? Der Film oder dein Schulleben? Außerdem: Mach zwei Sätze draus!
like coincidence wants
Besser: as luck would have it
why he´d probably interest you
*it, denn der Artikel ist keine Person
realistic in comparison
besser: realistic comparisons
says, that
Wieso der Beistrich?
afraid, that
Wir sind hier nicht im Deutschen, kein Beistrich.
stoke prejudices
Vorurteile schüren? Naja, kannst auch mit establish prejudices ausdrücken.
Also she is afraid, that some of them stoke prejudices like “teachers have much free time” or “teachers can´t evaluate everyone fairly”, which, in her opinion, does not reflect the truth, whereas Marco Fileccia thinks, that on the one hand no teacher could break so many rules especially Zeki Müller in “Fack ju Göthe”, because he would be fired instantly and that on the other hand these educationals support their students individual possibilities.
Unbedingt kürzen oder zu zwei Sätze verarbeiten. Da muss man ja dreimal lesen, damit man sich alles merkt.
on the one hand no teacher could break so many rules
on the other hand these educationals support
Das hat keine Korrelation. Ich kann sagen: On the one hand I like school but on the other hand it's exhausting me. Du schreibst: Einerseits kann ein Lehrer gar nicht so viele Regeln brechen, andererseits macht diese Bildungsmaßnahme die Schüler individuell. Das passt mit on the one hand/on the other hand nicht!
All in all, we can say that
*I, nicht we, denn wer sind wir?
Yours sincerely
Yours sincerely, -> Immer mit einem Komma!
Nun wollte Ich fragen, da Ich in Zusammenfassungen in Deutsch nie gut war, ist das genug und vor allem ist die Zusammenfassung so wie sie sein soll?
Das hätte am Anfang gehört, lol
Die Namen fallen auf, entweder du versiehst sie mit einer Position. z.B. Nicolas Schmidt, director of the film, oder du lässt die Namen ganz weg und schreibst nur die Position.
Sunst ist's in Ordnung. Was ihr alles in eine Zusammenfassung packen müsst, weiß ich nicht, da gibt's unterschiedliche Meinungen.
DAnke fur deine Hilfe, ich werd mir deine Tipps zu Herzen nehmen ;)
Mir ist nichts mehr aufgefallen!
Der Text gefällt mir sehr gut, er war zwar schon davor in schönem Englisch verfasst, jetzt aber lässt er sich flüssig lesen auch noch.
LG
Ich habe meinen Text mal nach deinem Vorbild "angepasst":
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Dear Robert,
I read your E-mail this afternoon and your question about the connection between the movie “Fack ju Göthe“ and our school life here in germany made me smile a bit because actually most of its content is nonsense and should just entertain. However, like coincidence wants, I became aware of an article exactly about this topic, that´s why it would probably interest you. First of all, other films about the school life are mentioned like the comedy “Frau Müller muss weg”, the historical “Freistatt”, the RTL series “Der Lehrer” and last but not least a documentary called “Neuland”. Subsequently, three teachers are asked what consequences these films might have and whether these are realistic in comparison to everyday life. The first one says, that the movies are partly realistic but also partly exaggerated. Also she is afraid, that some of them stoke prejudices like “teachers have much free time” or “teachers can´t evaluate everyone fairly”, which, in her opinion, does not reflect the truth. The second one thinks that firstly no teacher could break so many rules especially Zeki Müller in “Fack ju Göthe”, because he would be fired instantly and that secondly these educationalists support their students individual possibilities. The third sets the humor in the foreground and says he was surprised how funny some of the movies are and that they aren´t relevant for everyday life, in which he concludes, any of them have no effect on the reality. All in all, I can say that none of the teachers are against this sort of films and they are mostly for it. I hope I answered your question satisfyingly, but if you have any others, don’t be to shy to write me again.
Yours sincerely,
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