Charakterisierung in Englisch - überarbeiten?

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The 36-year old man Will Freeman is one of the protagonist of the novel “About a boy“ by Nick Hornby.

Will Freeman defines himself by his "cool appearance and appearance". He wears cool clothes and spends a lot of money on his hairstyle (see p. 9 l. 15, 16).

He is an open-minded and free thinking man. He lives his life like he wants and don't think about problems. His behavior isn‘t age-appropriate, but rather resembles that of a teenager (see p. 9, l. 14). When he pursues his favorite activities in his free time, such as watching TV, listening to music or clubbing, then he prefers to do nothing. If he goes to clubs at night, he prefers to flirt with women. Will lives in affluent circumstances even though he doesn't go to work. It might be the case that he get money from his parents.

Will often lies to himself by not truthfully filling out questionnaires. Furthermore he lies to women because he want to impress they. He tells that he drives fast cars but that isn't the truth. 

He occasionally visits his friends John and Christine, who already have their second child. They try to show Will the beautiful side of a small family, but to no avail. Will doesn't want a family of his own, including his own children. When his friends propose to become a godfather, he refuses this request and presents it as a joke.

The overall impression is that Will Freeman is a irritated guy, who hasn’t a idea of life. He doesn't work but can buy everything he wants. He want to be the man, which he isn’t it. 

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The 36-year old man Will Freeman is one of the protagonists of the novel “About a boy“ by Nick Hornby.

Will Freeman defines himself by his "cool appearance and appearance"(why appearence twice??). He wears cool clothes and spends a lot of money on his hairstyle (see p. 9 l. 15, 16).

He is an open-minded and free thinking man. He lives his life like he wants to and doesn't think about problems. His behaviour isn‘t age-appropriate, but rather resembles that of a teenager (see p. 9, l. 14). When he cannot pursue his favorite activities in his free time, such as watching TV, listening to music or clubbing, then he prefers to do nothing. If he goes to clubs at night, he prefers to flirt with women. Will lives in affluent circumstances even though he doesn't go to work. Presumably he receives money from his parents.

Will often lies to himself by not truthfully filling out questionnaires. Furthermore he lies to women because he wants to impress them. He brags about driving fast cars but that isn't the truth. 

He occasionally visits his friends John and Christine, who already have their second child. They try to show Will the beautiful side of a small family, but of no avail. Will doesn't want a family of his own, inclusive of his own children. When his friends suggest him to become a godfather, he refuses this request and perceives it as a joke.

The overall impression is that Will Freeman is a irritated guy, who has no idea of real life. He doesn't work but still can buy everything he wants. He wants to become another kind of man far from what he is at present 

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