Frage
von Sogeking00
04.04.2016, 10:43
Introduce yourself für die Schule?

Hallo, ich habe für die BS die Aufgabe mich in Englisch vorzustellen. Ich hoffe das ist so in Ordnung:

Hello, my name ist Stefan . I´m 22 years old. And at the moment i live by my mom in .... I was born in Hannover on 11th september 1993. I have one younger brother called, Phillip. He is 18 years old, and is also born in Hannover. My hobby is football. I play in a team and I enjoy it very much. In the year 2010, i have finished my school. Then i have my teaching started, as a car mechanic. I currently work in a small workshop. Last month I started the study for vehicle technicians, and so far it makes me fun.

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Antwort
von verreisterNutzer
04.04.2016, 11:05

Oy, teilweise ist das ok aber du musst noch sehr an deiner Ausdrucksweise arbeiten. Das klingt als hätte es ein Sechtsklässler geschrieben.

Hier ein Vorschlag:

Hello, my name is Stefan. I'm 22 years old.  I  live with my mom in ......... I was born on September 11th, 1993 in Hannover. I have one younger brother, Phillip, who is 18 years old and was born in Hannover as well. During my leisure time I play soccer with the (hier solltest du deinen Verein hinschreiben) soccer club., where I occupy the position of (....hier hinschreiben welche position du spielst), which I enjoy very much. In 2010 I graduated from (hier deine Schule hinschreiben bei der du den Abschluss gemacht hast) with ( hier deinen Abschluss, z.B. FOR usw.) Afterwards I began my apprenticeship to become a mechanic. I currently work at a small workshop. Last month I started my training to be a motor vehicle technician and so far I really enjoy it.

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