Frage von lalilu73, 50

Kann mir jemand helfen bei dieser Englisch argumentation?

Da ich in englisch nicht die beste bin könnt ihr mir ja vielleicht helfen :) Wir sollten eine argumentation zum Thema soziale Netzwerke gut oder schlecht? Das alles in englische. Wär nett wenn ihr euch meine Argumentation mal anschaut und mir Fehler sagt die ich dann berichtigen kann. A statistic of the website www.lessenstiel.lu shows us that we use a wide variety of social networks. For example 71% use Facebook, 52% Instagram and 41% Snapchat, that are only a few social networks of the many we use. We would like to know if social networks are good or bad for us. In the following comment I will discuss whether social networks are good or bad for us.

First of all I think with social networks is communication easier. It is because you can communicate with people all over the world, if they have the social network too. Look at a example a member of your family life in another country than you can communicate with them over social networks like facebook or snapchat.

Not only that, I also think that important informations are fast distribute. You can write a text on a social network and all your friends can read them. Let me give you an example, if you are pregnant you can write a text on a social network and all your friends know this import Information.

In contrast to this is a point against social networks that the personal contact will be less. Many people communicate only about social networks.

Another significant point is that the persons in the social network are not always real. In a social network you can choose our age, your name and other personal Informations but no one knows if the Informations are right. If the profile looks good you think they are friendly, Unfortunately we can not be sure that the person isn´t lying, maybe the person you trust is a criminal.

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that social networks have pros and cons. It is important to mention that dangers are everywhere and that is why in future many people will use the social networks too. Everyone must decide for themselves which social network they use and how often. Danke im vorraus :)

Antwort
von djtios, 21

good or bad for us. In the following comment I will discuss whether social networks are good or bad for us.

Das good or bad for us, hast du oben schon. Somit sollte dem Leser das ganze schon klar sein.

It is because you can communicate with people all over the world, if they have the social network too.

It Is because klingt komisch. It's possible to get easily connection to people all over the world.

Look at a example? Der Text klingt nach einer Aufzählung und nicht nach einem Bericht. Ich hätte: Here is a short example benutzt.

..your friends know this import Information.

important? import - export ist etwas anderen.

our age, your name and other personal Information

Our? Am besten bei der Form your bleiben oder wenn du unser be nutzen möchtest our benutzen.

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that social networks have pros and cons.

Nachdem ich pro und contra verglichen habe, kommst du zu dem Ergebniss das es pro und contra gibt? Das hast du doch oben schon ausführlich erläutert? Du sollst doch nun dein Endergebniss der Vor- und Nachteile schildern.

Nachdem ich pro- und contra verglichen habe, komme ich zu dem folgenden Ergebniss:

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the Foliengrössen conclusion about social networks:

It is important to mention....

So würde ich das grob formulieren.

Kommentar von lalilu73 ,

danke das hilft mir schon weiter :)

Kommentar von djtios ,

Kein Problem, gerne.

Antwort
von YunaTidusAuron, 12

Hier ein paar Verbesserungsvorschläge: :)

A statistic of the website
shows that we use a wide variety of social networks. According to this
questionaire, 71% of the sampled population use Facebook, 52% Instagram
and 41% Snapchat,  those are only a few social networks of the many we
use. I would like to know whether social networks have positive or
negative effects on us. In the following comment I will discuss this
very topic.

First of all I think social networks make
communication so much easier for us, because you can chat with people
all over the world, if they hold an an account with the social network
too. Let's have a look at an example: a relative of yours lives in
another country than you. Your only possibility of communicating with
him/her are social networks like facebook or snapchat.

Anoher
significant point is that important informations are fastly distributed.
You can write a text on a social network and all your friends can read
it immediately.. Let me give you an example: if you are pregnant, you
can write a text on a social network and all your friends know this
important Information.

On the downside, an item against social
networks is that the personal contact to your friends may be less. Many
people only communicate via social networks.

Another point that
should not to be underestimated is that the people in social networks
are not always who they seem to be. In a social network you can choose
our age, your name, your profile picture and other personal Informations
but no one knows whether these informations are correct, or not. Many
teenagers become friends with people, who pretend to be about the same
age. When they meet each other in real life, the guy with the cute,
16-year old looking profile picture, turns out to be a 40-year old
rapist. The Youtuber Coby Persin demonstrated these dangers very
illustrative, as reported by the online-journal "chip.de".

Weighing
the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that social networks have
advantages, as well as disadvantages. It is important to mention that
dangers are everywhere and that is the reason, why most of the people
will still use the social networks in the future. Everyone must decide
for oneself which social network one uses and how often.

So würde ich es machen...;)

Kommentar von lalilu73 ,

richtig gut :) danke

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