Ist der text grammatikalisch korrekt. ich sollte eine Meinung zum Thema "Hitzefrei" schreiben, zu VIEL, oder zu WENIG?
Nowadays, teenagers want a day off because of excessive heat in their school. I think the teachers should allow the teenagers a day off because of excessive heat, for different reasons, that I am going to explain:
First of all, I think teenagers should have a day off because of excessive heat, because it is important for their health. A few teachers say to have a day off because of excessive heat isn’t usefully, because pupils can’t learn more in their schools if they cancel school for the day. In my opinion, I would say a day off because of excessive heat is important that you can keep fit and you also save in order to your health.
In additional, the teenagers have more free-time by the day off because of excessive heat and they can do more in their free-time, for example: to play basketball, to play football and some more sports. To sum up, I think a day off because of excessive heat is usefully, because it has a massive effect on the health and you can do more in your free-time,.
Hier wären ein paar links zu Argumenten:
Du wiederholst die Phrase: have a day off because of excessive heat ziemlich oft. gibt es vielleicht etwas anderes, was du stattdessen sagen könntest? Einfach nur day off school, to take a day off
Oder einfach ein paar mal die Begründung weglassen.
A few teachers say - Some teachers have the opinion that
isn’t usefully - is useless; doesn't help
In my opinion, I would say - ist ein bisschen doppelt gemoppelt
that you can keep fit and you also save in order to your health. - so that you stay fit and healthy
In additional - in addition, despite that
Das Argument, dass man dann mehr Freizeit hat, ist nicht wirklich überzeugend.