Passt der Englische Text?

In the poem ‚,The Schoolboy‘‘ by William Blake, you get a clear message that the schoolboy doesn’t enjoy the school and its system at all, so the question that arises is ,,What could school do, to be more enjoyable for the schoolboy and students like me?‘‘

First of all many students have to wake up early in the morning, which isn’t a perfect start into the day. Furthermore they mostly can’t enjoy the morning even if they like to stand up early, because they must get finished quickly for school. To counteract this problem, it would be a good start to begin with school less early and to approach the day more calmly. So to remove the effect of a prison it’s important to produce a more peaceful environment for everyone, to make the classrooms more comfortable and even integrate some outdoors schoollessons in spring and summer, so that the pupils have more joy in learning and are able to concentrate more because of the fresh air and the nature. Last but not least we schoolboys anf schoolgirls should be allowed to have more own thoughts and to be able to control them and not just being forced to memorize things, which won’t be even important for our adulthood.

I also think that the last point which is beinh made here, is a fact which the author want to draw attention to, because it’s a mostly international problem that should has to change as we are not robots.

(Also mit dem letzten Teil bin ich eher unzufrieden weil so oft which drankommt)

3 Antworten

SweaterPrince

07.03.2020, 13:50

Hallo tsuna323,

In the poem ‚,The Schoolboy‘‘ by William Blake, the reader gets to know about a schoolboy who does not enjoy school and its system. This leads to the question, what could school do, to be more enjoyable for the schoolboy and students like me?‘‘

First of all, many students have to wake up early in the morning, which is not a good start into the day. They mostly can not enjoy the morning, even if they like to stand up early because they have to get finished quickly for school. To counteract this problem, it would be better to begin school less early and to approach the day more calmly. In order to remove the effect of a prison, it is important to produce a more peaceful environment for everyone. The classrooms should be more comfortable and the school should intefrate some outdoors school lessons in spring and summer so that the pupils have more joy in learning. This will also lead to a better concentration due to the fresh air. Last but not least, students should not be forced to memorize information, which might not even be important for our adulthood. Instead, we should be able to let our thoughts run free and explore the information on our own.

In my opinion, the author wants to show the reader that school has an international problem. William Blake calls for a change of teaching because we currently get treated like robots.

Ein paar Tipps, wie du dein Englisch verbessern kannst:
- englische Bücher lesen
- Serien auf Englisch schauen (eventuell mit detuschem Untertitel)
- grammatikalsche Regeln wiederholen
- Nachhilfe
- englisch-sprachige Brieffreunde oder ähnliches (bitte vorher mit deinen Eltern absprechen!)

Zudem würde ich dir empfehlen, alles auszuschreiben. Zum Beispiel aus ,,don't'' wird dann ,,do not''. Leider habe ich erst in der Oberstufe gelernt, dass darauf ein großer Wert gelegt wird.

Ich bin kein Englisch Experte und es können immer noch Fehler dazwischen sein, aber ich hoffe, dass dir der Text trotzdem weiterhilft, oder wenigstens Denkanstöße gibt.
Ich hoffe, ich habe deine Gedanken nicht verfälscht und richtig ausgedrückt.
viel Erfolg
- SweaterPrince! :)

tsuna323

Fragesteller

07.03.2020, 14:06

Vielen Dank!!!

tsuna323

Fragesteller

07.03.2020, 17:51

aber sooo katastrophal wars nicht oder?

SweaterPrince

08.03.2020, 00:49

@tsuna323

Ich finde deine Wortwahl sehr gut! Zudem nutzt du gewisse Satzanfänge, die sehr gerne von Lehrern gesehen werden! :)

Ich denke, manchmal hängst du noch zu viel an dem deutschen Satzbau, aber man kann deinen Textinhalt (zumindest als Deutscher) verstehen.

gfntom

07.03.2020, 13:11

Ehrliche Meinung?

Das ist kein englischer Text, das ist ein deutscher Text der fast 1:1 ins Englische übertragen wurde. Um in einer Sprache zu schreiben / sprechen muss man in der Sprache denken. Und nicht deutsche Gedanken zu übersetzen suchen.

tsuna323

Fragesteller

07.03.2020, 13:13

Okay danke. Hättest du Empfehlungen oder Vorschläge wie ich das in Zukunft machen könnte oder erlernen kann?

Reoledel

06.05.2020, 14:25

Passt, auch wenns teilweise blöde klingt, aber der Engländer kann was damit anfangen.

Hallo Leute, könnt ihr eventuell diesen Artikel lesen und wenn da Fehler sind, es zu korrigieren oder umzuschreiben? Wäre super nett von euch, meine Hausübung wird nämlich benotet und schreibt noch euren Feedback rein, ich danke euch :)

Los Angeles has seen the evil

A recent school shooting in Los Angeles has brought the issue of school safety in the bad light. So, people became aware of these happening. On 30th April 2023, two 17-year-old students have armed their high school with two guns which left 11 people dead and 5 injured. This incident has left people worried about the safety of students and staff at schools.

Gun violence, especially in schools, is still a national crisis in the United States and migrants are still allowed to carry a gun because of the “national firearms agreement”. Due to the licenses of weapons, such acts are occurring more and more frequently. In order to protect students and school staff, most schools have security guards. There are also usually controls at the entrances. As a way to prevent non-schoolers from entering the school, they have their own school cards, which clearly show the identifies of the students. In addition, the police have increased their presence at schools.

Students, who have witnessed such incident, are usually traumatised and can hardly cope without psychological help. Many students and parents report terrible feelings and perceptions. “I was so scared when I heard gunshots. I ran and hid under a desk until the police came. Now I’m afraid to come back to school,” says a victim who survived this cruelty. Parents were calling desperately for their children, they even got more scared when they didn’t respond. These are just a few. As a result, the police has to deal with such incidents more and more often. “It is nothing scary anymore, we are already used to it”, claims a policeman. “We are already best prepared for such acts”, adds another officer. They have certain educations and trainings for these hardships.

Due to the school shooting on April 30th, this issue is more present than ever. Many students and parents are extremely frightened that they can also be victims. This clearly shows that much more could be done preventively.

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Könnte jemand über meinen Essay drüber schauen?

         Every school should demand school uniform

In some countries all over the world school children have to wear uniforms the color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.

In my opinion school uniforms ind schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.

School uniforms are on the one side good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of theme haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case the school uniform is very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.

On the other side pupils cant find our style and have to wear clothes that they don’t wanted. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,It quickly becomes boring .However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy again and again, too.

On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.

I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style. Cause the bully is not reduced by a school uniform.

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Rede in Englisch halten?

Ich muss eine Rede (die eine Minute lang geht) im Englisch Unterricht halten. Mein Thema ist: why public transport should be free. Ich habe meine Rede jetzt fertig und wollte wissen was ich vielleicht verbessern oder anders machen könnte. Das ist sie:

Today, I want to talk about an issue that affects us all - public transport. While many of us rely on public transport to get around, it can be a burden on our wallets. That's why I believe that public transport should be free for everyone.

There are several advantages to free public transport. Firstly, it would encourage more people to use it, which would reduce traffic congestion and pollution in our cities. Secondly, it would make public transport more accessible to low-income individuals family’s, allowing them to travel more easily for work and other activities.

However, there is one potential drawback: the cost - implementing free public transport would require significant investment from governments and could potentially increase taxes.

But in conclusion I believe that the benefits outweigh the costs. By making public transport free, we can create a more equitable and sustainable society. Thank you.

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Ist diese englisch outline gut?

hallo wollte fragen ob diese outline gut ist.

The excerpt of an article "I Know What You Did Last Math Class," written by Jan Hoffman and published in "The New York Times" on 4. May 2008, Deals with school programs for parents to check their children's grades and behavior. In the following paragraphs, we will outline the information related to the benefits of these programs, as presented in the text.

The main body of the text highlights that many parents utilize these programs to exert greater control over their children's lives, especially during a phase when teenagers seek more independence. Parents argue that the intensely competitive college admissions process compels them to frequently check their children's online grades. Interestingly, many parents who engage in regular online grade checks fondly reminisce about their own adolescence, where deception was common. The advent of programs like Edline eliminates the covert satisfaction associated with such deception. Nevertheless, parents like Mrs. Tarantino, a supporter of Power School, contend that the stakes have drastically changed, citing today's all-encompassing academic pressure compared to previous generations.

Quantifying the precise impact of these programs on academic performance proves challenging due to numerous variables. However, principals anecdotal report that these programs have succeeded in motivating parents and students who were previously challenging to engage. They have notably assisted middle school boys in improving their organizational skills.

According to Ron Jones, the principal of Huth Middle School, situated in Matteson, IIlinois, a middle-class suburb of Chicago with a 90-percent minority student population, "Edline opens up communication between parents and teachers. It helps keep the children focused on their academics." These software solutions also prove beneficial for working parents, allowing divorced parents to access information without the need for direct contact.

In Noblesville, Indiana, after a survey indicated that parents felt adequately informed through PowerSchool and subsequent email exchanges with teachers, the middle-school principal decided to forego parent-teacher conferences and allocate the time back to classroom instruction.

In conclusion, these programs have both advantages and disadvantages. They enhance communication between parents and teachers, motivate parents and students, and cater to the needs of working parents. However, accurately quantifying their impact on academic performance remains challenging, and concerns regarding student privacy persist.

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Englisch Argument gut?

“sollten Handys in während der Schulzeit erlaubt sein, oder nicht“

Pupils shouldn’t be allowed to use their mobilephones during school because the Allownance of Cellphones would not only promote cheating in Tests it would also promote bullieng for sure. In many schools bullieng already is a big problem with which many pupils have to deal with. If phones were allowed in schools embarrassing pictures of your classmates or even of yourself might be taken and spread through the internet. Probably a few people might even get depressed because of the Knowledge that Pictures of them were taken and those pictures are on their way trough the internet. Because of the before named Facts, pupils shouldn’t be allowed to use their mobilephones during class

was kann ich verbessern? Bitte nicht auf Rechtschreibung achten habe das in 10min geschrieben.....was denkt ihr, wie viele Punkte ich bekommen würde (klasse 11, Bayern)

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Englisch Hausaufgaben Verbesserung

Könntet ihr folgenden Text bitte korrigieren??

How do you feel about this song? When I listened for the first time to Beyonce´s song “Proud to be an American”, I recognized that the melody and the rhythm are very catchy. You can distinctly hear the hymn-character the performer has given her song and the idea to combine lyrics and melody to convince the listener of your opinion. I do not like this kind of forcing you into a specific opinion. I prefer artists who animate you to form your own point of view or at least make you think about the topic in general. Moreover, the strong opinionated message of pride and patriotism is repulsive to me. In my experience pride, as long as you use it to feel self-confident and motivated, can be a good character trait, but too much of it can block your view. No one could deny that this is proofed not only in the History frequently, this thought is also often covered by literature, movies etc. In relation to the topic of Beyonce´s song, this means, that you should not just praise America to the skies. There are also not so commendable sides of the “Country of liberty”. Instead of this homage to the bright sides of America the singer should more directly mention that this country is too beautiful and stand for too much to let it destroy by political and societal problems. On the other hand I am impressed by the directness of her opinion about America. Such a passionate patriotic message is not very often seen in Europe, especially in Germany. Patriotism can be good for a nation, because it supports the cohesion and the mood in the society. Maybe Germany should finally, ages after World War Two, start to build up a healthy Patriotism and Pride of their country.
Summary “Proud to be an American” is a in 2008 re-released cover by the famous patriotic American song “God bless the USA” by the R&B singer Beyonce. Beyonce expresses in her patriotic song, that you should count one´s blessings, in this case the unimpeachable freedom America has given to her, even if everything else would have been taken away from you. With this and by reminding the listeners of the all the people who died in past acts for the liberty she can thankfully enjoy nowadays, the praises the whole American attitude of life: The priority of being more or less free to do whatever you want and act independent. Especially in the refrain and the second stanza Beyonce shows the deeply in the American history rooted pride for their whole country and it´s symbols. Just like the all- American moral concept is even God asked for his blessing and peace for the nation. In this song are all listeners called up to be proud of America, and express that patriotism passionated, as well as trying to keep the country worth for this and protect it as good as you can.

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Englisch?

Heyy Leute ich muss eine Erörterung schreiben und wollte fragen wie ihr sie findest.

die Aufgaben es geht um new Technologie und ich muss dazu eine Erörterung also ein comment schreiben

A life only with technology. But how would life be with only technology would everything be easier or even harder and would that be easier for the world?

Technology plays a big role in our lives but we don't realize what it does to us and the world.

People could become dependent on technology, we would no longer spend time with our family or enjoy nature in general. In addition, technology can make you lose your self-confidence because you only want to be like every pretty girl on social media. In addition, the replacement of work that was previously done by humans but will be done by robots in the future can cause even more people to become unemployed. But still there are many things that speak for it. It would be an improvement of medical research through the use of new technologies. In addition, it can lead to the fact that we humans have shortened working hours because the work could be taken over by robots.

I think that the new technology would be better for the world because it takes away a lot of work and it simplifies a lot of things.

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Cartoon Analysis Globalization?

Hallo, kann jemand meine Cartoon Analysis korrigieren und mir vielleicht ein paar Tipps dazu geben?

This is a cartoon drawn by Kat J.Weiss, published on 12/5/19 on www.istockphoto.com and it deals with the issue of fast fashion. What is noticeable at the first glance is that the artist presents a serious topic in a simple and ironic way.The scene depicts an abstract situation in a third world country in comparison to an industrialising country. On the right, there is appearing a western women which is underlined by the clothes she is wearing. Moreover, you can easily notice a poisonous river in the left part of the picture. Another significant aspect is the center of the picture which shows us a large billboard with a caption above it which reads "THIS COULD BE U". Behind the billboard, there is sitting a women working on a sewinh machine. Her facial expression seems to be exhausted and tired. Especially striking are the bright colours that the artist used.The artist creates a negative atmosphere towards the aspect that we are not aware of where and under which conditions our fashion is produced This will be shown in detail in the following talk. The artist refers to a well known global issue such as fast fashion. Furthermore, he strongly criticises our lack of awareness about fast fashion.First of all, you can clearly notice that the artist tries to draw the audiences attention to the fact that the scene depicts the horrendous and miserable working conditions of people who produce fashion by representing the womens facial expression. From her facial expression you can conclude how exhausted and frustrated she must be. That is exactly how the cartoon is supposed to make us overthink our attitude towards fast fashion. Moreover, the artist makes use of bright colours. Ultimately, common sense indicates that the colours are used to make the cartoon more vivid which clarifies the Intent of the cartoon which is to raise the People`s awareness for fast fashion. A further significant aspect is that the artist attempts to win us over to his side by triggering our emotions. This becomes more apparent while looking closely at the water colours from river which shows us how many chemicals are inside the water. That is why we become compassionate with the local citizens.

In conclusion I can express that the artists conveys his intention impeccably and extremely effectively from my point of view. Without any doubt the artist exactly knows how to trigger the audiences emotions properly. I also assume that he wants us to see fast fashion as horrible and horrendous. Moreover, he absolutely convinces me by his impeccably used visual elements which make sure we cannot misunderstand his concisely communicated message. Additionally I believe that his criticism is justified due to the fact that we are accountable as customers for the future of employees in the fashion industry. So it`s our mandatory duty to rearrange our attitude toward fast fashion.

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English Korektur?

Hallo könnt ihr mal schauen ob Fehler enthalten sind. Hat wer verbessungsideen?

welche Note würdet ihr geben (Gymnasium 11 Klasse)

In the following text, I give you an insight into myself and my free time activities:

First, I want to introduce myself. My name is __ I’m currently eighteen years old. I was born on March 16, 2004, in the hospital of __. Since my birth, I live in a small district of ___, called __. I live there with my fatherand my sister, who is one year younger than me. She looks like me and we have an excellent relationship. Furthermore, I have an older brother who lives in __ with her wife and my niece. Before I went to ___ school, I was at the secondary school in ___ and completed my secondary school certificate there. Now I tell you more about my character. I am a friendly person who can empathize well with others. Additionally, my family and friends particularly appreciate my sense of responsibility because they can always rely on me. On the top of that, I am also an organizational talent. My daily routine, for example, is very structured because I write to-do lists in order to keep an overview of everything. Last but not least, my creative side is one of my greatest strengths, which reflects who I am. This is a good point to redirect to my hobbies, because being creative takes up a lot of my free time, especially drawing and designing. This hobby relaxes me and makes me fun at the same time. Moreover, I love shopping, particularly in online shops. I spend a lot of time on the internet to buy clothes, which I like, but it makes me a little poor too. Another free time activity of me is reading books. My favourite genre of books is thrillers. I like this genre, because the tension doesn't get lost and such the interest in reading keeps maintained until the end. At the moment I read the book Layla from Colleen Hover and so far, I like it.

In short, I am a responsible and efficient person with a variety of interests and creative talents.

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Englisch?

"Did you ever catch yourself living in the past and losing focus on reality and presence? To some extent, it's totally normal to reflect upon great memories and experiences, but there are also some boundaries: If you are craving about the past rather than enjoying the here and now, this will lead to you always being unhappy with yourself and your surroundings. I am here to tell you that the past is there to remind you of all the great experiences you have had in your life, but you can't stick to them life-long . Even beautiful things have their ends, and you need to realize that. Just because your life goes on or some things have changed in your life, making that experience not relivable, it does not necessarily mean that your life will never be as great as it was. And remember: Maybe you are missing out on great people while crying over your best friend you lost and who was never good for you. All the changes you face are meant to occur. Despite all the shifts, there is someone who will always stay and never betray you: That's you and yourself! So don't stick to the past and other people if there are thousands of miles you need to discover before life really ends for you. Enjoy every minute and be grateful for having food, clean water, nice people, and a comfy place to live in!"

Wie kann ich den Text noch sprachlich verbessern?

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Englisch Argumentative Essay?

Wie findet ihr diesen Argumentative Essay, ich hab heute die Klassenarbeit zurückbekommen und hab eine 4 bekommen. (9.Klasse)

Die Aufgabe war folgende: Schreibe einen Argumentative Essay über das Thema: "Doing an exchange year in Australia is a great idea". Wir mussten mindestens 3 Argumente dafür, und 3 dagegen finden.

Australia, the continent where the most dangerous animals are living, is very interesting for students who want to do an exchange year in a country where people speak English. The following essay will show argument sfor, and against doing an exchange year in Australia.

At the beginning, we will look at the arguments against the exchange year.

First, in Australia there are lots of dangerous animals, for example snakes, spiders, and others, they can kill you with just a bite, and it could be hard to get the medicin for that.

Furthermore, you could argue you cant visit your family very often, the distance between Australia and Germany is really big, and the tickets for planes are really expensive.

The last argument against the exchange year, is that it might be hard for you to understand the Australian people talking, because of their hard accent.

Lets move on to the arguments for doing an exchange year in Australia.

Firstly, Australia offers a lot when it comes to nature, on the one day you could see a shark swimming in the sea, and on the other, you could be in the desert.

Another argument for doing the exchange year is, that you can learn a lot about other cultures, for example the Aboriginals. You could learn how they lived in the Outback, or about the stolen generations.

Last but not least, you could argue that you would learn the language, if you are doing an exchange year in Australia, because you would speak English all day long.

In my opinion, an exchange year to Australia is a great way to learn English, and a lot about the aboriginals and how the lived there

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Comment correction?

Hallo, und zwar musste ich ein comment schreiben in der Schule, welchen wir morgen vorzeigen müssen und ich wollte fragen ob einer vlt nochmal kurz denn comment überfliegen kann ob alles so passt.

A Few days ago there was a discussion if mobil phones and other electronic devices should be allowed at school. The pros are that even in school children can be shown how to behave on the internet. Another good argument for using mobil phones at school is that it's possible to quickly find information and work with it. The last and for me best argument is that through digital media, topics are dealt with holistically. Different points of view are taken into account and a solution is sought with different formats. The cons are that teacher can't check what the students gonna do on the smartphones and if they really being used for lessons or assignment. Another bad thing would be that if the permanent use at school is allowed, the risk of mobile phone addiction increases enormously. The for me worse thing would be that if Students didn't own a smartphone they would have a big disadvantage. My personal view is that the mobile phones should be allowed but not all the time only when the teacher allowed it, because mobil phones can be a good addition to the school.

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Englisch Essay: Kann jemand bitte darüber schauen, würde mich sehr freuen?

Essay: Pet and Teenagers

Should teenagers be exposed to pets at their age?

Having a pet at a early age helps teenagers learn about responsibility and taking care of others. At the same time, it can help them learn to take care of themselves. Some teenagers though, should never have pets of their own if they can’t control themselves and have difficulty with empathy. Therefore: Should teenagers be exposed to pets at their age?

Teenagers mature at different rates. Some can handle the responsibility of caring for a pet already and others not. That’s why the age is for the parent to decide. If teenagers are animal-friendly, then cats make excellent pets. They can be playful and entertaining, especially if people adopt a kitten. They are also relatively easy to take care for: good quality food, clean water, a clean litter box, toys and interaction with their owners for affection.

As mentioned, owning a pet helps in the development of a teenager for example learning to take responsibility for another life and experience what it means if someone depends on them. A pet also helps teenagers learning to give attention even if they are not in the mood for it.

Despite of that, how can teenagers even cover the costs of keeping a pet? Well, pets are expensive but if teenagers have a pet, they can buy cheap food or cheap toys, if they want to cover their costs. Teenagers can also spend their pocket money more for their pet or can earn some money in holidays.

To conclude, I would say teenagers should keep a pet, if they are ready to take care of it. If they care for their pet, they return the love. A pet doesn't question what kind of job the kid’s parents have or how much money they make, etc. They would love their owners if they show affection to it.

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Wer Lust sich nen „argumentative text“ durchzulesen?

Nabend,

In meiner (sehr kleinen) Familie kennt sich keiner mit 'English Grammar’ aus.
Naja, es ist jedenfalls ein Text auf Englisch, eine Seite lang. Brauche just Verbesserungsvorschläge und Kritik.

Danke danke 💀✨

alsoo:

Argumentative text

A statement that is often discussed by liguists is whether German similar to English serves as a lingua franca.

An argument in favor would be that German is spoken in many parts of the world. So overall 180 million people speak German worldwide. The german language is even in eleventh place among the most spoken languages in the world.

Furthermore, German is the most spoken language in europe. For example in Austria, Swisse, Namibia and parts of the Netherlands.

And moreover, it is closely related to other languages which makes it easier to learn. Swedish, Norwegian and Danish are often mentioned as examples.

In order to come to a balanced conclusion, I will now explain the other point of view.

At first, English is used much more often as an official language than German. Especially in Africa, as these countries were former colonies. There are many countries whose universities teach in english. In Germany, for example, around 600 courses are taught exlusively in english.

Secondly, German itsself is a language which is very hard to learn because of the grammar. And in comparison, English is much easier to understand and learn. So other countries do not educate their pupils German at school which is another disadvantage.

Last but not least, German is mainly spoken in countries which are close to each other. But it is less spoken in countries that are further away.

Personally, I am more convinced by the contra side. I believe that English is best suited as a lingua franca. Of course, German is also in some way a lingua franca but I do not think that it serves as such similar to English. Therefore it would be also contraproductive to classify German as the new official communication level.

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