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Nowadays (Komma) many people think that (---) criminal responsibility should be set to the age of 10 in Germany. Is that right? (Formulierung)

On (Hier fehlt etwas.) one hand (Komma) are children at the age of 10 too young for prison (Word Order). They don’t know (Wort) the consequences of what they (Formulierung) are doing (Grammatik). Or did you know at this age which punishment you get for e.g. for shoplifting? (Word Order; Formulierung; Wiederholung) But on the other hand (Komma) it’s unfair that younger people have no criminal responsibility.

I am convinced that we must set an example (Ich würde das ins Passiv setzen.). The problem is that a lot of children are criminal because they know they can’t get (Ich würde hier be vorziehen) punished. So I think they have to learn to bear responsibility earlier because  they shouldn’t get into trouble.

The next point I want to (besser: would like to) mention is (Hier fehlt etwas.) if they know (Grammatik) what is allowed to do (Grammatik) and which punishment they will get for which kind of crime (Formulierung, zu lang und umständlich, Wiederholung), they will be (Grammatik) scared off.

So (Wort) the risk that they will get criminal in the future could be minimised. But what is also (Wort) to do (Grammatik)? In my point of view (Komma) punishment by oneself (Ausdruck) can’t help alone (Ausdruck). (---) children have to be taught this (Was?) in school and by their
parents.

I come to the conclusion that this law (Welches Gesetz? Formulierung) would help (Komma) but we have to do more than just changing (Grammatik) a law. Also (kein Satzanfang; Komma) I think that the age of criminal responsibility should be set to the age of 12 because in my opinion (Komma) (---)10 is too young.

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Kommentar von moriarty123
02.09.2016, 20:22

top Danke!

Ich weiß das sehr zu schätzen!

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Nowadays many people think that the criminal responsibility should be set to the age of 10 in Germany. Is that right?

On the one hand at the age of 10 children are too young for prison. They
don’t understand what consequences their crimes can have. Or did you know at this age which punishment you get for e.g. for shoplifting? (I wouldn't ask a question, you're just repeating yourself here) But on the
other hand, it’s unfair that younger people have no criminal
responsibility. I am convinced that we must set an example. The problem
is that a lot of children are criminal because they know they can’t get
punished. So I think they have to learn to bear responsibility earlier
because they shouldn’t get into trouble. The next point I want to
mention is if they know what is allowed to do and which punishment they
will get for a certain kind of crime, they will be scared of committing said crime . So the risk that they will start a criminal career in the future could be minimised. Moreover, in my point of view, punishment by itself is not enough. The children have to be taught this in school and by their parents.

I come to the conclusion that this law would help but

the parents and teachers should be actively involved in teaching the children about the consequences of their choices

. Also, I think that the age of criminal responsibility should be set to the age of 12 because, in my opinion, the age of 10 is too young

(Why? you lack an argument here)

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Kommentar von moriarty123
02.09.2016, 19:17

Vielen Dank! Ja mein Englisch ist nicht das allerbeste...

Reicht das von der Länge her oder muss ich noch Argumente bestärken und wenn ja wie?

Und das mit dem letzten Satz überlege ich mir dann noch einmal ;)

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