Hallo :) ich habe hier meine GFS-Texte auf Englisch umgeschrieben und wollte wissen, ob sich in dem Text noch Fehler befinden? Wäre schön, wenn mir jemand, der sich mit Englisch gut auskennt helfen würde und meine Fehler gleich verbessern könnte?
Amok run of Winnenden
With the amok run in the Albertville secondary school in Winnenden the 17-year-old Tim K. arranged on the 11th of March, 2009 a massacre, took a hostage, delivered to himself a gunfight with the police and hunted afterwards a bullet in the head. 16 people lost her life. The awful amok run of Winnenden had become possible because the father of the culprit had kept his self-loading gun against all weapons-juridical regulations open in the wardrobe with himself in the bedroom and not as prescribed in a weapon safe deposit, therefore the son Tim had had unchecked access to the action weapon. After the amok run a political discussion about an increase of the weapon right began. In particular, it was suggested forbidding to private individuals as well as sports protection, keeping her weapons at home. Protection associations would have to be obliged to keep the weapons in the associations. There can be exceptions, possibly for foresters or hunters. However, have rejected the home secretary of the alliance and some of the countries an increase of the weapon right; with the grounds that a change of the weapon right could not have changed the action. The laws are quite strict and the accesses to weapons are almost impossible for youngsters. After many discussions about the law, change it was fixed, finally, that shooting exercises with large-caliber weapons are permitted in future only from 18 years. Up to now youngsters may already shoot from 14 years with sharp weapons. On the 3rd anniversary after the amok run in 2012 the government presidium of Stuttgart informed that since the action up to now 135,000 weapons were delivered. The number of the registered weapons has decreased with it in Baden-Wurttemberg by about 15 percent.
Weapon law in Germany To be allowed to own buy a weapon and to be allowed to own, a gun license is necessary in Germany. Owners must be of age and prove the suitable need beside the material customer also. Besides, according to law weapon owners must have the "personal reliability" and the "personal suitability". The permission is refused psychically to people dependent on alcohol or ill. To be allowed to bear arms with himself, a gun license is necessary, in addition. This is given possibly to hunters only for locally restricted areas. Private individuals receive him only in special cases, possibly if they can prove that they are also particularly endangered outside of her habitation.