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Dear Anne,
Lot's of greets from New York. My family and I will stay here for five days. It's a so big city and it's one of the best places I have ever seen in my life. Yesterday we visit the Empire State Building. With 381 meters it is the biggest skyscraper in NY and when you are on the top of the sight, you have a wounderful view over the whole city.
Oh yeah and today we visit the Central Park. I took lots of pictures for you and when I come home, I have to show you them ;) After that we went to China Town. Its so funny - the places there looks like little China. At least we drove with the subway to our hotel. Tomorrow we will go to the statue of liberty. For the last day, Dad have a big surprise for us - but I don't have any idea.
I hope I'll see you soon. Love, Marie