Englisch Text korrigieren?

Hallo, kann jemand meinen Text korrigieren? Wäre sehr dankbar.

I have just read the book “Asphalt Tribe” by Morton Rhue which tells a story about 12 homeless children who are trying to make it through the winter in New York City. It ranges from abuse, drug and alcohol use, gender questions, rebellion and every aspect of why and how children can become homeless. The story is written from the perspective of one of the homeless children whose name is Maybe.

Maybe talks how they live in the cold with enduring hunger and about all the nights, which they spend with dancing followed by days full of sleep. The police and the youth welfare office try to get Maybe and her friends a better life, but they don't want to live a life with rules. They want to be free, living without rules. But Maybe at some point realizes that there is only one way out that the road provides: death. And so she begins to accept help.

In my opinion, the book provides the reader a good look into a day and the life of a homeless child, which shows all the ups and downs on the road. It a tearjerker and a really grim story which also shows an issue our youth are facing today.

I assume this book arouses your interest in reading. I am not going to give the end of the story away so you can read it on your own.

I would love to see more blog posts from you.

2 Antworten

sapujapuuu

08.01.2022, 11:43

Also Grammatisch ist eigentlich alles korrekt außer im dritten abstand fehlt das s bei it's. Sonst würde ich vielleicht noch ein paar Formulierungen verbessern wie z.B. das man im ersten abstand bei ranges from... noch ein to... reinbringt, also von...bis. Am Anfang vom zweiten Abschnitt kann man das which noch weglassen und am ende vom Abschnitt hört sich das "but Maybe at some point realizes that..." noch nicht wirklich richtig an, vielleicht die Wörter bisschen rumdrehen oder einfach das "at some point" mit "after a while" oder so ersetzen. also halt einfach paar Formulierungen noch klarer machen.

Woher ich das weiß:eigene Erfahrung

Von Experte earnest bestätigt

AstridDerPu

Von gutefrage auf Grund seines Wissens auf einem Fachgebiet ausgezeichneter Nutzer

Englisch, Sprache

08.01.2022, 11:45

Hallo,

warum sollen wir einen Text korrigieren, der in weiten Teilen 1 zu 1 abgekupfert ist? Ich sage nur "ela, medimops, goodreads".

AstridDerPu

earnest

08.01.2022, 11:49

Ich sage das auch.

LunaCat424

08.01.2022, 12:25

Ich glaub das jede Person den Inhalt von einem Buch im Internet abliest und auch entsprechend auch ein paar Sätze kopiert aber ich glaub die Person weiß das selber, dass sie die Konsequenzen trägt, wenn sie ein Plagiat kriegt. ^^

earnest

08.01.2022, 15:52

@LunaCat424

Nein, die Nutzerin weiß das nicht. Sie hat das in einer anderen Frage zum gleichen Thema betont...

**The Text “The Stolen Generation“ written by Barbara McMahon, Guardian News and Media 2008, is about the stolen Generation from the Aboriginal and the Government who wanted delete the thousands of mixed-race children’s. Zita Wallace told a sad story about her Situation of the “Stolen generation”. As she was a little Girl in Australia, one day the nuns came to her house and took her out. They Said they want to go shopping with her, but they put her and a lots of children in the back of a truck and drove away.

Zita cried a lot, she recount The government wanted to forget the traditions of the Aboriginal, so they stolen children to mix them up with white people, making sure the Aboriginal to delete. The stealing of children ended after 60 years in 1970. Now the affected people and families want a apologize from the government. Finally Australia is saying sorry for all.******

danke für alle Verbesserung Vorschläge ;)

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Englisch Text über TYCTWD?

Hey,

ich muss einen Text über „take your Child To work day“ schreiben und würde gerne wissen ob ihn jmd kontrollieren kann und sagen kann was ich besser machen könnte Dankeschön ^^

Take your Child To work day is a day in which Patents can take their children To their work so they get To know the worklife and they get Experience from work and maybe they Enjoy the Job so they think of doing ist After School.

Its on the fourth Thursday every April and every year Over 25.000.000 people take Part at the TYCTWD Even Though of Not every School and Company participate the day.

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Passt der Englische Text?

In the poem ‚,The Schoolboy‘‘ by William Blake, you get a clear message that the schoolboy doesn’t enjoy the school and its system at all, so the question that arises is ,,What could school do, to be more enjoyable for the schoolboy and students like me?‘‘

First of all many students have to wake up early in the morning, which isn’t a perfect start into the day. Furthermore they mostly can’t enjoy the morning even if they like to stand up early, because they must get finished quickly for school. To counteract this problem, it would be a good start to begin with school less early and to approach the day more calmly. So to remove the effect of a prison it’s important to produce a more peaceful environment for everyone, to make the classrooms more comfortable and even integrate some outdoors schoollessons in spring and summer, so that the pupils have more joy in learning and are able to concentrate more because of the fresh air and the nature. Last but not least we schoolboys anf schoolgirls should be allowed to have more own thoughts and to be able to control them and not just being forced to memorize things, which won’t be even important for our adulthood.

I also think that the last point which is beinh made here, is a fact which the author want to draw attention to, because it’s a mostly international problem that should has to change as we are not robots.

(Also mit dem letzten Teil bin ich eher unzufrieden weil so oft which drankommt)

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Könnte jemand über meinen Essay drüber schauen?

         Every school should demand school uniform

In some countries all over the world school children have to wear uniforms the color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.

In my opinion school uniforms ind schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.

School uniforms are on the one side good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of theme haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case the school uniform is very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.

On the other side pupils cant find our style and have to wear clothes that they don’t wanted. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,It quickly becomes boring .However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy again and again, too.

On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.

I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style. Cause the bully is not reduced by a school uniform.

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Englisch: Blog Post korrigieren?

Das war meine Aufgabe:

Und folgendes habe ich geschrieben (280 Wörter) Ich habe einfach ein Museum erfunden, könnt ihr mir meinen text ausbessern? passt auch meine beschreibung zu den bildern? :)

From: EdaK3

Subject: A visit to the Newcast Museum

Hey Bloggers!

Did I ever mention that I never visit a museum in my life? Well, now I have and I really want to share some exhibits of the Newcast Museum with you guys! I know that you will ask why some stupid museum exhibits and not about an interesting topic? Well, I really want to be more creative on my blogs and I was just thinking that I could change my blog posts a little and try something new.

Let’s just start with the first exhibit: A slice of a pizza with body parts! I know, sounds weird but I was impressed about the colours which the picture had. It was painted very dull and also from the shading. I really like drawings with dark colours.

The second picture was also stunning: A Mona Lisa painting! The colours were exactly the same but what stood out the most, was the appearance of the exhibit. Her face is just a mask and therefore it shows her head skeleton which it looks much creepier and that reminded me of Halloween, which is also soon!

Lastly, I want to introduce you two more: A urinal exhibit and a tie exhibit that has been very accurately placed on a map. Both of them give me the same vibes, they look real and inspiring. They would brighten up my room if I had own them.

Maybe some of you guys find this kind of blog post strange but I really recommend you to go to the Newcast museum. Your interest of art would grow and it is really fun to look at works of art that are not common. I would appreciate your comments.

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Sind da Fehler in meinem Englisch Referat, Wenn ja welche?

Renewable energy Good morning ladies and gentleman, Today I’d like to talk to you about a very important and currant topic: renewable energies. But what are renewable energies? Renewable energies or regenerative energies are energy sources which are inexhaustibly available to use or energy sources which can be renewed very fast.

Fossil fuels in contrast need millions of years to be renewed. Renewable energy is the most important factor of the sustainable energy policy and the energy revolution. Examples are: bioenergy, geothermics, hydropower, ocean energy and wind energy But how do they work? The energy source the sun for example is giving us light for millions of years. With her we can easily heat water. Solar thermal installations are therefore standard facilities at new houses. The solar panels produce heat which we can use for showering, heating, and other things in our household. To produce current there are two ways: solar cells convert light directly into current. This process is also called recombination. In warmer countries there are often solar thermal power plants. With big mirrors the sunlight gets bunched, converted into heat and stream turbines can be boosted. Then the direct current can be transported. The advantages of renewable energies are that they are like I said sustainable and they never run out, secondarily they require less maintenance than traditional generators. Their fuel being derived from natural and available resources reduces the costs of operation.

Even more importantly, renewable energy produces little or no waste products such as carbon dioxide or other chemical pollutants, so has minimal impact on the environment. Renewable energy projects can also bring economic benefits to many regional areas, as most projects are located away from large urban centres and suburbs of the capital cities. These economic benefits may be from the increased use of local services as well as tourism.

It is easy to recognize the environmental advantages of utilizing the alternative and renewable forms of energy but we must also be aware of the disadvantages.

One disadvantage with renewable energy is that it is difficult to generate the quantities of electricity that are as large as those produced by traditional fossil fuel generators. This may mean that we need to reduce the amount of energy we use or simply build more energy facilities. It also indicates that the best solution to our energy problems may be to have a balance of many different power sources. Another disadvantage of renewable energy sources is the reliability of supply. Renewable energy often relies on the weather for its source of power.

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Englisch: English comment HÜ?

Das wäre meine Hausübung (ich schreibe zum ersten mal einen blog comment), passt der text eh so zu der angabe von meiner professor oder soll ich noch was ergänzen oder umschreiben? :)

From: EdaK3

To: green2k7

Subject: “Shape of You” critic

Hi green2k7,

I can clearly tell that you are a big fan of Ed Sheeran, aren’t you? So am I but in this point, I need to tell that I'm both happy and disappointed with the song…

As you mentioned, the song is catchy and I was hooked from the first listen. Melodically very poppy and very predictable which is why it works so well. On the other hand, as far as lyrics go, the song is a disappointment. The lyrics on this song however, in my opinion, are nothing short of unrealistic.

Don’t get me wrong, the song sounds pretty great and it does make a good dance song. But what makes his past music stand out from the sea of pop is awesome, meaningful lyrics, which “Shape of You” simply lacks. It’s one thing to make a song that sounds good, but another to make one with real heart.

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Hallo kann mir das bitte jemand in 4-5 Sätze Machen bekomme es nicht hin?

The Story “Joy riding” is about two boys who want to impress the Girls. Jake and Max saw Kayla’s Dad car with Kayla and Lucy in there. They invite them to a race but they have no driver license. The two Boys choose an old Chevy and cracked the door open. At the end of the road saw they Ash and Lucy and start the race, while the Race there was a bend a Jake noticed too late and crashed into the barrier and stopped. At the End Lucy was woke up in the hospital and doesn’t now where here friends are

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Wie schreibe ich einen Report auf English?

Ich brauche hilfe, ich habe ein Information Report in Englisch geschrieben

Kann mir jemand helfen diese Report zu korrigieren?

Meine Lösung

Report on the opinions of children's Greenfield Library users

On 12 September 2021, all older children, who are using the children's library, and adults accompanying younger children, have been asked to write down any comments they wished to make and propose improvements to what was provided to them in Greenfield Public Library.

About 300 users answered (212 older children & 88 adults).

Some adults and children complained of times of opening. Concerning times of opening, at present Children’s Library opens 1 hour after Main Library & closes 1 hour before the Main Library. In addition, users want us to open and close at the same time.

Regarding complaints, lack of space to study, besides, older children want to do homework and because that one table with only six chairs, are not completely enough. They ask, too, if we can open a separate study-room because the Present Children’s library is far too small.

Some older children & adults are not satisfied. Concerning causes, 1- lack of computer facilities, 2- users have to ask a member of staff for permission in order to use the photocopier. In addition, older children complain of noise from younger children and from adults. Regarding solutions, more computers, easier use of Photocopier, and almost everyone from adults agreed with facilities for younger children.

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Bild beschreiben: Strand

Ich muss in Englisch ein Bild beschreiben (150 wörter). Bch hab es schon geschrieben, bin mir aber mit der Grammatik und mit der Rechtschreibung nicht sicher. Vielleicht könnt ihr es ja durch lesen und es verbesseren.

In the picture I can see many people at the beach. The sun is shining. And the sky is blue, the beach look golden. All the people are wearing summer clothes or bikinis. Some of them are in the sea and the other are lying on they towers,which on the beach. Some are having a sunburn. They towers are having a lot of colors. At the backround I see many trees, it look like a forest. I think the people in the sea are having a lot of fun. At the front of the trees is a white wall and in front of there is a volleyball net. Many of the children are having an air mattress in different patterns. Probably it is in the summer vacation. Maybe it is in August and maybe in a other country, it can be in turkey etc.

Das Bild: http://bilder.t-online.de/b/64/79/36/92/id_64793692/tid_da/der-strand-am-helenesee.jpg

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Englisch: Description about myself?

Hallo, ich wollte fragen ob mir jemand mein text korriegieren könnte und vielleicht eventuell etwas ändern könnte, falls es irgendwie umgangssprachlich nicht in ordnung ist. ich müsste mind 12 sätze schreiben, hat jmd vielleicht noch ideen wie ich weiterschreiben könnte? Danke im Voraus ☼

Hello, my name is Eva. I’m this kind of person which likes to laugh a lot and have a really good time with other people. My humour is a little bit broken but I’m still reasonable when it comes to serious situations. Surely, I try to see the friendliest and the funniest side of humanity for example my family. But still they are strict but also cheerful, at least for me. I just want to have a good, peacefully live and reach my goals. I want to make my parents proud and...

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Englisch Text durchschauen?

Hallo! Ich glaube mal dass ich bei meinem Text einige Fehler sind aber ich komm leider nicht so richtig auf die Fehler vor allem bei der Einleitung… kann mir jemand behilflich sein?

“Hollywood” is known for two names: Geographically for being the neighbourhood of the city of Los Angles, but also being the biggest American film industry. Among them, people imagine beautiful movie stars, wealth, luxury and of course lavish films. But how much effort and work goes into it and above all, is it even worth working there?

Basically, Hollywood tells the story of a group of young people who all share the same dream: to become an actor. But why do more and more people want to become Hollywood stars in their younger years? Nowadays in a movie career, the younger people start becoming an actor, then better chances can they get to be perceived, because many directors and producers know that at a young age, a “pretty face” will sell big time in movies. The biggest guilt is mostly in the film industry self.

Actually, how do people even get a part in a movie? It takes a lot of time, hard work and patience. Beginners would start with small rolls and then wait for large ones. The best way to act is to have your own way of acting and it should be different from others to get noticed. Acting is not difficult, if you get more and more practice. It also depends on the person, on the experience and on the level of the acting.

To conclude, a movie carrier includes advantages and disadvantages. For example, being famous as an actor you can get more money and be admired by fans. Though people only see glamorous parts of the fame, they don't see the ugly side of it: All of the lies, the depression, periods of loneliness and somehow, stars would want to b anonymous again.

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Englisch Essay: Kann jemand bitte darüber schauen, würde mich sehr freuen?

Essay: Pet and Teenagers

Should teenagers be exposed to pets at their age?

Having a pet at a early age helps teenagers learn about responsibility and taking care of others. At the same time, it can help them learn to take care of themselves. Some teenagers though, should never have pets of their own if they can’t control themselves and have difficulty with empathy. Therefore: Should teenagers be exposed to pets at their age?

Teenagers mature at different rates. Some can handle the responsibility of caring for a pet already and others not. That’s why the age is for the parent to decide. If teenagers are animal-friendly, then cats make excellent pets. They can be playful and entertaining, especially if people adopt a kitten. They are also relatively easy to take care for: good quality food, clean water, a clean litter box, toys and interaction with their owners for affection.

As mentioned, owning a pet helps in the development of a teenager for example learning to take responsibility for another life and experience what it means if someone depends on them. A pet also helps teenagers learning to give attention even if they are not in the mood for it.

Despite of that, how can teenagers even cover the costs of keeping a pet? Well, pets are expensive but if teenagers have a pet, they can buy cheap food or cheap toys, if they want to cover their costs. Teenagers can also spend their pocket money more for their pet or can earn some money in holidays.

To conclude, I would say teenagers should keep a pet, if they are ready to take care of it. If they care for their pet, they return the love. A pet doesn't question what kind of job the kid’s parents have or how much money they make, etc. They would love their owners if they show affection to it.

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Korrektur für mein Englisch Text :)?

Hallo, könnt ihr meinen Text korrigieren/ergänzen/umschreiben, ich würde mich riesig freuen, es geht um "Human Body und Human Body parts", ich danke euch :)

Our human body is a wonder: It performs several functions without rest from the birth. Our body continues to work, without stopping for a second. The main organs of the human body are lungs, heart, kidney, liver and brain and these organs work together which are controlled by the brain.

The vital organs in the body are those that power the life functions or protect them. Starting at the top would be the brain. Without it, the body is just a cooling heap of meat, because there would be no breathing, movement, muscle tone, or thermal regulation. The brain gives us intelligence to use our physical and mental abilities. The lungs provide the oxygen our life functions require, and the heart pumps the blood to all our soma cells. The liver regulates the chemical balance into the body and the kidneys remove cellular toxins from the blood. Without all these systems working to at least a minimum extent, the body will not hold life for more than a few days or for some of them, much less.

Physical health is important for how you feel, move and perform task without feeling of stress, pain and strain. Having a great physical health is in synergy with your mental and social health. They all work together. One aspect of a healthy body is our muscle mass: it is said that it can increase lifespan compared to people who don’t maintain a healthy body composition over time and as they age.

Exercising, eating a balanced diet, having a great social circle contributes to your physical health, builds your confidence and help you lead a great life and live long. So don’t forget to stay and life healthy!

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