Kann jemand mein Charakterisierung in Englisch korrigieren?

ich brauche hilfe da ich nicht so gut in englisch bin.

In the Novel “Speak”, written by Laurie Halse Anderson in 1999, is the character “Mr. Freeman” an art teacher at Merryweather High, who already gets introduced at one of the first chapters. He is the art teacher from the main character Melinda.

Mr. Freeman is a teacher, described as ugly. Furthermore he has a “Big old grasshopper body, like a stilt-walking circus guy and an nose like a credit card …” like Melinda describes at p.14, l.9 f., . He appears very scary to other people, but he has a nice smile on his face (p. 14, l.11 & p. 14, l.21 ff.).

Another important fact is his language, he speaks really heartfelt (p.14 l.12 ff.), which makes him so interesting , so the students listen to him.

During the novel Mr. Freeman is an supporter of Melinda and they talk about Melindas problems sometimes. He sees the feelings or the art in Melindas work (p.66-67). Besides Mr. Freeman is very creative and he wants others to be creative too (p. 15 – 16). Moreover he wants to motivate the students to make something special. On p.14 l. 11 you can see that Mr. Freeman “smiles”. Their, you can conclude that he is a very friendly person

Mr. Freeman is a different person. He is not like normal teachers and he has his own vision of school, lessons and priorities (p. 14 – 15). His ideas are very scary but he has a plan for the rest of the year in school (p. 15, ll.20 ff. & p.16, ll.1 ff.) .

He has a good friendship to his students, which you can see that he is hugging students as a teacher(p.196 l.10 ff.). The last day of school Melinda stays after so she could finally put the finishing touches on her tree and she starts crying in the class with Mr.Freeman and he says "You've been through a lot haven't you?"(p.197 l.24 f.), that shows that he actually cares about Melinda and what she has been through. In other words he has a good connection to Melinda.

In conclusion Mr. Freeman is the art teacher of Melinda, who has a good connection to Melinda, he is a friendly teacher, who goes motivated on

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In the Novel “Speak” written by Laurie Halse Anderson in 1999. The character “Mr. Freeman” is an art teacher at Merryweather High. He is the art teacher of the main character Melinda and is introduced in one of the first chapters.

Mr. Freeman is a teacher who is described as ugly. Furthermore, he has a “Big old grasshopper body, like a stilt-walking circus guy and an nose like a credit card …” p.14, l.9 f., . He also appears to be very scary to other people, but he seems to have a nice smile on his face (p. 14, l.11 & p. 14, l.21 ff.).

Another important fact is his use of language(p.14 l.12 ff.)which makes the students want to listen to him

During the novel Mr. Freeman is a supporter of Melinda and they sometimes talk about Melindas problems. He sees the feelings in the drawings in Melinda's work (p.66-67). Besides Mr. Freeman is very creative and he wants others to also be creative (p. 15 – 16). Moreover he wants to motivate the students to make something special. On p.14 l. 11 you can see that Mr. Freeman “smiles”. There you can conclude that he is a very friendly person

Mr. Freeman is a different person. He is not like normal teachers and he has his own vision of school, lessons and priorities (p. 14 – 15). His ideas are very scary but he has a plan for the rest of the schoolyear (p. 15, ll.20 ff. & p.16, ll.1 ff.) .

He has a good friendship with his students, which you can see by him hugging his students(p.196 l.10 ff.). The last day of school Melinda stays longer than needed so that she could finally put the finishing touches to her painting. Afterwards she starts crying in the class with Mr.Freeman and he says "You've been through a lot haven't you?"(p.197 l.24 f.), that shows that he actually cares about Melinda and what she has been through. In other words he has a good connection to Melinda.

In conclusion, Mr. Freeman is the art teacher of Melinda, who has a good connection to Melinda, and he seems to be a friendly teacher, who goes motivated motivates his students.

Tipps:Schreib kürzere Sätze, im Englischen versucht man lange Sätze zu meiden und man verschachtelt diese auch nicht so wie im Deutschen. Zudem würde ich dir empfehlen die Beistriche wegzulassen. Ich habe bestimmt nicht alle Fehler gefunden, wenn du das nächste Mal nicht weist, ob du eine Formulierung so schreiben kannst, google sie vorher findest google keine Anwendung musst du es umformulieren.

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Virgil Abloh ist Men's Artistic Director bei Louis Vuitton. Karl Lagerfeld hat auch für mindestens 2 Firmen designt.

https://de.louisvuitton.com/deu-de/la-maison/virgil-abloh#

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"I am planning on visiting London. I have a faible for the English language and the English culture. I want to do a stadium tour of Wembley. I'd like to make a tour through some parts of the city of London by foot. I want to see the different cultures and the overall architecture of London. I've also planned on visiting and photographing the usual tourist attractions. I would like to visit the museums which are freely accessible by the public. I have been to London two times but I have still not seen everything yet. There are so many sights to discover."

Du sollst dir nicht zuerst deutsche Sätze zurecht legen und sie übersetzen, jetzt funktioniert das vielleicht noch, aber in der letzten Schulstufen reicht das definitiv nicht mehr für eine positive Note aus, der Aufsatz sollte so zirka passen. Schreib einfach auf Englisch und poste es hier, man hilft sich ja und so kannst du dazulernen. Vielleicht baust du noch Wörter ein die die Sätze miteinander verbinden wie moreover etc.

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Hier etwas Allgemeines

https://custom-writing.org/blog/writing-tips/free-essay-writing-tips/2946.html

Ein Beispiel für die Uni, das ist wirklich gut!

https://asset-tilburg.nl/public/upload/internationalbusinessmanagement/default/Motivation_Letter_Australia_Sydney.pdf

Das würde eher für dich passen

https://abroadguide.wordpress.com/2015/03/24/applying-to-study-abroad-how-to-write-a-winning-letter-of-intent-with-example/

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Kurzbewerbung; Motivationsschrieben für southern Cross Schüleraustausch ok?

Also ich will mich mit einer Kurzbewerbung bei Southern Cross anmelden und dafür musste ich einen englischen Motivationsbrief schreiben, warum ich weg will und so weiter... wär super wenn ihr ihn mal überfliegen könntet und sagen könntet ib der ok ist? Danke schon mal im Voraus !

Dear Southern Cross team,

My name is _____and in two weeks is my 14th birthday. But in 2018 I would like to celebrate it in Australia.

I´ve thought about if I want to do an exchange a lot and after a one week trip to England where I lived in a host family too, I was sure that I want to do it. I don´t really know how to write this letter without sounding boastful or anything but I think all I can do is to say what I think:

I haven´t got any problem with adjusting other cultures or habits. I mean I don´t yet know the Australian culture, but I haven´t got any problems with things I experienced here in Germany so far. Normaly I´m a confident person, but in a completely new land and school? Well I don´t know how it will be so far away from home and my usual life but on the other hand that´s why I want to do the exchange year. I want to get to know a new culture with new habits and lifestyles. And I hope to find some international friends too. One of my strengths also is that I can get used to circumstances I didn´t like right from the beginning. Sure, that´s all how it works here I Germany and it could be that in Australia everything is different. However I think it´s only human to be a bit afraid of such a big adventure.

There are plenty reasons why I still want to go, even if I´m afraid: For example, as mentioned before, that I want to meet new people and get to know life in a different country. School is another reason. Not only school in Australia, where I hope to be able to study subjects like Surfing or Outdoor Education (I mean how amazing would that be?), but also school in Germany. At my secondary school which is a Gymnasium, I have bilingual English lessons and I´d like to improve my English even further, to do my bilingual A-level and maybe even to study abroad. And apart from these “serious “ reasons , there are just so many opportunities I don´t want to miss. I´ll get the chance for an exchange only one time in my life and I don´t want to sit in class next year thinking “Oh, you could be in Australia now.” When I started to think about doing an exchange, Australia was in my mind right from the start. It has always been my dream designation with its beautiful rainforests, beaches and also the Outback. Sure when I´m there I hope to see as much as possible of the country. Here in Germany I did artistic Gymnastics for 8 and Volleyball for 4 years but maybe there is something that fits better to me.

I really look forward to meet you in person. With best regards, _____

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Ich hoffe, dass ich alle Fehler korrigiert habe.

Dear Southern Cross Team,

My name is _____and in two weeks I'am going to celebrate my 14th birthday. But in 2018 I would like to celebrate it in Australia.

I´ve thought about wanting to do an exchange  and after a one week trip to England where I also lived in a host family. I was sure that I want to do it.

I like to broaden my horizon with travel because I don´t  know much about the Australian culture. Furthermore I´m a confident person,therefore I shouldn't have any problem adhjusting to new situations.  I want to get to know a new culture with new habits and lifestyles. And I also hope to make lifelong friends. One of my strengths  is getting used to new circumstances. 

There are plenty of reasons why I  want to go, even if this would be a new situation for me: For example, as mentioned before,  I want to meet new people and get to know the life in a different country. School is another reason. Not only school in Australia, where I hope to be able to study subjects like Surfing or Outdoor Education (I mean how amazing would that be?), but also school in Germany. At my secondary school, I have bilingual English classes and I´d like to improve my English even further, to do my bilingual A-level and maybe even to study abroad. And apart from these “serious “ reasons , there are just so many opportunities I don´t want to miss. I may  get the chance for an exchange only once in my life and I don´t want to sit in class next year thinking “Oh, you could have been studying in Australia.” When I started to think about doing an exchange, Australia was my dream. It has always been my dream designation with its beautiful rainforests, beaches and also the Outback. Sure when I´m there I hope to see as much as possible of the country. Here in Germany I did artistic Gymnastics for 8 and Volleyball for 4 years but maybe there is something that fits me better.

I am really looking forward to meeting you in person. With best regards, _____

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Von einem älteren Thread

https://www.gutefrage.net/frage/erfahrungen-zum-sprachreisenanbieter-ef--

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Welche Mercedes Benz Arena meinst du? Berlin oder Stuttgart?

http://www.mercedes-benz-arena-berlin.de/anfahrt-parken/parken

http://www.mercedes-benz-arena-stuttgart.de/de/besucher-service/anfahrt/parkmoeglichkeiten-spieltag-sonst/page/82-184-11-.html

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Das ist leider nicht bekannt, aber Folge 40 wurde erst im Februar 2015 veröffentlicht. Es ist aber auch kein offizielles Ende der Serie bekannt gegeben worden, also gibt es noch Hoffnung!

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http://www.finanztip.de/erbschaftsteuer/

Die persönlichen Freibeträge gemäß § 16 ErbStG bei der Erbschaftsteuer und Schenkungsteuer beginnen nach Ablauf einer Zehnjahresfrist wieder neu. Mit Schenkungen nach Plan lassen sich die Freibeträge daher mehrmals nutzen. Der Freibetrag der Kinder gilt im Verhältnis zu einem Elternteil, das heißt Vater und Mutter können jedem Kind jeweils einen Vermögenswert bis zu 400.000 Euro frei von Erbschaftsteuer beziegungsweise Schenkungsteuer zukommen lassen. Von den persönlichen Freibeträgen sind die generellen sachlichen Steuerbefreiungen des § 13 ErbStG abzugrenzen. So gibt es zum Beispiel einen sachlichen Freibetrag für Hausrat für Personen in der Steuerklasse I von 41.000 Euro und für Hausrat und sonstige Gegenstände in den Steuerklassen II und III in Höhe von 12.000 Euro. 

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http://www.namenerds.com/scottish/gaelic.html

http://www.namenerds.com/scottish/scotschick.html

Vielleicht Muireall oder Aileen.

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http://www.abendblatt.de/ratgeber/wissen/article106507826/Wie-gluehen-Gluehwuermchen-und-aus-welchem-Grund.html

Das Leuchten der Glühwürmchen geschieht durch eine chemische Reaktion im Inneren ihrer Körper. Die Tiere, die zu den Käfern zählen und ob ihrer besonderen Eigenschaft auch Leuchtkäfer genannt werden, haben ein spezielles Leuchtorgan am Körperende. In diesem liegt Luciferin, ein Kohlenwasserstoff, geballt vor. Durch Einsatz des Enzyms Luciferase, Sauerstoff und ein wenig Energie wird das Luciferin aufgespalten. Die dabei freigesetzte Energie wird als Licht abgegeben. Dass das Licht auch außen gesehen werden kann, liegt an den durchsichtigen Feldern im Hinterleib des Glühwürmchens. Das Leuchten dient der Kommunikation zwischen den Geschlechtern. In der Regel glühen die Weibchen und locken so die Männchen an. Es gibt aber auch Arten, bei denen beide Leuchtorgane haben.

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https://de.wikipedia.org/wiki/Schleierschwanz

https://de.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goldfisch

Es könnten Schleierschwänze sein oder normale Goldfische.

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http://www.juraforum.de/forum/t/besitz-von-axt-und-schwert-strafbar.12946/

Anscheinend nicht.

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Ruf an und frage nach. Ist s nicht das Wohnungsgeld, das gekürzt wurde, denn wenn du eine gewisse Quadratmeteranzahl überschreitest ist sie zu gross?

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