ich schreibe nächste woche eine klausur in englisch - charkterisierung - und habe heute etwas zur übung aufgeschrieben. Hat jemand von euch vllt verbesserungsvorschläge zu meinem text?
In the following I'm going to charcterize Tommy, the protagonist of the story 'Bread on the water' by David Lubar, which deals with the topic of making a difference.
Tommy is a boy visiting the church with his parents, where he's sitting in the back with his best friend Andy. He isn't really interested in the sermon, he even sais things like 'we're doomed' about it, but when Andy starts to behave badly, he gets quite nervous, looks around if people aren't watching them and regrets to be sitting there. He's quite egoistic and not very matey with Andy, which becomes apparent when he insists on not having done anything towards Assistant Pastor John who banishes both of them from church. Even while leaving, he doesn't stop looking around if somebody has seen them. All that makes me think about his reasons for such a behaviour - is he just scared of getting in trouble with his parents or doesn't he want people to think badly about him?
But throughout the story, he changes. First, when a bum appears in front of him and Andy, he is disgusted. He is full of prejudices, thinks that all bums spend the money they get for alcohol and wants to tell the guy to leave them alone. When Andy decides to buy some food for him, Tommy even thinks about splitting. He also isn't very happy about having to pay for his food. But after some time spent with the man, he starts to think about him and his situation and feels really glad about having a loving family. He begins to talk to the bum and dares to look at him. And after Andy gave a big tip to a waitress which really wasn't friendly with them, he thinks about her working hard, too.
In my opinion, Tommy all together is first a very negative character, but throughout the story he improves. In the end he understands something very important - that there are people outside, who have a harder life than he and that he can help them. Symbollically, he throws a dollarbill out of the window, so someone who really needs it, can find it.
ich habe zeilenangaben und ähnliches weggelassen, bin offen für jegliche kritik und bitte darum ;) danke, wäre sehr nett