Englisch Text verbessern?
hey, kann mir jemand vielleicht bei meiner Bildbeschreibung weiterhelfen?
The colored picture shows many people whose faces we cannot see. At the bottom of the picture, the People are standing close to each other and are holding mobile phones in the air and are filming something, so we can only see the people‘s arms and hands. The focus of the image is on the big flames and sparks which are in the middle of the picture. There is also a lot of smoke and it its nighttime. On the left side you can see a big puppet.
(Link zum Bild)
Ist der Text so gut, oder gibt es noch was zu ändern/hinzuzufügen
Danke im Voraus!!
2 Antworten
At the bottom of the picture, many people are standing close to each other while holding their mobile phones in the air to film the big sparkling flares. Since they are faced in the direction of the flares, you can only recognize their arms.
What hits your eye the most, are the phoenix-like flares plus the white sparkles in the middle of the picture. Lots of smoke are covering the sight in the direction where the people are filming.
Another worth mentioning fact is the setting. It seems like it is located somewhere in the urban streets, you can tell that by looking at the upper right of the picture. It plays in the nighttime.
The colored (= AE; BE = coloured) picture shows many people whose faces we cannot see. At the bottom of the picture, the People (RS) are standing close to each other, (---) holding mobile phones in the air, (---) filming something (unpräzise), so we can only see the people‘s arms and hands. The focus of the image is on the big flames and sparks (---) in the middle of the picture. There is also a lot of smoke and (---) its (Grammatik) nighttime. On the left side (Komma) you can see a big puppet.
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
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:-) AstridDerPu