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There is a restaurant here and it is very popular here. The name of the restaurant is Balböabla and my village has a tourist attraction. The attraction is a mini prison and there is a distillery under the prison. in the neighboring village is an old school the name of the village is Blablabla and this village is also very small. In another neighboring village there is a popular winery. The name of the village is blbala. Yes, this is my hometown. I hope you like my village.

Answer 1

[ilovehermine]

There is a restaurant and it is very popular here (das erste "here" würde ich weglassen, sonst wiederholst du dich). The name of the restaurant is Balböabla and my village has a tourist attraction. The attraction is a mini prison and there is a distillery under the prison. In the neighboring (falls du British English schreibst, dann wäre es neighbouring mit u drin, ansonsten richtig) village is an old school. The name of the village is Blablabla and this village is also very small. In another neighboring village, there is a popular winery. The name of the village is blbala. Well, (Yes klingt komisch, Well heißt sowas wie "Nun ja", "naja" und das passt besser) this is my hometown. I hope you like my village.

Woher ich das weiß: eigene Erfahrung – Muttersprachlich mit Engl., Arab. & Deutsch aufgewachsen.

Answer 2

[nikiwunners]

Verbesserte Fassung:

There is a restaurant here and it´s very popular. The name of the restaurant is "Balböabla". My village has got a tourist attraction which is a mini prison and under it, there is a distillery. At the village next to, which name is "Blablabla", is an very old school. The village is very small. At another village around here there is a popular winery. This village has got the name "blbala".

That´s my hometown and the region around it!

So würde ich es schreiben. Vor allem an der Rechtschreibung müsstest du noch arbeiten.

Answer 3

[Lara13121312]

Naja welche Klasse?

Comments

[Girl20055]

9.HAHAHQ englisch ist eben einfach nicht mein Ding :/

[ilovehermine]

Für Nachfragen gibt es inzwischen oben einen Button, da musst du auf "Nachfrage stellen" klicken. Das haben die eingerichtet, damit man sowas nicht als eigene Antwort einstellt. :)

Answer 4

[Grussausberlin]

We have a very polular restaurant in our little town. Its name is is Balböabla and my village is a tourist attraction. The main attraction is a mini prison and there is a destillery built under the prison. In the neighbour village , called Blabla  is an old school  and this village is also very small. In another village there is a popular winery. The name of this village is blbala. All the villages are very small but intersting and the tourists love them.  I hope you can visit my village in the future and I am sure you will like it