Englische Hausaufgabe über probleme von Teenagern heutzutage verbessern?

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A frequently Problem for Teenagern today is the self acceptance. More and more Teenagern have no self-confidence anymore or even suffer from self-hatred because they have the feeling to not be good enought. Due to all the stress of the parents, The school, The acceptance of groups, the expectation of oneself and all the Tasks of everyday it can be to get lost in it. Teenager have the same redponsibilities like the afults but cant be independent and don't have the rights to Decide about themselfs. Nowadays there are evermore Teenager that suffer from mental illness. They suffer from negative body image.And they want to find out who they are. Today Teenagern feel Lots of pressure from peers,Parents and Society to conform to conflicting expectation. The parents make a lot of pressure to have good Grades and they forbid a lot of things. The Society make fast jokes about people and if you take it seriously you will get a lot of self-doubt. So a lot of Teenager try to cop with their Problems and are ready to take risk for example drugs and they don't become the Help that they need.

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AstridDerPu

Von gutefrage auf Grund seines Wissens auf einem Fachgebiet ausgezeichneter Nutzer

Englisch, Hausaufgaben

19.09.2021, 07:57

Hallo,

warum nicht auf die Klein- und Großschreibung? Sie ist auch wichtig!

A frequently (Grammatik) Problem for Teenagern (RS) today is (---) self acceptance. More and more Teenagern (RS) have no self-confidence anymore or even suffer from self-hatred because they have the feeling to not be good enought (RS). Due to all the stress of (Präposition) the (Pronomen) parents, (---) school, (---) acceptance of (Präpostion) groups, the expectation of oneself (Formulierung) and all the Tasks of everyday (Formulierung) (Komma) it can be to get lost in it (Formulierung). - Dieser Satz enthält so viele Fehler und muss komplett neu formuliert werden.

Teenager (Grammatik) have the same redponsibilities (RS) like (Wort) the afults (RS) but cant (RS) be independent and don't *1 have the rights (Grammatik) to Decide about themselfs (RS). Nowadays (Komma) there are evermore Teenager (Grammatik) that suffer from mental illness. They suffer from negative body image. And (Kein Satzanfang) they want to find out who they are. Today Teenagern (RS) feel Lots of pressure from peers, Parents and Society to conform to conflicting expectation (Grammatik). (---) parents make a lot of pressure (Formulierung) to have good Grades and they forbid a lot of things (Formulierung). (---) Society make fast (Position) jokes about people and if you take it (Grammatik) seriously you will get (Wort) a lot of self-doubt. So a lot of Teenager (Grammatik) try to cop (RS) with their Problems and are ready to take risk (Grammatik) (Komma) for example drugs and they don't become (Wort) the Help that (optional) they need.

*1: Kurzformen werden vorwiegend im gesprochenen Englisch verwendet. In der Schriftsprache - zumindest in formellen Schreiben - sollte man solche und andere Kurzformen vermeiden.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!

:-) AstridDerPu

Kallik861

Fragesteller

19.09.2021, 08:03

Danke für deine Hilfe

SchlaueFragenet

19.09.2021, 00:19

Noch viel Luft nach oben. Aufgrund zahlreicher grammatikalischen Fehler und "harten" Übergängen rückt der eigentlich (gute!) Inhalt in den Hintergrund und lässt den Text oberflächlich wirken.

Mit ein bisschen Arbeit sehe ich allerdings noch Potential. Also setz dich an die Überarbeitung. :)

PS: In welcher Klasse bist du denn?

Kallik861

Fragesteller

19.09.2021, 00:22

Ich gehe in die 10 Klasse. Danke für dein Feedback ich werde mich da noch mal dran setzen und es irgendwie versuchen

BabyBoss007

19.09.2021, 00:10

Ich finde den super :D

Kallik861

Fragesteller

19.09.2021, 00:11

Okay danke für dein Feedback

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