Englisch?
Heyy Leute ich muss eine Erörterung schreiben und wollte fragen wie ihr sie findest.
die Aufgaben es geht um new Technologie und ich muss dazu eine Erörterung also ein comment schreiben
A life only with technology. But how would life be with only technology would everything be easier or even harder and would that be easier for the world?
Technology plays a big role in our lives but we don't realize what it does to us and the world.
People could become dependent on technology, we would no longer spend time with our family or enjoy nature in general. In addition, technology can make you lose your self-confidence because you only want to be like every pretty girl on social media. In addition, the replacement of work that was previously done by humans but will be done by robots in the future can cause even more people to become unemployed. But still there are many things that speak for it. It would be an improvement of medical research through the use of new technologies. In addition, it can lead to the fact that we humans have shortened working hours because the work could be taken over by robots.
I think that the new technology would be better for the world because it takes away a lot of work and it simplifies a lot of things.
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A life only with technology. (Das ist kein Satz.) But how would life be (Ich bevorzuge what would life be like) with only (Wortstellung) technology (neuer Satz) would everything be easier or even harder and would that (Was?) be easier for the world?
Technology plays a big role in our lives but we don't realize what it does to us and the world.
People could become dependent on technology, we would no longer spend time with our family (Ich bevorzuge hier den Plural) or enjoy nature in general. In addition, technology can make you lose your self-confidence because you only want to be like every pretty girl on social media.
In addition (Wiederholung), the replacement of work that was previously done (besser: Participle Construction) by humans but will be done by robots in the future can cause even more people to become unemployed. (Dem Satz fehlen Kommas.)
But still there are (Wortstellung) many things (Wort, Stil) that speak for it. It (Was?) would be an improvement of medical research through the use of new technologies (Formulierung). In addition (Wiederholung), it (Was?) can lead to the fact that we humans have shortened (Wort) working hours because the (Wortart) work could be taken over by robots.
I think that (---) new technology would be better for the world because it takes away a lot of work and it simplifies a lot of things (Wort, Stil).
Du solltest überlegen, ob jobs nicht zumindest das ein oder andere Mal das bessere Wort für work wäre.
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert, das Kursivgedruckte überdacht werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,
für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!
:-) AstridDerPu
'But how would life be with only technology would everything be easier or even harder and would that be easier for the world?'
Hier raus würde ich eventuell machen:
'How would life be if technology dominated the world? Would everything be easier for us or would it be even harder?'
Ist aber nur ein Vorschlag ^^