in my summer holidays - hilfe
ich muss in meiner bevorstehenden englisch arbei einen text über meine sommerferien schreiben, mit 150 wörtern, ich bitte um hilfe , für einen guten und grammatikalisch richtigen text + zeit ! DANKE!
In my summer holidays I stayed in Germany with my family for six weeks. One day in my holidays I went shopping with my friend Dana at Primark's. Primark has a lot of beatiful clothes for very lour price. I buy jewelry, clothes, hats and other nices things.Many days i spent in Overne at my friends! I stayed a few days at katharina's and Anna's. We had a lots of fun together and very nice days. Some nights were very long an funny, for example, we saw shooting stars in the sky at night other we saw films untile late in the night. On some days, when the weather was good we went swimming in a pool. My little brother from frankfurt, was two weeks to visit. We always have very fun together! At the end of my holidays i was at the kirmes with my friends from Overne. Together we walked to many attractions and we and we bought cotton candy. These were my experiences in the summer holidays.
& jz bitte verbessern, daaaaaaaanke!!!
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Okay, die ganze Erzählung ist vielleicht ein bisschen holprig, aber inhaltlich werde ich natürlich nichts ändern.
In my summer holidays I stayed in Germany with my family for six weeks. One I went shopping with my friend Dana at Primark's. Primark has a lot of beautiful clothes at very low prices. I bought jewellery, clothes, hats and other nice things. I spent some time in Overne with my friends! So I stayed a few days at Katharina's and Anna's. We had a lot of fun and spent very nice days together. Some nights were very long and funny, for example, we saw shooting stars in the sky at night or we watched films until late in the night. On some days, when the weather was fine, we went swimming in a nearby pool. My little brother from Frankfurt came to see us and spent two weeks with us. When he is here we always have a lot of fun together! At the end of my holidays I was at a fair with my friends from Overne. Together we enjoyed the many attractions there and we bought cotton candy. Well, this is all I did during my summer holidays. ["experiences" würde ich hier nicht unbedingt gebrauchen. Das klingt zu sehr nach "Erfahrung"]
Denk daran, dass I immer groß geschrieben wird.
Sorry, irgendwie ist mir bei der Verbesserung das "day" im zweiten Satz abhanden gekommen. > One day I went shopping ...