Also der text macht oft gar kein sinn im englischem!! Vielleicht schreibst du den text mal in deutsch das wir verstehen können was du meinst und dann kann ich übersetzen wenn du möchtest! LG blotta99 :)

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If I was you ist ganz falsch! Es ist if i were you! Wie sagt man immer: deutsche sprache, schwere sprache... das ist im englischem genauso! :)

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englischer text über australien

ich hab einen text über australien im englischen geschrieben , da wollte ich mal eure meinungen dazu hören :)

Australia is a country and continent,which is sometimes called down under for his position at the bottom of the globe. Sydney is the largest city in Australia with a population of about 4 million people. The opera house at the harbour bridge in sydney is very famous. Aussies love surfing at the coast. Most of them live in cities around the coast, so most of the kids learn to surf quite early. The waves are approximate twenty feet high. The longest fence in the world is the dingo fence. Its over 5000 km long. It was made to keep out dingos. Those are wild dogs and roam the outback of australia. The farmers hate them because they kill thousands of sheep every year. The bushmen started building the fence about 100 years ago. Australia is the hottest and driest continent of the world.Only a few people live in the outback.They call the loneliest part of the outback the never-never-land. In australia live animals , wich are cute and cuddly, like koalas or kangaroos.

Some other facts of Australian: The inhabitants of Australia were the aborigines. Aussiesnare very sporty too. They do many exciting and exhausting sports too, for example Australian rules football , which is a mix of football and rugby.Or cricket, this game can be very dangerous because the ball can be 150 km per hour fast.

das wär dann alles :) würde mich sehr freuen wenn ihr es lesen und bewertet, ihr könnt mir auch schulnoten geben :D Danke im voraus :)

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Overall, sehr gut. Es sind natürlich immer paar grammatikalische fehler or sachen sind sprachlich einfach nicht ganz richtig ausgedrückt. Sonst aber gut!

..The opera house at the harbour bridge in sydney is very famous. = Both the opera house and the harbour bridge are very famous in Sydney.

... Aussies love surfing at the coast. Most of them live in cities around the coast, so most of the kids learn to surf quite early. The waves are approximate twenty feet high.... =(neuer absatz) Aussies love surfing on the coast. Many live in cties or towns around the coast, hence numerous kids learn to surf at a quite early stage. (Das mit dem 20ft, also um die 6meter höhe stimmt aus meinen erfahrungen nicht wirklich... http://www.bom.gov.au/australia/charts/viewer/index.shtml?domain=combinedW&type=sigWaveHgt also würde ich sagen..) The waves can reach a height of...

The longest fence in the world is the dingo fence. Its over 5000 km long. It was made to keep out dingos. Those are wild dogs and roam the outback of australia. = (neuer absatz) The longest fence in the world, which is situated in Australia, is the dingo fence. It is over 5000km long, and was made to keep dingos out. These are wild dogs that roam the outback of Australia.

Australia is the hottest and driest continent of the world.Only a few people live in the outback.They call the loneliest part of the outback the never-never-land. In australia live animals , wich are cute and cuddly, like koalas or kangaroos.= (ich finde dieser teil ist einfach so zusammengesezt also hat es keinen wirklichen "flow".) (Neuer absatz) Australia isn't only a country with many unique animal kinds, such as koalas or kangaroos (das mit dem cute und cuddly würde ich raus lassen, da die kangaroos sehraggressive sein können) , but it is also one if the driest and hottest continents of the world. Only few people live in the outback, which is why the lonliest part of this deserted land is called the 'never-never-land'.

Some other facts of Australian: The inhabitants of Australia were the aborigines. Aussiesnare very sporty too. They do many exciting and exhausting sports too, for example Australian rules football , which is a mix of football and rugby.Or cricket, this game can be very dangerous because the ball can be 150 km per hour fast. =(neuer absatz) Some other short facts about Australia: The original inhabitants of 'down-under' were and are the Aborigines. 'Aussies' are very sporty too; they have many national sports, including Australian Rules Football (AFL or mostly known as 'Aussie Rules' by Australians) ,which is a mix of rugby and football. Many people also play cricket, which can be described as an Australian version of baseball, or they swim, surf, play rugby, and do countless more sports.

Ich hoffe das hilft dir! :) LG Blotta99

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Short story, Englisch - ist die so okay?

Hey Leute, ich soll meiner Lehrerin in den Ferien per e-mail eine lurzgeschichte zukommen lassen, stichworte für die geschichte waren "14-year old boy, run-down neighbourhood, large woman, handbag" Ich habe jetzt eine geschrieben, aber weiß nicht ob die so gut ist, oder was man daran noch verändern könnte. für Tipps und Kritiken wäre ich sehr dankbar. Das Anforderungsniveau liegt bei der 12. Klasse. Ich werde die Geschichte jetzt hier hin posten, falls sie nicht Ganz in das Fragefeld passt werde ich als Kommentar den Rest schreiben.

Danke im Vorraus, LG :-)

It was a cloudy autumnday in 82nd street. Like every day on my way to school, I saw this old woman, sitting on a bench in the park, feeding some birds. I saw her putting her handbag next to her on the bench. She was a large woman, I think about 60 years old. She looked wise and happy, so I began to think about her life, what it looked like an what interesting thinks she might have seen in her whole life, when I suddenly saw the guid dog sitting next to her. That's when I realized that this friendly looking lady wasn't able to see anything. First I felt sorry for her, but as more as I thought about it, I began to wonder if it wouldn't be better not to see this run-down neighbourhood, not to see those dissatisfied people. I thought a lot about what it would be like, if I wouldn't be able to see. But then I saw this popular guys from my grad, coming with a few girls through the park. I didn't like them, they are so unfriendly and unfair, and not interested in their own future, so they didn't come to school very often, in contrast to me. I hoped with good education I would be able to leave this territory. Well, that's not the point. I watched them for a few minutes and I suddenly got shocked. They walked towards the blind Lady, grapped her handbag an ran away! Of course I decided to follow those thieves, and at least I got in a conflict with them, but I was sure it was worth it. So I finally got the handbag back, and I wanted to bring it back to the old Lady. But even if I ran as fast as I can, when I arrived at the park, she was away. So I liked to give it to her the following day. Next morning she sat there as usually, on the bench where she has ever sat. But that day she seemed to be a little bit depressed, understandable. I sat down next to her. She turned around and whished me a good morning, a true and friendly smile comes back on her face. I began to tell her how I got her handbag and that I want to give it back to her. I talked to her for a very long time, we talked about our age, our family etc. I wondered what she was doing in that area, because she was a rich looking woman, wearing expensive and beautiful clothes and some jewellys. She began to tell something about her life, and why she was there every morning. „ When I was a little girl, I lived here with my mother and my two brothers. Because of good education, my mother got the chance to work at a better place in New

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Der zweite Teil..!

But sometimes, even if this place is very criminal and poor, I miss the time I lived here, so I come here every day, just to remember those old times. = But sometimes, even that place is very criminal and poor, I missed the time I lived here, so I come here every day, just to remember those 'good old times'.

I think now you are too young boy, you are just 14 years old.“ = I think you are still to young to understand my boy, you're just 14 years old."

...maybe I could talkt to her the following day... = maybe I could talk to her again the following day.

... „ I know how poor people are who lives here, and I can understand that some people have to steal something. But you showed me that even people who need it, can be honestly and selflessly. I'm so touched of that, you showed me the good sides of this place again, so I want to give you something.= "I know that most of these people going past us right now, are poor, and I understand that some people have the need to steal things to survive. Nevertheless, today, you showed me that even the people who really need it, can resist. Just like you. Everyone can be open-minded and kind-hearted, even if they have other things on their mind, that seem far more important than helping an old blind lady from getting back her handbag. Everyone can be good. You showed me the positibe sides of this place again, so I want to gibe you something in return.

... but now I found a good investitaion. I would also be happe without all that material things, without that money.... = but now I have found a good way to invest it. I can also be happy without a few hundred dollars less.

But you are young, and a very friendly and kind boy, you take care of others and their feelings. = But you are young, a few hundred dollars can mean the world to you for a little while, and you are an extremely friendly and kimd boy, you take care of others and their feelings.

At least she persuades me to take it, and I was very greatful for it. Since that day I would visit her every morning before school, and I really liked our conversations. I done it until the da sshe didn't came back anymore. = At last she persuaded me to take it, and I was very grateful to her. She told me it was worth around three thousand dollars more or less, and that I should get a good education for it. Since that day, I would visit her every morning before my new school started, and I really enjoyed our lovely conversations. She taught me more than you can imagine, that old woman, and I will never forget her, not until the day I die. I visited her on her bench surrounded by the park, in winter through till summer, untill one day she didn't come back anymore.

Ich hoffe meine beiden antworten helfen dir bei deiner geschichte! LG blotta99 :)

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Short story, Englisch - ist die so okay?

Hey Leute, ich soll meiner Lehrerin in den Ferien per e-mail eine lurzgeschichte zukommen lassen, stichworte für die geschichte waren "14-year old boy, run-down neighbourhood, large woman, handbag" Ich habe jetzt eine geschrieben, aber weiß nicht ob die so gut ist, oder was man daran noch verändern könnte. für Tipps und Kritiken wäre ich sehr dankbar. Das Anforderungsniveau liegt bei der 12. Klasse. Ich werde die Geschichte jetzt hier hin posten, falls sie nicht Ganz in das Fragefeld passt werde ich als Kommentar den Rest schreiben.

Danke im Vorraus, LG :-)

It was a cloudy autumnday in 82nd street. Like every day on my way to school, I saw this old woman, sitting on a bench in the park, feeding some birds. I saw her putting her handbag next to her on the bench. She was a large woman, I think about 60 years old. She looked wise and happy, so I began to think about her life, what it looked like an what interesting thinks she might have seen in her whole life, when I suddenly saw the guid dog sitting next to her. That's when I realized that this friendly looking lady wasn't able to see anything. First I felt sorry for her, but as more as I thought about it, I began to wonder if it wouldn't be better not to see this run-down neighbourhood, not to see those dissatisfied people. I thought a lot about what it would be like, if I wouldn't be able to see. But then I saw this popular guys from my grad, coming with a few girls through the park. I didn't like them, they are so unfriendly and unfair, and not interested in their own future, so they didn't come to school very often, in contrast to me. I hoped with good education I would be able to leave this territory. Well, that's not the point. I watched them for a few minutes and I suddenly got shocked. They walked towards the blind Lady, grapped her handbag an ran away! Of course I decided to follow those thieves, and at least I got in a conflict with them, but I was sure it was worth it. So I finally got the handbag back, and I wanted to bring it back to the old Lady. But even if I ran as fast as I can, when I arrived at the park, she was away. So I liked to give it to her the following day. Next morning she sat there as usually, on the bench where she has ever sat. But that day she seemed to be a little bit depressed, understandable. I sat down next to her. She turned around and whished me a good morning, a true and friendly smile comes back on her face. I began to tell her how I got her handbag and that I want to give it back to her. I talked to her for a very long time, we talked about our age, our family etc. I wondered what she was doing in that area, because she was a rich looking woman, wearing expensive and beautiful clothes and some jewellys. She began to tell something about her life, and why she was there every morning. „ When I was a little girl, I lived here with my mother and my two brothers. Because of good education, my mother got the chance to work at a better place in New

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Ganz gute geschichte, aber mit paar rechtschreibfehlern.. ...cloudy autumnday ... = ...cloudy autumn day...

... I suddenly saw the guid dog sitting... = ....guide dog..

...not to see those dissatisfied people.. =... these dissatisfied people...

...guys from my grad... = ...guys from my grade...

... blind Lady, grapped her handbag an ran away. = ...blind lady, grabbed her handbag and ran away.

... But even if I ran as fast as I can, when I arrived at the park, she was away. = I ran as fast as my legs could carry me, but when I arrived at the park, she was gone. (Das hört sich einfach ein bisschen besser an!)

... So I liked to give it to her the following day. Next morning she sat there as usually, on the bench where she has ever sat. But that day she seemed to be a little bit depressed, understandable. = I decided to return the old lady's handbag to her the following day, and on the next morning she sat on that same bench as usual, the same place she has always sat. However, today she seemed a little depressed, which out of my eyes, is totally understandable.

..She turned around and whished me a good morning, a true and friendly smile comes back on her face. = She turned to face me and wished me a good morning, the same true, friendly smile lightening up her face as I had seen it many times before.

I began to tell her how I got her handbag and that I want to give it back to her. I talked to her for a very long time, we talked about our age, our family etc. = I began to tell her how I had got her handbag and that I wanted to return it to her. We talked for a while, but not the same old chit-chat you do with strangers. We had an interesting conversation about our families, heritage, and it felt like I had known this elderly lady for years.

I wondered what she was doing in that area, because she was a rich looking woman, wearing expensive and beautiful clothes and some jewellys. She began to tell something about her life, and why she was there every morning. = I wondered what she was doing in this run-down area, as she was a wealthy looking woman, wearing expensive and quite beautiful clothes, as well as some jewellery. She began to tell me about her life and background, which was where I found out why she sat her at this very same place every single morning.

Das ist jetzt erstmal das erste teil.. ich hoffe es hilft dir :) LG

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