Frage von united99, 28

Hallo, ich habe am Dienstag meine mündliche Prüfung und wollte mal fragen ob hier jemand vielleicht meinen Text kontrollieren kann?

Today I want tell you something about Holidays. Personally when i get older I don't like travel to other countries because i'm so far away from my friends and i'm afraid to missing out important things. Anyway I travel with my family to different countries, in early life i travel to the Netherlands on a camping ground i can't tell anything about the trip because I can't remember. At the age of 6 i was in Turkey with my hole family, we were in Antalya we stay for 2 weeks. That was a nice time for me and everyone was happy. The hotel was so nice and we had such a great time together. There are so funny memories for example I was afraid of a taxi and we must drive with it to came to the city and it was a party taxi and my mother was sitting next to me and i said "mom you can move closer to me" i said this because i was so afraid. The weather was nice it was very hot and because of this i can't eat so much i dont know why and when we go to the dinner i'm only eating 5 or 6 pieces of melon. That was such a great time. When i was 14 I travel for the second time to turky and we were in the same Hotel, i was with my uncle and my aunt and 2 friends from my uncle. That was a nice time too, but I have noticed that something isn't good, i miss my friends and after four days or so i want back home because they told me on Whatsapp so great things what they did and that sounds so funny. But all in all it was a great trip to turkey. At the age of 15 my mom asks me whether I want to go to Italy with her and her partner. And i must be honest I have advised 2 weeks and asks my friends would you travel to italy if you were me and they said Joyce why you are thinking about that? Yes of course i would travel.. At the end my desicion was yes and i must say that i had a great time in Italy.. We drive with a bike trough the city, we took part in a guided tour of the city Sienna. And we saw many sights for example the leaning tower of pisa. In the easter Holidays i will travel to the north sea with my family and my best friend Joan. And i'm very glad because Joan is with us. And in the Summer Holidays i will travel to turkey with my mother and her partner, i hope we have a great time and i wont miss my friends so hardly. For me the best holidays were the summer holidays because you mustn't think on school and the wheather is actually nice. And when i dont travel to other countries i'm only on the way with my friends. We go swimming, or make a picnic sometimes we camping in the garden. All in all i can say that i love holidays.

Expertenantwort
von AstridDerPu, Community-Experte für lernen, 9

Today I want (Hier fehlt eine Präposistion; besser: would like to) tell you something about Holidays (RS). Personally (Komma) when i get older (Komma) I don't like (Wort) travel to other countries because i'm (Zeit) so far away from my friends and i'm afraid to missing (Grammatik) out important things. Anyway (Komma) I travel with my family to different countries, (Neuer Satz) in early life i travel (Zeit) to the Netherlands on (Präposition) a camping ground (Wort; Satzstellung) (neuer Satz) i can't tell (Hier fehlt etwas.) anything about the trip because I can't remember. At the age of 6 (Komma) i was in Turkey with my hole (RS) family, we were in Antalya we stay (Grammatik) for 2 weeks. That was a nice time for me and everyone was happy. The hotel was so nice and we had such a great time together. There are so funny memories (Komma) for example I was afraid of a taxi and we must (Grammatik) drive (RS) with it to came (Zeit) to the city and it was a party taxi and my mother was sitting next to me and i said "mom you can move closer to me" (neuer Satz) i said this because i was so afraid. The weather was nice (neuer Satz) it was very hot and because of this i can't (Zeit) eat so (Wort) much (neuer Satz) i dont (RS) know why and when we go (Zeit) to (---) dinner (Hier fehlt etwas.) i'm (Zeit) only eating (Zeit) 5 or 6 pieces of melon. That was such a great time. When i was 14 (Komma) I travel (Zeit) for the second time to turky (RS; Ort vor Zeit) and we were in the same Hotel (RS) (neuer Satz) i was with my uncle and my aunt and 2 friends from (Grammatik; Präposition) my uncle. That was a nice time too, but I have noticed that something isn't (Zeit) good, i miss (Zeit) my friends and after four days or so (Komma) i want (Zeit; hier fehlt etwas) back home because they told me on Whatsapp (---) what they did (Zeit) and that sounds (Zeit) so funny. But all in all (Komma) it was a great trip to turkey (RS). At the age of 15 (Komma) my mom asks (Zeit) me whether I want (Zeit) to go to Italy with her and her partner. And i must be honest (Komma) I have advised (Grammatik, Zeit, hier fehlt eine Präposition) 2 weeks and asks (Zeit) my friends would you travel to italy if you were me (wörtliche oder indirekte Rede) and they said Joyce why you are thinking (Zeit) about that (Wort)? (Satzstellung) Yes (Komma) of course i would travel (Anführungszeichen). At (Präposition) the end (Komma) my desicion was yes and i must say that i had a great time in Italy.. We drive with (Wort) a bike trough (RS) the city (Satzstellung), we took part in a guided tour of the city (Hier fehlt eine Präposition.) Sienna. And (kein Satzanfang) we saw many sights (Komma) for example the leaning tower of pisa (RS). In the easter Holidays (RS; Komma) i will travel to the north sea (RS) with my family and my best friend Joan. And (s.o.) i'm very glad because Joan is with us. And (s.o.) in the Summer Holidays i (RS) will travel to turkey (RS) with my mother and her partner (Punkt) i hope we have (Zeit) a great time and i wont (RS) miss my friends so hardly (Wortart; Ausdruck). For me (Komma) the best holidays were the summer holidays because you mustn't (Zeit) think on (Präposition) school and the wheather is (Zeit) actually (Wort) nice. And (s.o.) when i dont (RS) travel to other countries (Komma) i'm only on the way (Ausdruck) with my friends. We go swimming, or make (Wort) a picnic (Konjunktion) sometimes we camping (Grammatik; Zeit) in the garden. All in all (Komma) i can say that i love holidays.

- Das englische Personalpronomen für ich = I schreibt man im Englischen immer groß, egal ob am Satzanfang, in der Satzmitte
oder am Satzende.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!

:-) AstridDerPu

Antwort
von Beeven, 13

Hab leider nicht so viel Zeit, also nur den ersten Teil:



Today I want to tell you something about holidays. Personally when I got older I didn't like to travel to other countries because I'm so far away from my friends and I'm afraid to missing out important things. Anyway I traveled with my family to different countries. In my early life I traveled to the Netherlands on a camping ground. I can't tell anything about the trip because I can't remember myself. At the age of 6 i was in Turkey with my whole family. We were in Antalya and we stayed there for 2 weeks. That was a nice time for me and everyone was happy. The hotel was so nice and we had such a great time together.

PS: Achte darauf, dass du "I" immer groß schreibst ^-^



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Vielen Dank! :)

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