[HILFE] in Englisch Stadt beschreiben
Hallo, brauche Hilfe. Kann jemand so nett sein und gucken ob dieser Text einigermaßen (9.klasse) in Ordnung ist.:
Mumbai is one of the most populated cities of the world. It is the largest, richest and fastest city if india
Mumbai's population is divided into two sections. On the one hand, there live the wealthy and well-paid people, on the other hand, many people live there in slums are poor and can even afford to live just a little bungalow.
A big advantage in the city, are the attractions. There you can view the artworks of this unique culture. the culture is in buildings, roads and human recognizable.
However, there are also negative aspects that speak against this city. For example, slums are not a good outlook as a tourist. The poor people, poor children and beggars would adversely affect the tourist.
By and large, is mumbai a very interesting city. As a tourist you will discover there a lot and can learn new things.
Kann mir jemand (wäre nett ;) ) Verbesserungsvorschläge und Fehler beheben.
Lg
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Mumbai is one of the most populated cities of the world. It is the largest, richest and fastest city if india
in the world
fastest growing city
of india
Mumbai's population is divided into two sections. On the one hand, there live the wealthy and well-paid people, on the other hand, many people live there in slums are poor and can even afford to live just a little bungalow.
there live wealthy (you don't need an article here)
many people are poor, living in slums and can even afford a little bungalow
A big advantage in the city, are the attractions. There you can view the artworks of this unique culture. the culture is in buildings, roads and human recognizable.
You can recognize the country's culture in building, roads and even in the habitants.
However, there are also negative aspects that speak against this city. For example, slums are not a good outlook as a tourist. The poor people, poor children and beggars would adversely affect the tourist.
for tourists
By and large, is mumbai a very interesting city. As a tourist you will discover there a lot and can learn new things.
All in all mumbai is a very interesting city. As a tourist you will discover a lot of new things and you will be able to learn something about their culture.
Würd ich jetzt so schreiben.
meinst du fastest GROWING city ?
on the one hand hab ich noch nie gehört, ich weiß aber net ob es richtig ist
to live just IN a little bungalow
the cukture is SHOWN in buildings.....
not a good outlook ????
By and large ?????????
and YOU can learn new things
ansonsten ziemlich gut
Auf die Schnelle:
Mumbai is one of the most populated cities in the world. It is the largest, richest and fastest city in India.
Mumbai's population is divided into two sections. On the one hand, there are (---) wealthy and well-paid people, on the other hand, there are many poor people living in slums, who
cannot even afford to live in small bungalows. (= die es sich noch nicht einmal leisten können in kleinen Bungalows zu leben) / can only afford to live in small bungalows (= die es sich nur leisten können in kleinen Bungalows zu leben) - was wolltest du hier sagen?
A big advantage in the city kein Komma are the attractions. There you can view the artworks of this unique culture. - Warum ist das ein Vorteil?
The culture is in buildings, roads and human recognizable. - Satzstellung
In the city there are many attractions, where you can view the artworks of this unique culture. You can find/see culture in building, roads and humans.
Negative aspects of the city are, for example, the slums with the poor people and children and the beggars, which do not offer a nice view / image to tourists.
would adversely affect the tourist. - Was willst du damit sagen?
By and large, Mumbai is a very interesting city. As a tourist you will discover a lot and can learn new things there. - stilstisch nicht gerade gut
Wenn du mich fragst, ziemlich dürftig für die 9. Klasse, vor allem auch die Satzstellung!
Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
AstridDerPu
- Zeile: nicht if sondern of india...