Ist der text grammatikalisch korrekt. ich sollte eine Meinung zum Thema "Hitzefrei" schreiben, zu VIEL, oder zu WENIG?
Nowadays, teenagers want a day off because of excessive heat in their school. I think the teachers should allow the teenagers a day off because of excessive heat, for different reasons, that I am going to explain:
First of all, I think teenagers should have a day off because of excessive heat, because it is important for their health. A few teachers say to have a day off because of excessive heat isn’t usefully, because pupils can’t learn more in their schools if they cancel school for the day. In my opinion, I would say a day off because of excessive heat is important that you can keep fit and you also save in order to your health.
In additional, the teenagers have more free-time by the day off because of excessive heat and they can do more in their free-time, for example: to play basketball, to play football and some more sports. To sum up, I think a day off because of excessive heat is usefully, because it has a massive effect on the health and you can do more in your free-time,.
Hier wären ein paar links zu Argumenten:
Du wiederholst die Phrase: have a day off because of excessive heat ziemlich oft. gibt es vielleicht etwas anderes, was du stattdessen sagen könntest? Einfach nur day off school, to take a day off
Oder einfach ein paar mal die Begründung weglassen.
A few teachers say - Some teachers have the opinion that
isn’t usefully - is useless; doesn't help
In my opinion, I would say - ist ein bisschen doppelt gemoppelt
that you can keep fit and you also save in order to your health. - so that you stay fit and healthy
In additional - in addition, despite that
Das Argument, dass man dann mehr Freizeit hat, ist nicht wirklich überzeugend.
Kratzeis, du bist ja öfter hier aber bedankst dich für unsere Arbeit selten. Be that as it may, there are too many repetitions in your essay. Just check how often you have "excessive heat". Furthermore, you totally ignore your teacher who has a good point of view: His idea is that your school is not so hot inside because it is probably a modern building and students should quit complaining about every day life. Learning is more important than being idle. Sports makes things even worse in the heat. What are your thoughts on that?
Könnte jemand mir diesen Text korrigieren; englisch?
One day he meets Will at SPAT picnic, his mother arranged this meeting for him. In the beginning, Marcus and Will don’t like each other but when Marcus accidentally kills a duck, Will defends and helps him, so a relationship arises between them. Although he is still not sure if he likes Will or not, he is not bad. So Marcus gets a plan that is connected with Will, after his mum commits suicide, that it needs more people in the family, so tries couple Fiona with Will, when Will asks to take them sometimes out. But then he realizes that Will isn't interested in Fiona, however even if Will isn't interested in her, he thinks that Will is getting used to him, and so he visits him a lot in autumn. Because he is the only person who knows about teenagers lifestyle and his problems. For example Will buys him new adidas shoe, to get Marcus more accepted in the school, but which gets stolen after a day. And so he argue with his mum, because of Wills Caring and buying him new trainers, but Marcus argument to this conversation with “I need a father”.
Danke im Voraus
Buch: about a Boy
Englisch ( Text Hilfe )
Hallo ihr lieben :) ich wollte mal fragen wie ihr den Text findet. Und was ich eventuell verbessern kann. Ich bin in der 9. klasse.
A young mayor? I want to talk about the cons and the pros of a young mayor. An advantage is, that he is an energetic person who knows the interests of young People. Another point is that maybe more young persons would get interest in politics, because of the young mayor. But on the other side he would not have so much experience.
Much free time is really important for a young person. But a young mayor would not have time for studies and for free time activities. Thereby he might lose friend. It would be very difficult, because he has to do more than one job, because a mayor is not paid very well.
Another problem is, that he would be too young to understand older people. And maybe the older people in the city do not accept him as 'boss'.
To my mind a young mayor is a bad idea, because he can not represent the 'whole' city. The responsibility is too high for a young person. And he would not has enought experience to deal with money.
Würde mich über ein Feedback freuen :) Danke im voraus.
Habe englisch Text geschrieben ( Graphen beschreiben) kann mir jemand den Text überprüfen ?
The aim of this report is to illustrate the percentage of teenagers writing text messages per day.
How often do teenagers send texts per day in percent:
The pie chart is divided into 6 parts. The first part shows that 11 per cent of teens writes more than 200 texts in one day. It highlights that one third send more than 100 messages per day. As a matter of fact we can say that in general 72 per cent of all phone users have ever send a text. More than the half writes and send messages daily.
How many even use or own a cell phone:
The number of teens who own a cell phone is rather high. Nevertheless it quite surprising that in the year 2011 about 25 per cent of teenagers don’t even have a cell phone. Moreover , he pie chart shows that from 75 per cent teenagers which own a cell phone , only 3 per cent don’t send messages.
Summing up , it can be said that the number of teens which own a cell phone is very high and that nearly everybody how owns one texts.
Habe Herbstprüfung und ich habe am meisten Probleme mit dem beschreiben von Graphen würde bitten mir zu helfen. :)
LG und Danke im Voraus.
Englisch Text. Life in a big city - KORREKTUREN
Hi:) Ich muss ein Englisch Aufsatzt über das Leben in einer Großstadt schreiben. Also die Vorteile und Nachteile aufzählen. Findet ihr bei meinem Text hier irgendwelchen GRAMMATIKALISCHEN Fehler? Verbesserungsviorschläge? Ichh weiß das hier ist keine Hausaufgabnhilfe, aber es sind ja auch keine Hausaufgaben:)
*First of all I would like to say, that I think, that the life in a city is better and more interesting, as in a city are many activities to occupy your time, for example you can go in a disco,cinema or you can go shopping as well. However in cities it’s very noisy, but for those people who wants to relax at a calm place, they can go in a park, where they can read a book on a bench or they can go in a library. They also could meet friends in a café or restaurant. In addition in a city you have countless job opportunities, as many companies and shops are situated there. Nevertheless the cost-of-living in a city is higher than in the countryside. I think that’s an important disadvantage, which you should know. Especially the rent or the food is more expensive in the city. Furthermore cities are polluted and there is a high rate of crime. Therefore many parents want their kids grow up in the countryside. But a city people have the best chance to work and study, because there are good universities to choose from a big city. Because of this aspect I want to live in a big city later. On the other hand I think a big disadvantage is that a city is really crowed with cars especially in the rush hours. Many people try to go by bus metro to work to avoid the traffic jams, but mostly the transportation are unreliable an you come late to work. In conclusion I think the life in a city is better, mainly because of the job opportunities and the activities. As well I think, that the advantages prevails the disadvantages. *
Ist dieser Englisch text richtig?
Everybody loves holidays because during our holidays we can relax and have fun.I strongly believe that all students and teaching staff are looking for winter holiday because it is a break for we all. We can have more free time to do what we want during this period of time. We can sleep and stay up as long as we want to and don’t need to worry about getting up late for class the next day morning.
Hallo könnte wer mein englisch Referat kontrollieren?
What is factory farming ?. Factory Farming is a way of producing meat and other animal products quickly and cheaply. The animals are kept in small cages. They get special food, so they are growing faster. The main products of this industry are meat, milk and eggs for human consumption. Advantages: Cheaper prices With the use of factory farms, the prices of food became very cheap. The main reason for this is that the food can be processed very fast. Also, the food for the animals is very cheap, because they buy it in mass orders. Enough animal products for the market Factory farms use vitamins, minerals, and other substances that make animals grow faster and so they can produce much more food. Big farms also have modern tools which helps to produce meat, milk, eggs and other products very quickly and in an efficient way.
Disadvantages: Very bad living conditions In many factory farms the animals are kept in small cages, where they don’t have any space to walk around and do what they naturally do. The animals are usually kept indoor, so they don’t get any fresh air or sun. The cages are not cleaned as often as it is necessary, so the living conditions for the animals are very bad.
Bad for people’s health Factory farms are bad for people’s health in two ways. One of these is the pollution what they produce, which harm the health of the people who are living next to them. The other way is through the antibiotics that they give their animals to make them immune against illnesses. These can be transmitted to people from the meat and other animal products.
Small farming businesses haven’t a chance against factory farms Many factory farms are owned by corporations, who have the possibility to buy modern tools, equipment and larger spaces for the animals. They’re able to sell their products at a lower price. Smaller farms usually don’t have the resources to buy faster and bigger machines and therefore they can’t compete with their larger rivals.