Global Warming comment
ich habe ein comment über gloabel warming geschrieben...brauche ich für eine englischarbeit. Ist das comment so okay und das englisch? Habe es mit einem Freund geschrieben..
The question of global warming has long been a point of argument between scientists. Are we really threatened? Is mankind purposely destroying our planet? If so, is it too late to save it or is the climate change natural and outside of our power to change? Is it just a conspiracy? I will answer these questions in the following paragraphs.
One reason to worry is the fact that through global warming the Arctic glaciers are melting and causing the loss of the natural habitats of natural wildlife of the area such as the polar bears. But the opposite is true, the polar bear population has grown from 5000 in 1950 to approximately 25,000. Through this we can clearly see that the polar bears are not in danger of becoming endangered species. How are things looking with our atmosphere? Through the enormous amount of carbon dioxide being produced by our factories, as well as our wasteful lifestyles, many scientists claim that we have increased the size of the hole in the ozone layer. They are blaming mankind for putting so many pollutants into the troposphere which is causing the planet the heat up.
Habe keine Zeichen mehr frei, deswegen kommt die Fortsetzung als Antwort.
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Deinen Comment finde ich sehr gut, englisch und inhaltlich. Musst Du dafür auch Quellenangaben angeben oder kommt es bei dieser Übung nicht darauf an? Zum Schluss hin hast Du ein paar Kleinigkeiten, die man besser formulieren könnte, aber das muss nicht sein. Ich wünschte, ich würde öfters mal solche reports wie Deinen zu lesen bekommen...
so die fortsetzung =)
To date there has only been an increase of 0.8 degrees Celsius measured since 1850. In addition to that it is completely natural that the climate changes. For the past 200 years we have been living in a warming phase, from 1500-1800 we lived in a mini ice age. The scientists are also concerned about the shifting of the seasons, it has been observed that the birds have begun to migrate two weeks earlier. This is only the case in certain areas. The scientists also believe that the glaciers melt periodically, and it is only through satellite pictures that we notice it more now.
Should we really be overly concerned with all these different views? In my opinion, we are not at fault for the climate changes. We should not ignore our environment though. It does not hurt to separate our trash or to leave the car parked sometimes, which would help our figures. We only have this one planet and should handle it with respect. We do not to let ourselves be panicked because there are enough facts to show that we are not at fault for the global warming. We should be more concerned with atomic weapons, that we have already tested, and the damage that they cause. In my opinion, we will destroy our planet earlier that way than if we use our car to go to the store for bread.
sind nur ein paar kleine sachen die ich umformulieren wuerde aber ansonsten echt gut geschrieben
ich finds gut so. interessant zu lesen fueg vielleicht noch die quellen ein wo du die zahlen und infos her hast. z.b. research at www.1234.com shows that blablabla
und auch die struktur des comments ist okay?