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Hallo, könnt ihr meinen Text korrigieren/ergänzen/umschreiben, ich würde mich riesig freuen, es geht um "Human Body und Human Body parts", ich danke euch :)
Our human body is a wonder: It performs several functions without rest from the birth. Our body continues to work, without stopping for a second. The main organs of the human body are lungs, heart, kidney, liver and brain and these organs work together which are controlled by the brain.
The vital organs in the body are those that power the life functions or protect them. Starting at the top would be the brain. Without it, the body is just a cooling heap of meat, because there would be no breathing, movement, muscle tone, or thermal regulation. The brain gives us intelligence to use our physical and mental abilities. The lungs provide the oxygen our life functions require, and the heart pumps the blood to all our soma cells. The liver regulates the chemical balance into the body and the kidneys remove cellular toxins from the blood. Without all these systems working to at least a minimum extent, the body will not hold life for more than a few days or for some of them, much less.
Physical health is important for how you feel, move and perform task without feeling of stress, pain and strain. Having a great physical health is in synergy with your mental and social health. They all work together. One aspect of a healthy body is our muscle mass: it is said that it can increase lifespan compared to people who don’t maintain a healthy body composition over time and as they age.
Exercising, eating a balanced diet, having a great social circle contributes to your physical health, builds your confidence and help you lead a great life and live long. So don’t forget to stay and life healthy!
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So kannst Du es abgeben, ohne dass es allzu cringy wird:
Our human body is a miracle: It performs without resting from the very day that we are born. Our body continues working without stopping for a second until we die. The main organs of the human body are lungs, heart, kidney, liver and these organs work together and are controlled by the brain.
The vital organs in our body are the ones that provide the life functions or protect them. Starting at the top there is the brain. Without it the body is just a mere heap of meat, because without it there would be no breathing, movement, muscle tone, or thermal regulation. The brain provides the intelligence to use our physical and mental abilities. The lungs provide the oxygen our life functions require, and the heart pumps the blood to all our soma cells. The liver regulates the chemical balance in the body and the kidneys remove cellular toxins from the blood. Without all these systems working at least to a minimum extent, the body will not hold life for more than a few days or often much less.
Physical health is important for how you feel, move and perform tasks without feeling of stress, pain and strain. Having a great physical health is in synergy with your mental and social health. They all work together. One aspect of a healthy body is our muscle mass: it is said that it can increase lifespan compared to people who don’t maintain a healthy body composition as they age.
Exercising, keeping a balanced diet, having a stable social life contributes to your physical health, builds up your confidence and helps you to lead a great life and live long. So don’t forget to stay and live healthy!
Hi,
Ich habe englisch Abi.
Ich habe 4 Zeilen gelesen. Ich konnte keinen Fehler finden.
Sie nicht so eitel.
Dein englisch ist 10 mal besser als meines.
(Ich habe Abi in englisch.)
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