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good or bad for us. In the following comment I will discuss whether social networks are good or bad for us.

Das good or bad for us, hast du oben schon. Somit sollte dem Leser das ganze schon klar sein.

It is because you can communicate with people all over the world, if they have the social network too.

It Is because klingt komisch. It's possible to get easily connection to people all over the world.

Look at a example? Der Text klingt nach einer Aufzählung und nicht nach einem Bericht. Ich hätte: Here is a short example benutzt.

..your friends know this import Information.

important? import - export ist etwas anderen.

our age, your name and other personal Information

Our? Am besten bei der Form your bleiben oder wenn du unser be nutzen möchtest our benutzen.

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that social networks have pros and cons.

Nachdem ich pro und contra verglichen habe, kommst du zu dem Ergebniss das es pro und contra gibt? Das hast du doch oben schon ausführlich erläutert? Du sollst doch nun dein Endergebniss der Vor- und Nachteile schildern.

Nachdem ich pro- und contra verglichen habe, komme ich zu dem folgenden Ergebniss:

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the Foliengrössen conclusion about social networks:

It is important to mention....

So würde ich das grob formulieren.

danke das hilft mir schon weiter :)

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Hier ein paar Verbesserungsvorschläge: :)

A statistic of the website
shows that we use a wide variety of social networks. According to this
questionaire, 71% of the sampled population use Facebook, 52% Instagram
and 41% Snapchat,  those are only a few social networks of the many we
use. I would like to know whether social networks have positive or
negative effects on us. In the following comment I will discuss this
very topic.

First of all I think social networks make
communication so much easier for us, because you can chat with people
all over the world, if they hold an an account with the social network
too. Let's have a look at an example: a relative of yours lives in
another country than you. Your only possibility of communicating with
him/her are social networks like facebook or snapchat.

Anoher
significant point is that important informations are fastly distributed.
You can write a text on a social network and all your friends can read
it immediately.. Let me give you an example: if you are pregnant, you
can write a text on a social network and all your friends know this
important Information.

On the downside, an item against social
networks is that the personal contact to your friends may be less. Many
people only communicate via social networks.

Another point that
should not to be underestimated is that the people in social networks
are not always who they seem to be. In a social network you can choose
our age, your name, your profile picture and other personal Informations
but no one knows whether these informations are correct, or not. Many
teenagers become friends with people, who pretend to be about the same
age. When they meet each other in real life, the guy with the cute,
16-year old looking profile picture, turns out to be a 40-year old
rapist. The Youtuber Coby Persin demonstrated these dangers very
illustrative, as reported by the online-journal "chip.de".

Weighing
the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that social networks have
advantages, as well as disadvantages. It is important to mention that
dangers are everywhere and that is the reason, why most of the people
will still use the social networks in the future. Everyone must decide
for oneself which social network one uses and how often.

So würde ich es machen...;)

richtig gut :) danke

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