Future Plans (English text)

Was kann ich besser machen? Was kann dort noch rein ? Über was kann ich noch erzählen? Sind fehler vorhanden ?

I often think about my future. I´m curious how it will look. At the moment, i go to the ninth class, and write with the secondary modern school qualification. But still a year go on to school. After school im not sure what i should learn then. Car Painter or car-technican. I love cars since i was small. I did a work experience at the car painter, i liked it very well. In the Summerholidays, i want to make a work experience at the car-technican. I want to make money later and want to drive a car.I donｴt know where i will live in the futur. I would like to have a house abroad. Now itｴs just a dream, but maybe one day my dream will come true. I have some plans about my Family. I guess that i will married one day an start a family with 2 kids. But, these are other plans. At the moment, im trying to concentrate on the school. I have also thought about the topic of travel made. I dreamt often on a trip around the world. I would really like to travel to australia, america and england.

Answer 1

[adabei]

Der Stil ist noch recht einfach und klingt an manchen Stellen “unenglisch”. Denk dran, dassman „I“ immer groß schreibt.

I often think about my future. I wonder what it will look like. At the moment, I am attending the ninth class of a secondary modern school where I will pass my exams next year. I am not sure yet what to do afterschool. I thought of becoming a car painter or a car technician. I have loved cars since I was a child. I did a work placement with a car painter and I liked it very well. During the summer holidays, I want to do a work placement with a car technician. I want to make money later and want to drive a car. I don’t know yet where I will live in the future. I would like to have a house abroad. So far, this is just a dream, but maybe one day my dream will come true.

I also have some plans about my family. I guess that I will get married one day and found af amily with two children. But these are just plans. At the moment, I am trying to concentrate on school. I have also thought about the topic of travelling. I have often dreamt about a trip around the world. I would really like to travel to Australia,t he United States and England.

to found a family = eine Familie gründen

Answer 2

[AstridDerPu]

I often think about my future. I´m curious how it will look (besser: what it will look like). At the moment, i go to the ninth class, and write with the secondary modern school qualification. But still a year go on to school (kein vollständiger Satz). After school (Komma) im (RS) not sure what i should learn then. Car Painter or car-technican (Wort). I love (Zeit) cars since i was small. I did a work experience at the car painter, i liked it very well. In (Ich bevorzuge: during) the (unbestimmter Artikel) Summerholidays (RS), i want to make a work experience at the car-technican (s.o.). I want to make money later and want to drive a car.

I donｴt know where i will (= werde) live in the futur. I would like to have a house abroad. Now itｴs just a dream, but maybe one day my dream will come true. I have some plans about my Family. I guess that i will married one day an start a family with 2 kids. But, these are other plans. At the moment, im trying to concentrate on (---) school. I have also thought about the topic of travel made. I dreamt often on a trip around the world. I would really like to travel to australia, america and england. 

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

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