Hey also mach dir da mal gar keine Gedanken, denn erstmal muss ich klarstellen das "dick" aussehen doch gar nicht schlimm ist. Außerdem bist du doch sogar im Untergewicht für deine Größe. Auf deine Frage ob das andere auch so sehen würden sag ich ganz klar nein, denn du bist wahrscheinlich überhaupt nicht dick. Also mach dir wegen Gewicht oder Aussehen mal nicht so viele Gedanken. Wichtig ist das du dich wirklich wohl fühlst und auch zufrieden mit dir selbst bist, denn immer nur an das eigene Aussehen zu denken hilft dir im Leben definitiv nicht weiter:))

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Also wenn dir langweih ist kannst du ja z. B auch ne neue Serie anschauen oder vielleicht nen neuen Skill lernen, so wie programmieren, ne neue Sprache oder so!

Wenn du sportlich was machen willst, kannst du ja schwimmen gehen oder Klimmzüge machen. Mehr fällt mir im Moment nicht ein.

Hoffe das hilft bissle :))

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Also es kommt auch immer auf den Charakter von deinem Protagonisten an, aber die verbreitete Reaktion ist natürlich erschrocken reagieren. Natürlich ist jeder erstmal schockiert wenn einfach jmd zu dir sagt, dass man der Vater ist.

Aber natürlich kann es der Person auch vollkommen egal sein, wie gesagt es kommt immer auf den Charakter an...

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Geh zum Arzt wenn du dich nicht gut fühlst. Aber zum schneller verheilen geht glaub Bepanten ganz gut...

Gute Besserung btw wie hast du das eigentlich hinbekommen

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Hallo lieber Jonas,

Das sollte dir eigentlich gar keinen Kummer bereiten...

Jedoch tritt der trockene Orgasmus meist nur bei nicht Geschlechtsreifen Kindern auf...

Dein Dr Summer teem

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Was denkt ihr von meine englishe Geschichte (unfinished)?

  The cushion concussion

Its not a story like the others,

It One cold night, in the middle of November, There was a woman named Lucy. Lucy was driving in her car, listening to the radio. A peaceful music was playing (only you (and you alone )by the platters). About 2 Kilometers from her home, where her daughter was waiting for her to come back from work. About 7 minutes later, on the driveway, which was empty because it was 23:00, She saw one person alone in the way. She was just standing there. Lucy didn't see her, but as she did, she couldn't brake in time. The accident was imminent.

As she woke up, she found herself in a Cushion kingdom. It was very similar to something medieval. “ Where am I” she asked. “Its probably only a dream” she said very convinced.

Lucy stared looking for other people around, but no one was there. After going for about 45 minutes, she saw a castle, a castle made of cushion! Lucy was conscious that it was only a dream. She decided to enter the powerful looking castle. At the entrance the doors were strange. They were different. They were out of metal, looking like a cell door. Lucy decided to try and open it, but as she kept pushing and pulling it didn't move. She was exhausted. Some time later, the doors opened… She could hear a voice, but she couldn't understand what it was saying. “Food?” she asked. That was the only word she could hear. But she was also very hungry so she decided to take a look. The light was bright and it kept getting darker and darker as she entered. She could hear people screaming and loud noises. She was terrified but she wanted to know what was in there. She also felt safe because of the thought that it was only a dream. Before anymore thinking, Someone shouted “Lucy!”. She didn't have the time to react because someone grabbed her arm. “Who are you” Lucy asked, getting no answers. Frustrated that they didn't answer, she tried to see who was holding her arm. Somehow, her sight has downgraded. “Perhaps because of bright lights hanging on the ceiling” she thought. She was put in a room. It was very dark, but soft. The first thing that came to her head was “maybe they took me because I do not look like I am from here”. She passed days in the room, without finding any time of object or exit. After some time in the cushion room, she heard her daughter singing. She stood up and started yelling her name. After the man in white, perhaps a man made of cushions, took her away, she started running without looking where she was going. She just wanted to get out and find her daughter. The funny looking castle turned in a horror movie where she was trapped. When will this nightmare end? She thought. She could hear an army running around the castle looking for her.

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Ist recht gut vom plot her, aber du hast paar Schreibfehler gemacht.

Ich würde dir empfehlen deine Sätze bzw Handlungsteile besser auszuschreiben bzw ausführlicher zu formulieren. Gerade gegen Ende waren es zu viele Handlungsteile auf einmal und es war als Leser etwas schwer mitzukommen. Wenn du alles genauer schreibst und gerade zum Beispiel den dunklen Raum genauer beschreibst kann sich der Leser ein eigenes Bild der Szene machen. So baut sich auch mehr Spannung in der Szene auf.

Aber sonst war die Story echt nicht schlecht!

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