Englisch Summary "Out into the World" - Feedback!?

Hey Community, ich bereite mich im Moment für meine Englisch Klausur vor.Eine der Aufgaben wird es sein ein Summary zu schreiben.Ich nahm mir nun einen englischen Text und habe es zusammengefasst.

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Out into the World

Summary

The given report, puplished in 19. September 2007 by the Guardian Weekly, is about a 17 years old girl, Jo Becker, who had a amazing and expierencing trip in the Amazon River.

Jo Becker is a girl, who always wanted to travel down the Amazon rivers.In Summer 2006 she was given the opportunity from a British School Exploring Society to join an Expedition.The goals of the Expedition was to carry out scientific researches and conservations of the Amazone and to protect the habitat.However she was not alone, a group of Peruvian Scientist and students from LA university accompanied her.Some of you may think it is like a holiday trip but on the contrary they travelled deeper in the Amazons as tourists are allowed to and it was hard to accommodate the circumstances ,thus everyone reached their limits.She have met alot of people , who helped her to get through the poachers and the wildlife.Some of their tasks were disgusting and tough to do.

However at the end she has learned alot about the Amazon and the people who are surviving every day by just having the basics to life.

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The given report, puplished in
19. September 2007 by the Guardian Weekly, is about a 17 years old girl, Jo Becker, who had a amazing and expierencing trip in the Amazon River.

Jo Becker is a girl, who always wanted to travel down the Amazon rivers. In Summer 2006 she was given the opportunity from a British School Exploring Society to join an Expedition.The goals of the Expedition was to carry out scientific researches and conservations of the Amazone and to protect the habitat.

However Komma she was not alone, a group of Peruvian Scientist and students from LA university accompanied her.

Some of you may think it is like a holiday trip but on the contrary they travelled deeper in the Amazons as tourists are allowed to and it was hard to** accommodate the circumstances** , thus everyone reached their limits. She have met
alot of people , who helped her to get through the poachers and (---) wildlife.Some of their tasks were disgusting and tough to do.

However Komma
at the end she has learned alot about the Amazon and the people who are surviving every day by just having the basics to life.

• Beachte die Groß- und Kleinschreibung.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

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