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Hallo, ich muss ein text über mich und meine Familie schreiben und würde gerne eure Hilfe annehmen und uhr mir sagt was falsch ist danke im vorraus: I would like to tell you something about myself and my family. First of all, i will tell you something about me. My name is Lea...and i was born on the 21st of February 2000 in Ben. I'm 15 years old. I lived in (ort)for six years and I've been at the school there till grade 8. Last year we moved to (ort) during the summer holidays. It's a small village and i live in a nice house with my family. At the moment I'm still at the Strombergschool ort..n. I want to graduate on this school and then i will make my realschoolgraduation at a vacational school. After that, i don't know what I'm going to do as a job. My hobbies are dancing, karate, shopping and meeting my friends. My parents are divorced since one year. My dad had a new girlfriend, her name is Diana. She has a little daughter, her name is Mn. and she's three years old. They lived here too. Now i will speak about my parents. My mother's name is S and she was born on the 29th of September 1976 in Strt. She's 38 years old and works in a (ort) und beruf. Her parents, so my grandparents, are from Serbia. My mother can speak Serbian. She has a big brother, his name is Dn. And she has a little sister too, her name is Ma. My mother lives in g. Her hobbie is shopping. My father's name is J and he was born on the 21st of December 1970 in Stt. He's 44 years old and worked as a cook, careshare and tattooer. My dad has an older brother, his name is U. His parents, so my other grandparents live in Km, it's near strt. Now i want to tell you something about my siblings. I have a big brother, his name is L. He's 16 years old and was born on the 20th of march 1998 in Bn. He goes to a vacational school in B and will make his high school graduation. After that he will make his realschoolgraduation. His hobbies are fitness, going to parties and meeting his friends. He had a bartagame as a pet. Bartagames come exclusively from Australia. There are omnivores. My brother and i are very close. At last i will tell something about my little sister. Her name is e. She's 11 years old and was born on the 27th of March 2003 in Stt. She goes to a comprehensives in en. She's in grade six. Her hobbies are gymnastics, swimming and meeting her friends. That was my family.
I'd like to tell you something about myself and my family. First of all, I'll tell you something about me. My name is Lea, I'm 15 and i was born on the 21st February 2000 in Ben. After grade 8 my family moved to [town] which is a small village. I attend [school's name] and hope to graduate there. I'd like to graduate middle school at a vacational school. I'm still trying to figure out what kind of job I can imagine myself doing. In my free time I enjoy a lot of things, such as dancing, karate, shopping and of course, meeting my friends.I grew up with my mom, S, born on the 21st September 1976 in [town] being a [job] and my dad, J, born December 1st 1070 in [town]. My dad actually had a lot of jobs, i.e. cook, tattoer or carsharer. My mom works as a [job]. Because her parents are from Serbia, she can also speak Serbian.Besides me my parents had two more children: First my big brother, L, who's 16 yrs old and attends highschool right now. He enjoys partying, sports and meeting his friends. Second my little sister S, who's 11 years old and in grade six. She really likes sports such as swimming or gymnastics.A year ago my parents split up. My dad's got a new girlfriend named Diana and I've got a little stepsister now. She's called [name] and only three years old.Of course, my family also consists of my aunts, uncles, cousins and grandparents, but the people I told you about are the people I live with on a daily base. We've got a quite nice accomodation in [town] where we live altogether.Nicht sicher, ob noch alle Fakten passen... :) Sprachlich etwas flüssiger und etwas ansprechender gegliedert.